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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 09:56, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

~~The lead is overall not well-structured, so please adapt this version (when you think there are things wrong, please tell me ;)) →~~

"Day-In-Day-Out" is a song recorded by English singer David Bowie, serving as the opening track for his seventeenth studio album, Never Let Me Down (1987). It was issued as a single on 23 March 1987 ahead of the record's release. The recording was solely written by Bowie, while production was handled by him along with David Richards. An R&B track, "Day-In-Day-Out" lyrically criticizes the urban decay and deprivation in American cities at that time, and deals with the depths a young mother has to sink to feed her child, including attempting to shoplift and becoming a prostitute.

An accompanying music video for the single was shot in 1987, being banned by some stations as a result of its content, although it was still nominated for a 1987 MTV Video Music award in the category of "Best Male Video". Commercially, "Day-In-Day-Out" was the most successful single from Never Let Me Down, peaking at number 17 in the United Kingdom alongside charting within the top 40 in several other countries.

Infobox

~~You need alternative text for the cover art (alt=), where you describe in one sentence what the user sees on the cover~~

For the recording place, please adapt the style from this article

Remove "Pop-rock" as only R&B is cited throughout the article's body

EMI – EA230 → Remove "– EA230"

David Bowie David Richards → state only "Bowie" here

~~Please remove the 7" Single Cover as it is overfluous to the article and brings nothing to it.~~

Song production

~~There are overall issues, which are uncomfortable to list note by note, so I'll proceed like in the lead. Here's my version; please tell me if you have something against it:~~

Background and development
"Day-In Day-Out" was written by Bowie at his home in Montreux, Switzerland, along with the rest of the material on Never Let Me Down in mid-1986.[1] It was recorded in autumn 1987 at Mountain Studios.[As citation, use media AV citation to reference the liner notes of the album → see this (ref 3) as an example). The singer penned the song out of concern for the treatment of homeless people in the United States,[2] a foray into social commentary that he would further pursue with his grunge-precursor band Tin Machine two years later.[3]
Musically, the recording approaches the R&B genre,[4] being reminiscent of some of Bowie's R&B work in the 1970s,[5] with one author saying that "Day-In-Day-Out" is "an example of Bowie's strength in the R&B genre."[4] The lyrics of the song were compared to those of Dolly Parton's "9 to 5" (1980), and deal with the depths a young mother has to sink to feed her child. [4] Bowie claimed the song was selected as the lead-off single for Never Let Me Down "more as a statement of energy" about the album, as opposed to directly trying for a chart-topping single.[1] It was released on 23 March 1987 by EMI as a... (please write the release details here; I will find references for them after you've added them) It featured B-side single "Julie", which was described by Bowie biographer David Buckley as the "catchiest" song of all tracks from the album, and lamented that it was relegated to mere B-side status.[6] Biographer Nicholas Pegg agreed, calling it "arguably one of the best tracks from the whole [Never Let Me Down recording] session," and thought it might have been a hit if Bowie had released it as a single on its own.[3]
A Spanish-language version of "Day-In-Day-Out", known as "Al Alba" or "Dia Tras Dia", was recorded in 1987 in order to boost interest in Bowie's first-ever concerts in Spain as part of his worldwide Glass Spider Tour. (1987) It earned a single airing on Spanish radio prior to the concerts and was never released as a standard single, although it was made available for digital download in 2007.[3]

Done. I made one or two minor changes ("The lyrics of the song were compared to Dolly Parton's..." -> "The lyrics of the song were compared by one author to Dolly Parton's..."), and I hope I got what you were going for about its release correct (the "please write the release details here") part. Apologies if I missed the point.

Music video

~~Rename "Video production" to "Development and production"~~

Link "Los Angeles"

"not going to sell the song at all," → " before ,

All done

and was designed to explore music video as a storytelling format rather than promoting the song itself → I don't get what you want to state here

I changed the wording to "...as a storytelling format over promoting the song itself..." hoping that provides clarity. let me know if not

Connect the first and second paragraph

saying "I do the → comma before "saying"

Connect the third and fourth paragraphs

showing the young couple's → showing a young couple's

watched by a pair of angels through fake video cameras. → overfluous here; please remove

All done

This was banned by some TV stations (though contrary to popular belief, not the BBC, who showed the first part of the video on their "Top of the Pops" music show), even after edits removed the female protagonist's heavily implied rape, and swapped in an alternate version of a scene where the couple's child spells out "Mom", "Food" and "Fuck" in building blocks. These blocks represented the child's cycle of dependency; the alternate version had the child spell out the meaningless words "Mom", "Look" and "Luck" → many things here are not backed up by the source, so please state instead: In order to it being played on television, it was edited to omit some scenes, including "a young man urinating on Ronald Reagan's star on the Hollywood Walk of Fame" and "a shot of the most famous four-letter word and a few other scenes not suitable for family viewing".

Wow I didn't realize the sources were out of synch on this. Pegg's book does explicitly talk about the blocks and their edits and meaning, so I re-arranged things a little to keep that bit in. I also added the bit about Reagan's star. Let me know if you think what's left needs additional cleanup.

to roller skate for the video. In 2013, Selznik recalled the experience, saying "David → to roller skate for the video, recalling in 2013, "David

~~Done. Thanks for your feedback.~~

Critical reception

~~You need a lead sentence here, such as: Upon its release, "Day-In Day-Out" was received mixed reviews from music critics.~~

although sources did find → although various publications did find

for on one hand it was "a pretty fine song", but on the other, it "[encapsulated] everything → for on one hand being "a pretty fine song", but on the other side "[encapsulating] everything

about the album: "Somewhere in → about the album. He concluded, "Somewhere in

as the "catchiest" song of all the songs → "song" two times; change the first instance to "track"

and lamented that the song → change here to "recording"

relegated to mere b-side status → B-side

session," and → " before ,

~~Btw, I've fixed the remaining "Music video" section by myself, feel free to give feedback~~

All this is done. I love your edits, thank you for making this a stronger article.

Track listing

I think it's best to remove this section, and I can tell you why: 1) This is not reliably sourced, and it's extremely hard to reference this with data from Discogs, if not impossible, as this is old. 2) You have this already in "Background and release" with "multiple 7" and 12" single formats"

Is Discogs.com a reputable source? I checked, and in fact all the releases (except, coincidentally, the 2007 digital re-release) are in fact up there. I'm happy to add them if it's an approved source. if not, I'm happy to delete. Just let me know. 87Fan (talk) 17:33, 7 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Last things to do

@87Fan: Here are the last things you need to do before I'll pass this:

Reference all the entries from the track listing. For this, search the releases on Discogs and add a cite AV media note to every release with the barcode adapted from that site (just like I did in Background and release with ref 7 and 8).
~~Fix the charts: Please use templates here, like here. If you have problems with them, let me know.~~

Outcome

Gladly passing; I've done the remaining points by myself! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:45, 8 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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