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Review

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@Adavidb: Thank you for reviewing this draft and making some improvements, including the table displaying election results. Is the draft now in a state where you'd be comfortable moving it to David Trone (in the main space)? I'm not sure if admin rights are needed to move a draft over a redirect page. Inkian Jason (talk) 15:36, 20 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I am not familiar with the WP process for draft article review and conversion to the main space. As an individual editor, I believe the current content is sufficient and appropriate for a new WP article. Some editors may continue to question the subject's notability, though my opinion is that his congressional run and runner-up result are shown to have had significant coverage by independent reliable sources (per WP:NPOL). If/when the article is properly approved as a draft, I understand its content can be used to overwrite the current David Trone redirect, without a need for admin rights. —ADavidB 16:52, 20 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Adavidb: No problem, but thanks for your feedback and improvements to the article. I will wait for another editor to move the article to main space. Inkian Jason (talk) 19:20, 20 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Plum3600: Thank you for reviewing this draft. However, I was surprised to see the draft declined simply because another draft for David Trone exists. I addressed this in my AfC comment, and I don't think the existence of another draft, which was created independently, should be held against this one's move into the main space. Do you have any concerns about this draft specifically? Inkian Jason (talk) 18:00, 6 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Inkian Jason: I declined the draft because there was an article that already exists. All the information you have added to your draft you can simply add it in the existing article. If you don't want to move all the information in your draft to the existing article I will gladly do it since you've put a lot of your effort into the draft already. I made a draft once and I put a lot of effort in it only for it to be declined because the person wasn't notable. So if you want me to move the information let me know. Plum3600 (talk) 18:14, 6 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
See related discussion here: User_talk:Inkian_Jason#Draft:Trone. Inkian Jason (talk) 16:03, 7 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Inkian Jason: I've just seen that you were paid to write this draft. I don't know much about being paid on Wikipedia. I think this draft will have to be reviewed by a user that's more experienced. I'm really sorry. Plum3600 (talk) 16:32, 7 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Plum3600: No problem. The draft has been moved into the main space by another editor. Thanks again! Inkian Jason (talk) 16:40, 7 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

AfC comment

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I was asked to move the AfC comment to the talk page, which I am pasting below:

  • Comment: On behalf of David Trone and Hickman Analytics, I am submitting an article about this businessman as part of my work at Beutler Ink. Given my conflict of interest, I will not publish the article to the main space and ask independent editors to review this article for accuracy, neutrality, and verifiability. Throughout this project, Mr. Trone provided feedback to ensure the article's accuracy. Neutrality was also a top priority, and I was careful to keep details about Mr. Trone and Total Wine & More on their respective articles. I am more than happy to address any questions or concerns that may arise during the review process.
    :One more thing to note: In the process of saving this draft, I came across the page Draft:David Trone. The draft I am submitting was written completely independently of the submission declined on 19 September 2016 by Lor. No attribution to Draft:David Trone is needed, and I assume the declined draft can just be redirected to the David Trone article, assuming this new draft is moved to the main space.
    :Thanks in advance for your consideration and help. -Inkian Jason (talk) 16:42, 28 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Inkian Jason (talk) 16:35, 7 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Edit request to update article

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Resolved

On behalf of David Trone and Hickman Analytics, as part of my work with Beutler Ink, I am back with an edit request to update this article.

"Personal life" section

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Here are my proposed changes for the "Personal life" section:

1. The Trone Center for Criminal Justice Reform is now known as the Trone Center for Justice and Equality, per this source.

2. I propose adding the following sentence, per this source: "Trone serves as chair of the Trone Private Sector and Education Advisory Council at the ACLU Trone Center."

3. I propose the following update regarding the Suburban Hospital donation, his op-ed about his nephew's death, and contribution to the Catholic Legal Immigration Network to support locals affected by Trump's travel ban: "In mid 2017, the Trones donated $2.5 million to Bethesda, Maryland's Suburban Hospital, marking the hospital's fifth largest contribution received to date. Funding will support mental and behavioral health services, and improvements to the Old Georgetown Road campus. The couple's donation was inspired by their nephew's death from an opioid overdose in late 2016.[1][2][3] Trone wrote an op-ed for The Baltimore Sun, in which he recounted his nephew's death, and expressed opposition to the Donald Trump administration's proposed elimination of the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act's drug treatment requirement.[2] The David and June Trone Family Foundation contributed $100,000 to the Catholic Legal Immigration Network in mid 2017 to support locals affected by Trump's travel ban, which the couple called "outrageously egregious". The Trones also donated to the ACLU's Montgomery County affiliate, the Latino immigrant organization CASA, and Interfaith Works.[3][4][5]"

If these changes look good, I recommend copying and pasting all of the following markup over the existing markup for the "Personal life" section:

Proposed text (changes in green text)

In addition to political contributions, Trone and his wife have supported a number of philanthropic efforts. They have been major contributors to the ACLU since 1994.[6][7] Their $15 million donation in 2015 supported the organization's efforts to promote criminal justice reform and improve employment opportunities for former prisoners,[8][9][7] and established the Trone Center for Criminal Justice Reform (now known as the Trone Center for Justice and Equality)[10] at ACLU's national headquarters.[11] Trone serves as chair of the Trone Private Sector and Education Advisory Council at the ACLU Trone Center.[7][12] In 2016, the couple pledged $5 million to establish the Trone Family Public Policy Initiative Fund at their alma mater, the Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania.[13][14] The fund supports research "promoting clear, fact-driven, accessible knowledge to stimulate policies that benefit the American public".[13]

In mid 2017, the Trones donated $2.5 million to Bethesda, Maryland's Suburban Hospital, marking the hospital's fifth largest contribution received to date. Funding will support mental and behavioral health services, and improvements to the Old Georgetown Road campus. The couple's donation was inspired by their nephew's death from an opioid overdose in late 2016.[15][2][3] Trone wrote an op-ed for The Baltimore Sun, in which he recounted his nephew's death, and expressed opposition to the Donald Trump administration's proposed elimination of the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act's drug treatment requirement.[2] The David and June Trone Family Foundation contributed $100,000 to the Catholic Legal Immigration Network in mid 2017 to support locals affected by Trump's travel ban, which the couple called "outrageously egregious". The Trones also donated to the ACLU's Montgomery County affiliate, the Latino immigrant organization CASA, and Interfaith Works.[3][4][5]

Trone has served on the Bullis School's board of trustees since 2006.[16] He serves on the industry advisory board of Wharton's Baker Retailing Center, which includes "global retail executives who contribute to our mission to be a worldwide leader in retail knowledge".[17] He is also a trustee of the Baltimore Symphony Orchestra and Furman University,[18][19] where the Trone Student Center was dedicated in 2013 and named for Trone and his wife, in honor of their $3.5 million contribution.[20]

In 2012, Kids Enjoy Exercise Now (KEEN) Greater DC gave Trone the "Distinguished Service Award" for his many contributions to the organization, which provides recreational programs for children with developmental and physical disabilities.[21] He was honored at the 2014 Ernst & Young Entrepreneur of the Year Awards Greater Washington, in the "large company" category.[22] In 2015, Trone was invited by the American University's Kennedy Political Union and the Kogod School of Business to speak to students and faculty about entrepreneurship and business leadership.[23] He was awarded the Anti-Defamation League's annual achievement award in 2016.[24] In 2016, Trone joined the boards of American University and the Montgomery County Chamber of Commerce.[25][26]

In 2017, Trone received Furman University's Carl F. Kohrt Distinguished Alumni Award, which is presented "to an alumnus in recognition of significant professional or personal accomplishments and in gratitude for continued loyalty".[27] Trone's contributions to Furman include a $5 million grant for a student center and to create men's and women's lacrosse teams, and the lead $500,000 gift for the Riley Foundation's endowment to support disadvantaged South Carolina students.[27][28] He served on the university's board of trustees from 2010 to 2016.[27]

As of 2016, the Trones live in Potomac, Maryland.[8][29][30]

References

References

  1. ^ Zimmermann, Joe (May 1, 2017). "David Trone's Foundation Donates $2.5 Million to Suburban Hospital". Bethesda. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  2. ^ a b c d Turque, Bill (June 15, 2017). "David Trone stays high profile as he considers political future". The Washington Post. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  3. ^ a b c d Metcalf, Andrew (June 1, 2017). "Trone Donates to Legal Fund To Assist Local Families Potentially Impacted by Trump's Proposed Travel Ban". Bethesda. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  4. ^ a b Turque, Bill (June 1, 2017). "Trone to fund legal aid for families who could be impacted by travel ban". The Washington Post. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  5. ^ a b Kazour, Mona (June 2, 2017). "Legal Assistance for Montgomery County Families Affected By Trump Travel Ban". Bethesda Patch. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  6. ^ Cite error: The named reference Peck was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  7. ^ a b c Hsu, Spencer S. (December 21, 2015). "Total Wine co-founder funding $15 million push to aid ex-convicts". The Washington Post. Retrieved December 1, 2016.
  8. ^ a b Cite error: The named reference Turque was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  9. ^ Cite error: The named reference Stolberg was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  10. ^ Judge, Monique (June 9, 2017). "ACLU Makes the Case for Giving Formerly Incarcerated a Fair Chance at Employment". The Root. Gizmodo Media Group. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  11. ^ "ACLU Announces New Trone Center for Criminal Justice Reform and Advisory Board of Private Sector and Education Leaders to Promote Reintegration". American Civil Liberties Union. December 21, 2016. Retrieved December 1, 2016.
  12. ^ "Business Notes: Leadership Montgomery Announces 2018 Participants". Bethesda. June 22, 2017. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  13. ^ a b Cite error: The named reference Wharton was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  14. ^ Cite error: The named reference DiStefano was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  15. ^ Zimmermann, Joe (May 1, 2017). "David Trone's Foundation Donates $2.5 Million to Suburban Hospital". Bethesda. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  16. ^ "Trustees". Bullis School. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  17. ^ "Industry Advisory Board". Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  18. ^ Fritze, John (March 4, 2016). "David Trone would be among wealthiest members of Congress". The Baltimore Sun. tronc. ISSN 1930-8965. Retrieved January 30, 2017.
  19. ^ "Board of Directors". Baltimore Symphony Orchestra. Retrieved January 30, 2017.
  20. ^ Cite error: The named reference Furman was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  21. ^ "Annual Report 2012" (PDF). KEEN Greater DC. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  22. ^ Koeppen, Brynn (June 20, 2014). "Ernst and Young Entrepreneur of the Year Awards Greater Washington Revealed: ECS Federal, Matchbox Among Winners". WashingtonExec. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  23. ^ Cite error: The named reference Rozen was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  24. ^ Schere, Daniel (April 20, 2016). "Did ADL endorse David Trone?". Washington Jewish Week. ISSN 0746-9373. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  25. ^ American University:
  26. ^ "Board of Directors". Montgomery County Chamber of Commerce. Retrieved February 23, 2017.
  27. ^ a b c Felicien, Tesalon. "Total Wine and More's David Trone to receive distinguished Furman award". The Greenville News. Greenville, South Carolina: Gannett Company. Retrieved February 23, 2017.
  28. ^ Dabbs, Kate Hofler; Hildreth, Evan (December 1, 2012). "Raising Up Riley: An Endowment for the Riley Institute". Furman University. Retrieved February 23, 2017.
  29. ^ Turque, Bill (April 12, 2016). "David Trone spends $9.1 million of his own money on Md. congressional race". The Washington Post. Retrieved December 1, 2016.
  30. ^ "Total Wine co-owner will fund his run for Congress". Washington Business Journal. American City Business Journals. January 28, 2016. Retrieved December 1, 2016.
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In addition to political contributions, Trone and his wife have supported a number of philanthropic efforts. They have been major contributors to the ACLU since 1994.<ref name=Peck/><ref name="Hsu">{{cite news|last1=Hsu|first1=Spencer S.|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/public-safety/total-wine-co-founder-funds-15-million-aclu-push-to-aid-ex-convicts/2015/12/18/f046d036-a4f4-11e5-ad3f-991ce3374e23_story.html|title=Total Wine co-founder funding $15 million push to aid ex-convicts|accessdate=December 1, 2016|work=The Washington Post|date=December 21, 2015}}</ref> Their $15 million donation in 2015 supported the organization's efforts to promote criminal justice reform and improve employment opportunities for former [[prisoners]],<ref name=Turque/><ref name=Stolberg/><ref name=Hsu/> and established the Trone Center for Criminal Justice Reform (now known as the Trone Center for Justice and Equality)<ref name="Root">{{cite news|last1=Judge|first1=Monique|title=ACLU Makes the Case for Giving Formerly Incarcerated a Fair Chance at Employment|url=http://www.theroot.com/aclu-makes-the-case-for-giving-formerly-incarcerated-a-1795948983|accessdate=July 6, 2017|work=[[The Root (magazine)|The Root]]|publisher=[[Gizmodo Media Group]]|date=June 9, 2017}}</ref> at ACLU's national headquarters.<ref>{{cite web|title=ACLU Announces New Trone Center for Criminal Justice Reform and Advisory Board of Private Sector and Education Leaders to Promote Reintegration|url=https://www.aclu.org/news/aclu-announces-new-trone-center-criminal-justice-reform-and-advisory-board-private-sector-and|publisher=[[American Civil Liberties Union]]|accessdate=December 1, 2016|date=December 21, 2016}}</ref> Trone serves as chair of the Trone Private Sector and Education Advisory Council at the ACLU Trone Center.<ref name=Hsu/><ref name="Leadership">{{cite journal|title=Business Notes: Leadership Montgomery Announces 2018 Participants|journal=Bethesda|date=June 22, 2017|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2017/Business-Notes-Leadership-Montgomery-Announces-2018-Participants/|accessdate=July 6, 2017}}</ref> In 2016, the couple pledged $5 million to establish the Trone Family Public Policy Initiative Fund at their alma mater, the Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania.<ref name=Wharton/><ref name=DiStefano/> The fund supports research "promoting clear, fact-driven, accessible knowledge to stimulate policies that benefit the American public".<ref name=Wharton/>

In mid 2017, the Trones donated $2.5 million to [[Bethesda, Maryland]]'s [[Suburban Hospital]], marking the hospital's fifth largest contribution received to date. Funding will support mental and behavioral health services, and improvements to the Old Georgetown Road campus. The couple's donation was inspired by their nephew's death from an opioid overdose in late 2016.<ref>{{cite journal|last1=Zimmermann|first1=Joe|title=David Trone's Foundation Donates $2.5 Million to Suburban Hospital|journal=Bethesda|date=May 1, 2017|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2017/David-Trones-Foundation-Donates-25-Million-to-Suburban-Hospital/|accessdate=July 6, 2017}}</ref><ref name="HighProfile">{{cite news|last1=Turque|first1=Bill|title=David Trone stays high profile as he considers political future|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/david-trone-stays-high-profile-as-he-considers-political-future/2017/06/15/a3344cca-5163-11e7-be25-3a519335381c_story.html|accessdate=July 6, 2017|work=The Washington Post|date=June 15, 2017}}</ref><ref name="Metcalf">{{cite journal|last1=Metcalf|first1=Andrew|title=Trone Donates to Legal Fund To Assist Local Families Potentially Impacted by Trump’s Proposed Travel Ban|journal=Bethesda|date=June 1, 2017|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2017/Trone-Donates-to-Legal-Fund-To-Assist-Local-Families-Potentially-Impacted-by-Trumps-Proposed-Travel-Ban/|accessdate=July 6, 2017}}</ref> Trone wrote an [[op-ed]] for ''[[The Baltimore Sun]]'', in which he recounted his nephew's death, and expressed opposition to the [[Presidency of Donald Trump|Donald Trump administration's]] proposed elimination of the [[Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act]]'s drug treatment requirement.<ref name=HighProfile/> The David and June Trone Family Foundation contributed $100,000 to the [[Catholic Legal Immigration Network]] in mid 2017 to support locals affected by Trump's travel ban, which the couple called "outrageously egregious". The Trones also donated to the ACLU's Montgomery County affiliate, the Latino immigrant organization CASA, and Interfaith Works.<ref name=Metcalf/><ref name="LegalAid">{{cite news|last1=Turque|first1=Bill|title=Trone to fund legal aid for families who could be impacted by travel ban|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/trone-to-fund-legal-aid-for-families-who-could-be-impacted-by-travel-ban/2017/06/01/9745caee-46ee-11e7-bcde-624ad94170ab_story.html?utm_term=.aef7d81eacdf|accessdate=July 6, 2017|work=The Washington Post|date=June 1, 2017}}</ref><ref name="Kazour">{{cite news|last1=Kazour|first1=Mona|title=Legal Assistance for Montgomery County Families Affected By Trump Travel Ban|url=https://patch.com/maryland/bethesda-chevychase/legal-assistance-montgomery-county-families-affected-trump-travel-ban|accessdate=July 6, 2017|work=Bethesda Patch|date=June 2, 2017}}</ref>

Trone has served on the [[Bullis School]]'s board of trustees since 2006.<ref>{{cite web|title=Trustees|url=http://www.bullis.org/page.cfm?p=963|publisher=[[Bullis School]]|accessdate=December 21, 2016}}</ref> He serves on the industry advisory board of Wharton's Baker Retailing Center, which includes "global retail executives who contribute to our mission to be a worldwide leader in retail knowledge".<ref>{{cite web|title=Industry Advisory Board|url=https://bakerretail.wharton.upenn.edu/industry/industry-advisory-board/|publisher=Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania|accessdate=December 21, 2016}}</ref> He is also a trustee of the [[Baltimore Symphony Orchestra]] and Furman University,<ref name="Fritze">{{cite news|last1=Fritze|first1=John|title=David Trone would be among wealthiest members of Congress|url=http://www.baltimoresun.com/news/maryland/politics/blog/bal-david-trone-would-be-among-wealthiest-members-of-congress-20160304-story.html|accessdate=January 30, 2017|work=[[The Baltimore Sun]]|date=March 4, 2016|publisher=[[tronc]]|issn=1930-8965}}</ref><ref name="BSO">{{cite web|title=Board of Directors|url=https://www.bsomusic.org/about/administration/board-of-directors.aspx|publisher=[[Baltimore Symphony Orchestra]]|accessdate=January 30, 2017}}</ref> where the Trone Student Center was dedicated in 2013 and named for Trone and his wife, in honor of their $3.5 million contribution.<ref name=Furman/>

In 2012, Kids Enjoy Exercise Now (KEEN) Greater DC gave Trone the "Distinguished Service Award" for his many contributions to the organization, which provides recreational programs for children with developmental and physical disabilities.<ref name="KEEN">{{cite web|title=Annual Report 2012|url=http://www.keengreaterdc.org/sites/default/files/KEENGDC_Annual_Report_2012_Final.pdf|publisher=KEEN Greater DC|accessdate=December 21, 2016|format=PDF}}</ref> He was honored at the 2014 [[Ernst & Young]] Entrepreneur of the Year Awards Greater Washington, in the "large company" category.<ref>{{cite news|last1=Koeppen|first1=Brynn|title=Ernst and Young Entrepreneur of the Year Awards Greater Washington Revealed: ECS Federal, Matchbox Among Winners|url=http://www.washingtonexec.com/2014/06/ernst-young-entrepreneur-year-awards-greater-washington-revealed-ecs-federal-matchbox-among-winners/#.WFrjg7SJmlI|accessdate=December 21, 2016|work=WashingtonExec|date=June 20, 2014}}</ref> In 2015, Trone was invited by the [[American University]]'s Kennedy Political Union and the [[Kogod School of Business]] to speak to students and faculty about entrepreneurship and business leadership.<ref name=Rozen/> He was awarded the [[Anti-Defamation League]]'s annual achievement award in 2016.<ref name="Schere">{{cite journal|last1=Schere|first1=Daniel|title=Did ADL endorse David Trone?|url=http://washingtonjewishweek.com/30718/did-adl-endorse-david-trone/featured-slider-post/|accessdate=December 21, 2016|work=[[Washington Jewish Week]]|date=April 20, 2016|issn=0746-9373}}</ref> In 2016, Trone joined the boards of [[American University]] and the Montgomery County Chamber of Commerce.<ref>American University: * {{cite web|title=Current Trustees|url=http://www.american.edu/trustees/Current-Trustees.cfm|publisher=[[American University]]|accessdate=February 23, 2017}} * {{cite web|title=Board of Trustees Late Fall 2016 Meeting Summary|url=http://www.american.edu/trustees/Announcement-November-30-2016.cfm|publisher=American University|accessdate=February 23, 2017}}</ref><ref>{{cite web|title=Board of Directors|url=http://www.mcccmd.com/about-mccc/board-directory/board-directors|publisher=Montgomery County Chamber of Commerce|accessdate=February 23, 2017}}</ref>

In 2017, Trone received Furman University's Carl F. Kohrt Distinguished Alumni Award, which is presented "to an alumnus in recognition of significant professional or personal accomplishments and in gratitude for continued loyalty".<ref name="Felicien">{{cite news|last1=Felicien|first1=Tesalon|title=Total Wine and More's David Trone to receive distinguished Furman award|url=http://www.greenvilleonline.com/story/money/business/2017/02/21/total-wine-and-mores-david-trone-receive-distinguished-furman-award/98190412/|accessdate=February 23, 2017|work=[[The Greenville News]]|publisher=Gannett Company|location=Greenville, South Carolina}}</ref> Trone's contributions to Furman include a $5 million grant for a student center and to create men's and women's lacrosse teams, and the lead $500,000 gift for the Riley Foundation's endowment to support disadvantaged South Carolina students.<ref name=Felicien/><ref name="Dabbs">{{cite web|last1=Dabbs|first1=Kate Hofler|first2=Evan|last2=Hildreth|title=Raising Up Riley: An Endowment for the Riley Institute|url=https://news.furman.edu/2012/12/01/raising-up-riley-an-endowment-for-the-riley-institute/|publisher=Furman University|accessdate=February 23, 2017|date=December 1, 2012}}</ref> He served on the university's board of trustees from 2010 to 2016.<ref name=Felicien/>

As of 2016, the Trones live in [[Potomac, Maryland]].<ref name=Turque/><ref name="Spends">{{cite news|last1=Turque|first1=Bill|title=David Trone spends $9.1 million of his own money on Md. congressional race|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/david-trone-spends-91-million-of-his-own-money-on-md-congressional-race/2016/04/12/29f5827c-00c2-11e6-b823-707c79ce3504_story.html|accessdate=December 1, 2016|work=The Washington Post|date=April 12, 2016}}</ref><ref>{{cite journal|title=Total Wine co-owner will fund his run for Congress|journal=Washington Business Journal|date=January 28, 2016|url=http://www.bizjournals.com/washington/morning_call/2016/01/total-wine-coowner-will-fund-his-run-for-congress.html|accessdate=December 1, 2016|publisher=[[American City Business Journals]]}}</ref>

I've reviewed the first two edit request and added them, though worded slightly just to make the lead flow a bit better. I'm looking over the rest now. RickinBaltimore (talk) 17:22, 24 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@RickinBaltimore: Thank you for your help! I look forward to hearing your thoughts on the third request, and the addition of the links below. Inkian Jason (talk) 21:38, 24 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment: (as other eyes"). Yes this reads as promotional, as is what is already in the article. Please refer to an article on a great person I know Richard Devos. Also then Betsy Devos (two degrees of separation?). My first suggestion is to rename the section to "Philanthropy" and "Political involvement' or "Philanthropy and activism" as theirs are, respectively. If this is just added in entirety to the Personal Life section, it appears to give too much weight and if it were in a section just for this content, at least it is named for what you wish to brag about. Also notice how factually stated both Devos's articles are: 'he gives this', she does that'. Your proposed clause "marking the hospital's fifth largest contribution received to date" is cringeworthy. Some of the quotes such as those alongside Furman's Alumni Award, could be trimmed, if it is stated in the linked text: ie:..and in gratitude for continued loyalty.". We already know by the name of the award he is a Distinguished Alumni. The addition for the nephew needs to be added in some form since I have already added the 'other reading' section, but less (reword and stop after the Baltimore Sun perhaps).. Thank you for inviting opinions. I too am unsure this should be added without amendments. Fylbecatulous talk 18:19, 30 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Fylbecatulous: Thank you for taking a look at the proposed text. I've made some changes based on your feedback:
In mid 2017, the Trones donated $2.5 million to Bethesda, Maryland's Suburban Hospital to support mental and behavioral health services and make improvements to the Old Georgetown Road campus. The couple's donation was inspired by their nephew's death from an opioid overdose in late 2016.[1][2][3] Trone wrote an op-ed for The Baltimore Sun, in which he recounted his nephew's death, and expressed opposition to the Donald Trump administration's proposed elimination of the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act's drug treatment requirement.[2] The David and June Trone Family Foundation contributed $100,000 to the Catholic Legal Immigration Network in mid 2017 to support locals affected by Trump's travel ban, which the couple called "outrageously egregious". The Trones also donated to the ACLU's Montgomery County affiliate, the Latino immigrant organization CASA, and Interfaith Works.[3][4][5]
This version removes "marking the hospital's fifth largest contribution received to date", and merges the first two sentences. I left mention of their nephew's death from an opioid overdose. Regarding the Baltimore Sun op-ed, how do you feel about keeping mentions of his nephew and the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act if the "Personal life" section is split into "Philanthropy" and "Personal life" sections? This might help address concerns about undue weight, and I think it's important to describe politicians' stances on legislation and other policies, such as the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act and the president's travel ban. (You suggested "Philanthropy and political involvement", but I think this might be a confusing title since there is a section above describing Mr. Trone's political career. I am not sure "activism" is the best term of use either, though I will let other editors decide if "Philanthropy and activism" is preferred over just "Philanthropy".)
If you are ok with the slightly trimmed proposed text, I suggest the following markup for the "Philanthropy" and "Personal life" sections:

 Works for me. Fylbecatulous talk 09:08, 1 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Proposed "Philanthropy" and "Personal life" text
Philanthropy

In addition to political contributions, Trone and his wife have supported a number of philanthropic efforts. They have been major contributors to the ACLU since 1994.[6][7] Their $15 million donation in 2015 supported the organization's efforts to promote criminal justice reform and improve employment opportunities for former prisoners,[8][9][7] and established the Trone Center for Justice and Equality at the organization's national headquarters.[10][11] In 2016, the couple pledged $5 million to establish the Trone Family Public Policy Initiative Fund at their alma mater, the Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania.[12][13] The fund supports research "promoting clear, fact-driven, accessible knowledge to stimulate policies that benefit the American public".[12]

In mid 2017, the Trones donated $2.5 million to Bethesda, Maryland's Suburban Hospital to support mental and behavioral health services and make improvements to the Old Georgetown Road campus. The couple's donation was inspired by their nephew's death from an opioid overdose in late 2016.[14][2][3] The David and June Trone Family Foundation contributed $100,000 to the Catholic Legal Immigration Network in mid 2017 to support locals affected by Trump's travel ban, which the couple called "outrageously egregious". The Trones also donated to the ACLU's Montgomery County affiliate, the Latino immigrant organization CASA, and Interfaith Works.[3][4][5]

Trone's contributions to Furman University include a $5 million grant for a student center and to create men's and women's lacrosse teams, and the lead $500,000 gift for the Riley Foundation's endowment to support disadvantaged South Carolina students.[15][16] The Trone Student Center was dedicated in 2013 and named for Trone and his wife, in honor of their $3.5 million contribution.[17]

Personal life

Trone serves as chair of the Trone Private Sector and Education Advisory Council at the ACLU Trone Center.[7][18] He has served on the Bullis School's board of trustees since 2006.[19] Trone serves on the industry advisory board of Wharton's Baker Retailing Center, which includes "global retail executives who contribute to our mission to be a worldwide leader in retail knowledge".[20] He is also a trustee of the Baltimore Symphony Orchestra and Furman University.[21][22]

In 2012, Kids Enjoy Exercise Now (KEEN) Greater DC gave Trone the "Distinguished Service Award" for his many contributions to the organization, which provides recreational programs for children with developmental and physical disabilities.[23] He was honored at the 2014 Ernst & Young Entrepreneur of the Year Awards Greater Washington, in the "large company" category.[24] In 2015, Trone was invited by the American University's Kennedy Political Union and the Kogod School of Business to speak to students and faculty about entrepreneurship and business leadership.[25] He was awarded the Anti-Defamation League's annual achievement award in 2016.[26] In 2016, Trone joined the boards of American University and the Montgomery County Chamber of Commerce.[27][28]

In 2017, Trone received Furman University's Carl F. Kohrt Distinguished Alumni Award, which is presented "to an alumnus in recognition of significant professional or personal accomplishments and in gratitude for continued loyalty".[15] He served on Furman University's board of trustees from 2010 to 2016.[15] Trone wrote an op-ed for The Baltimore Sun in mid 2017, in which he recounted his nephew's death, and expressed opposition to the Donald Trump administration's proposed elimination of the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act's drug treatment requirement.[2]

As of 2016, the Trones live in Potomac, Maryland.[8][29][30]

References

  1. ^ Zimmermann, Joe (May 1, 2017). "David Trone's Foundation Donates $2.5 Million to Suburban Hospital". Bethesda. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  2. ^ a b c d Turque, Bill (June 15, 2017). "David Trone stays high profile as he considers political future". The Washington Post. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  3. ^ a b c d Metcalf, Andrew (June 1, 2017). "Trone Donates to Legal Fund to Assist Local Families Potentially Impacted by Trump's Proposed Travel Ban". Bethesda. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  4. ^ a b Turque, Bill (June 1, 2017). "Trone to fund legal aid for families who could be impacted by travel ban". The Washington Post. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  5. ^ a b Kazour, Mona (June 2, 2017). "Legal Assistance for Montgomery County Families Affected by Trump Travel Ban". Bethesda Patch. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  6. ^ Cite error: The named reference Peck was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  7. ^ a b c Hsu, Spencer S. (December 21, 2015). "Total Wine co-founder funding $15 million push to aid ex-convicts". The Washington Post. Retrieved December 1, 2016.
  8. ^ a b Cite error: The named reference Turque was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  9. ^ Cite error: The named reference Stolberg was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  10. ^ Judge, Monique (June 9, 2017). "ACLU Makes the Case for Giving Formerly Incarcerated a Fair Chance at Employment". The Root. Gizmodo Media Group. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  11. ^ "ACLU Announces New Trone Center for Criminal Justice Reform and Advisory Board of Private Sector and Education Leaders to Promote Reintegration". American Civil Liberties Union. December 21, 2016. Retrieved December 1, 2016.
  12. ^ a b Cite error: The named reference Wharton was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  13. ^ Cite error: The named reference DiStefano was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  14. ^ Zimmermann, Joe (May 1, 2017). "David Trone's Foundation Donates $2.5 Million to Suburban Hospital". Bethesda. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  15. ^ a b c Felicien, Tesalon. "Total Wine and More's David Trone to receive distinguished Furman award". The Greenville News. Greenville, South Carolina: Gannett Company. Retrieved February 23, 2017.
  16. ^ Dabbs, Kate Hofler; Hildreth, Evan (December 1, 2012). "Raising Up Riley: An Endowment for the Riley Institute". Furman University. Retrieved February 23, 2017.
  17. ^ Cite error: The named reference Furman was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  18. ^ "Business Notes: Leadership Montgomery Announces 2018 Participants". Bethesda. June 22, 2017. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  19. ^ "Trustees". Bullis School. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  20. ^ "Industry Advisory Board". Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  21. ^ Fritze, John (March 4, 2016). "David Trone would be among wealthiest members of Congress". The Baltimore Sun. tronc. ISSN 1930-8965. Retrieved January 30, 2017.
  22. ^ "Board of Directors". Baltimore Symphony Orchestra. Retrieved January 30, 2017.
  23. ^ "Annual Report 2012" (PDF). KEEN Greater DC. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  24. ^ Koeppen, Brynn (June 20, 2014). "Ernst and Young Entrepreneur of the Year Awards Greater Washington Revealed: ECS Federal, Matchbox Among Winners". WashingtonExec. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  25. ^ Cite error: The named reference Rozen was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  26. ^ Schere, Daniel (April 20, 2016). "Did ADL endorse David Trone?". Washington Jewish Week. ISSN 0746-9373. Retrieved December 21, 2016.
  27. ^ American University:
  28. ^ "Board of Directors". Montgomery County Chamber of Commerce. Retrieved February 23, 2017.
  29. ^ Turque, Bill (April 12, 2016). "David Trone spends $9.1 million of his own money on Md. congressional race". The Washington Post. Retrieved December 1, 2016.
  30. ^ "Total Wine co-owner will fund his run for Congress". Washington Business Journal. American City Business Journals. January 28, 2016. Retrieved December 1, 2016.
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=== Philanthropy ===
In addition to political contributions, Trone and his wife have supported a number of philanthropic efforts. They have been major contributors to the ACLU since 1994.<ref name=Peck/><ref name="Hsu">{{cite news|last1=Hsu|first1=Spencer S.|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/public-safety/total-wine-co-founder-funds-15-million-aclu-push-to-aid-ex-convicts/2015/12/18/f046d036-a4f4-11e5-ad3f-991ce3374e23_story.html|title=Total Wine co-founder funding $15 million push to aid ex-convicts|accessdate=December 1, 2016|work=The Washington Post|date=December 21, 2015}}</ref> Their $15 million donation in 2015 supported the organization's efforts to promote criminal justice reform and improve employment opportunities for former [[prisoners]],<ref name=Turque/><ref name=Stolberg/><ref name=Hsu/> and established the Trone Center for Justice and Equality at the organization's national headquarters.<ref name="Root">{{cite news|last1=Judge|first1=Monique|title=ACLU Makes the Case for Giving Formerly Incarcerated a Fair Chance at Employment|url=http://www.theroot.com/aclu-makes-the-case-for-giving-formerly-incarcerated-a-1795948983|accessdate=July 6, 2017|work=[[The Root (magazine)|The Root]]|publisher=[[Gizmodo Media Group]]|date=June 9, 2017}}</ref><ref>{{cite web|title=ACLU Announces New Trone Center for Criminal Justice Reform and Advisory Board of Private Sector and Education Leaders to Promote Reintegration|url=https://www.aclu.org/news/aclu-announces-new-trone-center-criminal-justice-reform-and-advisory-board-private-sector-and|publisher=[[American Civil Liberties Union]]|accessdate=December 1, 2016|date=December 21, 2016}}</ref> In 2016, the couple pledged $5 million to establish the Trone Family Public Policy Initiative Fund at their alma mater, the Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania.<ref name=Wharton/><ref name=DiStefano/> The fund supports research "promoting clear, fact-driven, accessible knowledge to stimulate policies that benefit the American public".<ref name=Wharton/>

In mid 2017, the Trones donated $2.5 million to [[Bethesda, Maryland]]'s [[Suburban Hospital]] to support mental and behavioral health services and make improvements to the Old Georgetown Road campus. The couple's donation was inspired by their nephew's death from an opioid overdose in late 2016.<ref>{{cite journal|last1=Zimmermann|first1=Joe|title=David Trone's Foundation Donates $2.5 Million to Suburban Hospital|journal=Bethesda|date=May 1, 2017|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2017/David-Trones-Foundation-Donates-25-Million-to-Suburban-Hospital/|accessdate=July 6, 2017}}</ref><ref name="HighProfile">{{cite news|last1=Turque|first1=Bill|title=David Trone stays high profile as he considers political future|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/david-trone-stays-high-profile-as-he-considers-political-future/2017/06/15/a3344cca-5163-11e7-be25-3a519335381c_story.html|accessdate=July 6, 2017|work=The Washington Post|date=June 15, 2017}}</ref><ref name="Metcalf">{{cite journal|last1=Metcalf|first1=Andrew|title=Trone Donates to Legal Fund to Assist Local Families Potentially Impacted by Trump's Proposed Travel Ban|journal=Bethesda|date=June 1, 2017|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2017/Trone-Donates-to-Legal-Fund-To-Assist-Local-Families-Potentially-Impacted-by-Trumps-Proposed-Travel-Ban/|accessdate=July 6, 2017}}</ref> The David and June Trone Family Foundation contributed $100,000 to the [[Catholic Legal Immigration Network]] in mid 2017 to support locals affected by Trump's travel ban, which the couple called "outrageously egregious". The Trones also donated to the ACLU's Montgomery County affiliate, the Latino immigrant organization CASA, and Interfaith Works.<ref name=Metcalf/><ref name="LegalAid">{{cite news|last1=Turque|first1=Bill|title=Trone to fund legal aid for families who could be impacted by travel ban|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/trone-to-fund-legal-aid-for-families-who-could-be-impacted-by-travel-ban/2017/06/01/9745caee-46ee-11e7-bcde-624ad94170ab_story.html?utm_term=.aef7d81eacdf|accessdate=July 6, 2017|work=The Washington Post|date=June 1, 2017}}</ref><ref name="Kazour">{{cite news|last1=Kazour|first1=Mona|title=Legal Assistance for Montgomery County Families Affected by Trump Travel Ban|url=https://patch.com/maryland/bethesda-chevychase/legal-assistance-montgomery-county-families-affected-trump-travel-ban|accessdate=July 6, 2017|work=Bethesda Patch|date=June 2, 2017}}</ref>

Trone's contributions to Furman University include a $5 million grant for a student center and to create men's and women's lacrosse teams, and the lead $500,000 gift for the Riley Foundation's endowment to support disadvantaged South Carolina students.<ref name=Felicien/><ref name="Dabbs">{{cite web|last1=Dabbs|first1=Kate Hofler|first2=Evan|last2=Hildreth|title=Raising Up Riley: An Endowment for the Riley Institute|url=https://news.furman.edu/2012/12/01/raising-up-riley-an-endowment-for-the-riley-institute/|publisher=Furman University|accessdate=February 23, 2017|date=December 1, 2012}}</ref> The Trone Student Center was dedicated in 2013 and named for Trone and his wife, in honor of their $3.5 million contribution.<ref name=Furman/>

=== Personal life ===
Trone serves as chair of the Trone Private Sector and Education Advisory Council at the ACLU Trone Center.<ref name=Hsu/><ref name="Leadership">{{cite journal|title=Business Notes: Leadership Montgomery Announces 2018 Participants|journal=Bethesda|date=June 22, 2017|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2017/Business-Notes-Leadership-Montgomery-Announces-2018-Participants/|accessdate=July 6, 2017}}</ref> He has served on the [[Bullis School]]'s board of trustees since 2006.<ref>{{cite web|title=Trustees|url=http://www.bullis.org/page.cfm?p=963|publisher=[[Bullis School]]|accessdate=December 21, 2016}}</ref> Trone serves on the industry advisory board of Wharton's Baker Retailing Center, which includes "global retail executives who contribute to our mission to be a worldwide leader in retail knowledge".<ref>{{cite web|title=Industry Advisory Board|url=https://bakerretail.wharton.upenn.edu/industry/industry-advisory-board/|publisher=Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania|accessdate=December 21, 2016}}</ref> He is also a trustee of the [[Baltimore Symphony Orchestra]] and Furman University.<ref name="Fritze">{{cite news|last1=Fritze|first1=John|title=David Trone would be among wealthiest members of Congress|url=http://www.baltimoresun.com/news/maryland/politics/blog/bal-david-trone-would-be-among-wealthiest-members-of-congress-20160304-story.html|accessdate=January 30, 2017|work=[[The Baltimore Sun]]|date=March 4, 2016|publisher=[[tronc]]|issn=1930-8965}}</ref><ref name="BSO">{{cite web|title=Board of Directors|url=https://www.bsomusic.org/about/administration/board-of-directors.aspx|publisher=[[Baltimore Symphony Orchestra]]|accessdate=January 30, 2017}}</ref>

In 2012, Kids Enjoy Exercise Now (KEEN) Greater DC gave Trone the "Distinguished Service Award" for his many contributions to the organization, which provides recreational programs for children with developmental and physical disabilities.<ref name="KEEN">{{cite web|title=Annual Report 2012|url=http://www.keengreaterdc.org/sites/default/files/KEENGDC_Annual_Report_2012_Final.pdf|publisher=KEEN Greater DC|accessdate=December 21, 2016|format=PDF}}</ref> He was honored at the 2014 [[Ernst & Young]] Entrepreneur of the Year Awards Greater Washington, in the "large company" category.<ref>{{cite news|last1=Koeppen|first1=Brynn|title=Ernst and Young Entrepreneur of the Year Awards Greater Washington Revealed: ECS Federal, Matchbox Among Winners|url=http://www.washingtonexec.com/2014/06/ernst-young-entrepreneur-year-awards-greater-washington-revealed-ecs-federal-matchbox-among-winners/#.WFrjg7SJmlI|accessdate=December 21, 2016|work=WashingtonExec|date=June 20, 2014}}</ref> In 2015, Trone was invited by the [[American University]]'s Kennedy Political Union and the [[Kogod School of Business]] to speak to students and faculty about entrepreneurship and business leadership.<ref name=Rozen/> He was awarded the [[Anti-Defamation League]]'s annual achievement award in 2016.<ref name="Schere">{{cite journal|last1=Schere|first1=Daniel|title=Did ADL endorse David Trone?|url=http://washingtonjewishweek.com/30718/did-adl-endorse-david-trone/featured-slider-post/|accessdate=December 21, 2016|work=[[Washington Jewish Week]]|date=April 20, 2016|issn=0746-9373}}</ref> In 2016, Trone joined the boards of [[American University]] and the Montgomery County Chamber of Commerce.<ref>American University: * {{cite web|title=Current Trustees|url=http://www.american.edu/trustees/Current-Trustees.cfm|publisher=[[American University]]|accessdate=February 23, 2017}} * {{cite web|title=Board of Trustees Late Fall 2016 Meeting Summary|url=http://www.american.edu/trustees/Announcement-November-30-2016.cfm|publisher=American University|accessdate=February 23, 2017}}</ref><ref>{{cite web|title=Board of Directors|url=http://www.mcccmd.com/about-mccc/board-directory/board-directors|publisher=Montgomery County Chamber of Commerce|accessdate=February 23, 2017}}</ref>

In 2017, Trone received Furman University's Carl F. Kohrt Distinguished Alumni Award, which is presented "to an alumnus in recognition of significant professional or personal accomplishments and in gratitude for continued loyalty".<ref name="Felicien">{{cite news|last1=Felicien|first1=Tesalon|title=Total Wine and More's David Trone to receive distinguished Furman award|url=http://www.greenvilleonline.com/story/money/business/2017/02/21/total-wine-and-mores-david-trone-receive-distinguished-furman-award/98190412/|accessdate=February 23, 2017|work=[[The Greenville News]]|publisher=Gannett Company|location=Greenville, South Carolina}}</ref> He served on Furman University's board of trustees from 2010 to 2016.<ref name=Felicien/> Trone wrote an [[op-ed]] for ''[[The Baltimore Sun]]'' in mid 2017, in which he recounted his nephew's death, and expressed opposition to the [[Presidency of Donald Trump|Donald Trump administration's]] proposed elimination of the [[Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act]]'s drug treatment requirement.<ref name=HighProfile/>

As of 2016, the Trones live in [[Potomac, Maryland]].<ref name=Turque/><ref name="Spends">{{cite news|last1=Turque|first1=Bill|title=David Trone spends $9.1 million of his own money on Md. congressional race|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/david-trone-spends-91-million-of-his-own-money-on-md-congressional-race/2016/04/12/29f5827c-00c2-11e6-b823-707c79ce3504_story.html|accessdate=December 1, 2016|work=The Washington Post|date=April 12, 2016}}</ref><ref>{{cite journal|title=Total Wine co-owner will fund his run for Congress|journal=Washington Business Journal|date=January 28, 2016|url=http://www.bizjournals.com/washington/morning_call/2016/01/total-wine-coowner-will-fund-his-run-for-congress.html|accessdate=December 1, 2016|publisher=[[American City Business Journals]]}}</ref>
In this proposed version, the "Philanthropy" section focuses on the Trones' contributions, while the "Personal life" sections focuses on board positions, awards received, the op-ed, and city of residence. If you think wording for these two sections are appropriate, the markup provided above should make for easier copying and pasting. Thanks for your consideration. Inkian Jason (talk) 17:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Accepted, Inkian Jason, thank you for your dedication to your work and I appreciate your revisions. I am going to begin to implement your proposed text and markup without further discussion. I believe, as usual, what we add should be accepted as concensus. Although I have some obligations outside Wikipedia today, I believe with your markup provided (thank you), I can complete this soon. I assume responsibility for this request at this time. All the best, Fylbecatulous talk 09:08, 1 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
 Implemented
Thank you @Inkian Jason:, I have left you a few tick marks and a ping. I entered exactly what you requested (except one duplicate sentence...) please review and if you have no further revisions, or additions, please mark resolved as you prefer. I have reset template to 'answered' to prompt the faithful bot to remove from queue. Fylbecatulous talk 15:31, 1 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Fylbecatulous: Thanks for reviewing and incorporating the proposed text. I wonder if the "Philanthropy" and "Personal life" sections should be standalone sections and not subsections of the "Career" section (sorry, I realize my markup had these as subsections above)? Apart from this, your edits look great, and I appreciate your assistance. Inkian Jason (talk) 16:23, 1 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
checkY. Done and easily so. Why I try to be careful to ask "is there anything else" ? I agree. Thanks for asking. ツ Fylbecatulous talk 19:47, 1 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Edit request to update article

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Resolved

"Further reading" and "External links"

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In addition to the above changes to the "Personal life" section, I propose adding Mr. Trone's op-ed, which was published by The Baltimore Sun, to a "Further reading" section. I assume this is better than including the URL as an inline citation, since he wrote the article. I propose the following markup to place between the "References" section and the "External links":

 Done

==Further reading==

* {{Cite news|url=http://www.baltimoresun.com/news/opinion/oped/bs-ed-op-0615-opioid-home-20170612-story.html|first=David|last=Trone|title=The opioid crisis hits home for Maryland man|date=June 14, 2017|work=[[The Baltimore Sun]]}}

I also propose adding an additional external link to the Montgomery Magazine issue featuring Mr. Trone on the cover and profiled within. If this is appropriate, I suggest the following markup:

 Done

* {{Cite journal|url=http://mydigitalpublication.com/publication/?i=394294#%7Bissue_id:394294,page:0%7D|title=The Art of Leadership|work=Montgomery Magazine|date=April–May 2017}}

I'm looking for a volunteer to help review this request, and I'm happy to address any questions or concerns. @Adavidb, Plum3600, and DragonflySixtyseven: I am pinging you three since you helped review the AfC submission. Thanks for your consideration! Inkian Jason (talk) 21:39, 6 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Inkian Jason, I have unilaterally divided these requests so that I could easily answer the unarguably uncontroversial requests. Simply a matter of checking and adding. Both citations in proper format and these are worthy expansions to article. I am closing this section as answered and will try to review what is still questioned in the partially answered section. if possible, I will comment. Thanks! Fylbecatulous talk 17:15, 30 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Fylbecatulous: Thank you for separating out this edit request, updating the article, and marking as answered. I appreciate your help so far and replied in the section above regarding other changes. Thanks again! Inkian Jason (talk) 17:34, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Clarify" tag

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@Adrey: I am curious why you added the "clarify" tag to the article. The source used as an inline citation says, "While those investigations never resulted in charges against Trone or his client stores, Trone was arrested in 1989 for negotiating quantity discounts on behalf of the stores." In your edit summary, you said "the sentence smacks of spin", but I am not sure why you think this is the case. Are you able to clarify what's wrong, or update the sentence based on sourcing? I have a COI, but I am just trying to improve the article by discussing how the tag can be removed. @Fylbecatulous: Also pinging you in case you wish to help decide whether or not this tag is necessary. Thanks! Inkian Jason (talk) 16:07, 2 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The problem begins when one clicks through to the citation that reads in almost exact text the same as the article: "Trone was arrested in 1989 for negotiating quantity discounts on behalf of the stores. A second arrest that year stemmed from a separate set of charges that Trone’s business model was circumventing state transportation regulations. The latter charges were dismissed by a judge after state authorities requested repeated postponements of the case." This is never good because this is too vague to be paraphrased (which is required for copyright violations) and citation #20 does nothing to shed light. So the 'clarify' tag is certainly justified and please read WP:WNTRMT; so we definately will not be removing the flag. If you wish to go down the road of 'updating based on sources' I have unearthed two :[1]: the National Alcohol Beverage Control Association Daily Update May 23, that features a Boston Globe article: [2] written: By Dan Adams GLOBE STAFF MAY 20, 2017. Title: "For Total Wine, it’s total war against alcohol regulations" So indeed we have some opaque positive spin here: As an aside, although I have been pinged I did not write the article. I am a volunteer editor who sometimes assists with COI edits. You know me, I always have opinions Inkian Jason. This is one cat I would have left in the bag. One little harmless tag :) All the best and happy editing, Fylbecatulous talk 00:00, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Edit request to remove unnecessary detail

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Hello. I am back with an additional edit request, which I am submitting on behalf of Mr. Trone via Hickman Analytics as part of my work at Beutler Ink. Currently, the article's "Career" section has two paragraphs that seem inappropriate for inclusion:

In 2016, Total Wine was served with a license suspension by the Massachusetts Alcoholic Beverages Control Commission for selling liquor below its costs. This brings consumers into stores with attractive bargains, and then tries to sell them other, higher-profit-margin products. These are called loss-leaders.[20][21] The ban on loss leaders has the effect of protecting smaller package stores from large competitors like Total Wine that could otherwise offer lower prices. Other such measures still include prohibitions on wholesalers giving retailers discounts on large orders.[20][21]
Trone stated in an interview in 2014 about such smaller stores: “They’re buddies and they all charge the same high prices, they meet at the same clubs, and they all make lots of money,”; Trone said to the Minneapolis/St. Paul Business Journal, referring to liquor store owners in Minnesota who were lobbying to keep Total Wine out of their state. “They’ve chosen to compete by trying to stop our entry into the market by using government as a foil to stop competition, which enables them to keep their high prices and maintain, in many cases, their dirty stores.”[20][21]

The first paragraph is specifically about the company, and not about Mr. Trone specifically. This seems like unnecessary detail in an article about a person. I would even argue that this information is too detailed for the company article, and goes into detail about the process of selling liquor below cost more than is appropriate or necessary for understanding the primary subject of this article.

The second paragraph includes an extended quotation by Mr. Trone, which also seems unnecessary. His opinion on smaller stores does not seem like a necessary detail in an article focused on his career and personal life.

I am seeking to have these two paragraphs removed from the article, and I'm asking for a neutral editor to help determine the appropriateness of this content. Looking forward to your feedback. Inkian Jason (talk) 20:52, 2 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'm in agreement with these paragraphs not belonging in this article. However, I believe the start of the first paragraph belongs in the company article, and put it there, with modifications. —ADavidB 00:57, 3 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Adavidb: Thank you for reviewing this edit request and updating the article(s) appropriately. Inkian Jason (talk) 15:30, 3 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
It seems appropriate that the first sentence be included within "Legal Challenges" which addresses other similar issues, and I've put it there. Events of the business constitute a large part of what makes this bio encyclopedic. I'll leave it to others whether there should be other explanatory materials - pro or con, included. I commend the OP on noting the potential conflict of interest. John2510 (talk) 15:38, 20 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Update re: license suspension

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@John2510: Hello! Back in November, you added the following content: "In 2016, Total Wine was served with a license suspension by the Massachusetts Alcoholic Beverages Control Commission for selling liquor below its costs." Do you think this sentence could either be removed or updated to note the license was reinstated? This source confirms that Total Wine appealed the decision, and later a court sided with the company.

I'm not sure the sentence you added (which is about the company and not Mr. Trone specifically) should be kept, but if it is, how do you feel about adding the following sentence as an update? "The company appealed the commission's decision, and in mid 2017 the Suffolk Superior Court sided with Total Wine." If additional detail is needed, perhaps a note on Associated Justice Gordon's decision could be added, but again, I'm thinking this may all be too much detail for an article about Mr. Trone.

As noted throughout this talk page, I am submitting this request on behalf of Mr. Trone as part of my work at Beutler Ink. @Adavidb: Pinging you as well, since you've assisted with updates in the past. Thanks in advance. Inkian Jason (talk) 17:18, 16 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I think adding the update would be appropriate. Thanks. John2510 (talk) 19:14, 21 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@John2510: Thanks for confirming. I prefer not to edit articles directly because of my conflict of interest. Would you be willing to make this update to the article? Following is markup for the inline citation, if that's helpful:
<ref>{{cite news|last1=Benson|first1=Brian|title=Natick: Judge sides with Total Wine & More in pricing dispute|url=http://www.metrowestdailynews.com/news/20170726/natick-judge-sides-with-total-wine-amp-more-in-pricing-dispute|accessdate=January 22, 2018|work=[[The MetroWest Daily News]]|date=July 26, 2017}}</ref>
Thanks again. Inkian Jason (talk) 16:15, 22 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Thanks. John2510 (talk) 02:16, 25 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for your feedback and help. Inkian Jason (talk) 16:18, 25 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Suggested trim and question re: "philanthropist"

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@Drmies: Hello! I noticed you made some edits to this Wikipedia article back in December, and I wanted to discuss a few of them.

Firstly, I appreciate you made some trims to the article to reduce content not needed for someone to gain a vital understanding of Mr. Trone's life and career. Reviewing the current article in more detail, I wonder if you might think the following should be trimmed from the "Personal life" section: "In 2015, Trone was invited by the American University's Kennedy Political Union and the Kogod School of Business to speak to students and faculty about entrepreneurship and business leadership." In hindsight, this seems a bit superfluous, and I wondered if you feel this content was worth trimming as well.

Secondly, I was wondering if you would reconsider part of this edit, in which you removed "philanthropist" from the lead. There are many sources describing Mr. Trone as a philanthropist, such as the following:

  • The New York Times: "Mr. Trone, 60, is the co-owner ... of Total Wine & More, the nation's largest independent wine retailer, and a philanthropist who recently donated $15 million to the American Civil Liberties Union to promote criminal justice reform."
  • The Washington Post: "David Trone was a kid on his family’s chicken and hog farm in southeast Pennsylvania, not a Potomac wine retailer and philanthropist, when he first thought about entering politics."

In other words, his status as a philanthropist is upfront and not an afterthought or passing mention. In addition to sources using this descriptor, there are many others verifying his contributions to various organizations and institutions (quite a few, not just a handful). I would also argue that his charitable work is part of what makes him notable. There is an entire section dedicated to his charitable work, so adding "philanthropy" seems like an appropriate and simple way to summarize the article in its entirety, since there is no other content related to philanthropy in the lead. If the reasons I've outlined here are not enough for you to change your mind, I am curious if you could explain why adding mention of him being a philanthropist is not appropriate.

As a reminder, I'm proposing edits to this article on behalf of David Trone and Hickman Analytics. Thanks for your consideration on all parts. Inkian Jason (talk) 19:46, 25 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • Well, here's the thing--in the lead we typically summarize what people do, and what they are notable for. So this man's notability resides in his business, and secondarily his political aspirations. Like Trump, that may be the other way around in a while. Philanthropy is something that many incredibly rich and social people do. He may have donated a bunch of money, and that's noted in the two articles you cite, sure, but that doesn't necessarily makes him a "professional" philanthropist. Bill and Melinda Gates probably count as that, by now, and the sources reflect that. I don't know if you were responsible for the lead when I ran into it, but that is certainly not the kind of lead we should have. Anyway, this is not something I want to pick a fight over, and if you want to stick it back in go for it, as long as you don't restore that vanity paragraph. I do hope that your millionaire benefactor understands that not everything is for sale, and that very little that matters should depend on how gloriously he is represented in an online encyclopedia. Drmies (talk) 00:08, 26 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@Drmies: Thanks for replying. I've outlined why I think adding "philanthropist" is appropriate, but since I do not edit articles directly because of my conflict of interest, ultimately the decision is yours (and/or other Wikipedia editors). If you are not inclined to add this word to the lead, I understand; my goal was to ensure the introduction fully summarizes the contents of the article in its entirety.
In the meantime, not sure if you saw my note about this above, too: how do you feel about removing the following content from the "Personal life" section?
"In 2015, Trone was invited by the American University's Kennedy Political Union and the Kogod School of Business to speak to students and faculty about entrepreneurship and business leadership."
Thanks again for your consideration. Inkian Jason (talk) 15:33, 26 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]
I have to acknowledge that several of his contributions seem to be purely philanthropic. However, a number of others appear to be more political than philanthropic - including the ACLU and CASA. While he engages in philanthropy (as most of us do), I'm not sure the label "philanthropist" applies. I question at what level of giving, time commitment, etc. it would. The term does seem overused by some these days. You may be doing him a favor by just listing his gifts, rather than prematurely placing the crown of "philanthropist" on his head John2510 (talk) 17:51, 27 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the input, I really do appreciate hearing how different editors assess on this point. For now, I’ll not press this further here, since that's two editors now who feel that philanthropist doesn't (yet) apply. Inkian Jason (talk) 18:37, 27 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Drmies and John2510: Do either of you have thoughts re: removal of the sentence, "In 2015, Trone was invited by the American University's Kennedy Political Union and the Kogod School of Business to speak to students and faculty about entrepreneurship and business leadership."? I won't ping on this point again, but just wanted to make sure this wasn't lost in the shuffle. Thanks, Inkian Jason (talk) 17:36, 30 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I honestly just have no thoughts on it. It doesn't appear to be particularly insightful in any respect, but I'm not going to make that judgment call.John2510 (talk) 21:21, 30 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Request to update article re: 2018 campaign

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On behalf of David Trone and Hickman Analytics, as part of my work with Beutler Ink, I am back with a request to update this article with information about Mr. Trone's 2018 campaign.

I propose updating the "2018 campaign" section to the following, which provides a short and neutral overview of his campaign thus far. Currently, the section does not mention his filing date, policy priorities, or notable endorsements, so I'm hoping to update the article accordingly. Below shows new text in green:

Rendering of proposed "2018 campaign" section

On August 2, 2017, Trone announced his candidacy for the Democratic nomination for Maryland's 6th district, an open seat being vacated by John Delaney, who chose not to seek reelection and retire from Congress to focus on his 2020 presidential campaign.[1] Trone had endorsed Delaney for President several days prior.[2] Trone told Washington Jewish Week in early 2018 that lessons learned from his prior run include not entering the race early enough and not raising money, issues that don't apply to his 2018 campaign.[3]

He toured throughout Maryland in late 2017,[4] and filed his candidacy in January 2018. His filing was accompanied by a press release expressing his support for education, environmental protections, health care, Society Security, and women's rights.[5][6] Trone has also made combating the opioid epidemic a central focus of his platform,[7][8] releasing an action plan and hosting a series of town hall meetings to address the crisis.[9][10][11] In March 2018, Trone, gubernatorial candidate Rushern Baker, and John Delaney organized free bus trips from Maryland to Washington, D.C., in support of the March for Our Lives demonstration.[12]

Trone has been endorsed by Baker,[13] Joanne Benson,[14] Anthony G. Brown,[15] and Doug Duncan.[16]

References

References

  1. ^ Portnoy, Jenna (August 2, 2017). "David Trone jumps into race to succeed John Delaney in the U.S. House". The Washington Post. Retrieved August 2, 2017.
  2. ^ Trone, David (28 July 2017). ".@JohnKDelaney has done a great job bringing people together to solve problems. He would be a fantastic President, and I'm behind him 100%!". Retrieved 29 July 2017.
  3. ^ Schere, Dan (February 21, 2018). "In race for Maryland's 6th, businessman Trone highlights opioid crisis". Washington Jewish Week. Retrieved April 9, 2018.
  4. ^ Metcalf, Andrew (August 7, 2017). "Trone Plans Fundraising Effort Focused on Small-Dollar Contributions". Bethesda Magazine. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  5. ^ Larry, Greg (January 10, 2018). "Trone makes 6th District congressional bid". Cumberland Times-News. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  6. ^ Baker, Tamela (August 2, 2017). "Trone to run for Delaney's House seat". The Herald-Mail. Schurz Communications. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  7. ^ Fritze, John (January 8, 2018). "Maryland candidate Trone calls for $100 billion to confront opioid addiction". The Baltimore Sun. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  8. ^ Peck, Louis; Metcalf, Andrew (January 7, 2018). "Politics Roundup: Dumais' Bill to Protect Rape Victims Seen as Top Priority; Cummings Suspends Gubernatorial Campaign". Bethesda Magazine. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  9. ^ Schere, Dan (February 21, 2018). "In race for Maryland's 6th, businessman Trone highlights opioid crisis". Washington Jewish Week. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  10. ^ Portnoy, Jenna (January 20, 2018). "Experiences with opioid addiction and loss fuel Md. congressional hopefuls". The Washington Post. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  11. ^ Wolford, Heather B. (February 11, 2018). "Congressional candidate hosts forum on addressing opioid crisis". Cumberland Times-News. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  12. ^ Kurtz, Josh (March 22, 2018). "Political Notes: Vignarajah's Ad, Pols Paying for Buses to Anti-Gun March". Maryland Matters. Retrieved April 18, 2016.
  13. ^ Fritze, John (February 12, 2018). "Gubernatorial candidate Rushern Baker backs David Trone in Maryland's competitive House race". The Baltimore Sun. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  14. ^ Baker, Tamela (February 25, 2018). "Political briefs". The Herald-Mail. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  15. ^ Fritze, John (March 6, 2018). "Anthony Brown backs David Trone in competitive House election". The Baltimore Sun. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  16. ^ Baker, Tamela (March 4, 2018). "Political notes". The Herald-Mail. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
Markup for proposed "2018 campaign" section

On August 2, 2017, Trone announced his candidacy for the Democratic nomination for [[Maryland's 6th congressional district|Maryland's 6th district]], an open seat being vacated by [[John Delaney (Maryland politician)|John Delaney]], who chose not to seek reelection and retire from Congress to focus on his [[John Delaney presidential campaign, 2020|2020 presidential campaign]].<ref>{{cite web|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/david-trone-jumps-into-race-to-succeed-john-delaney-in-the-us-house/2017/08/01/7d56a18e-76fb-11e7-9eac-d56bd5568db8_story.html|title=David Trone jumps into race to succeed John Delaney in the U.S. House|work=[[The Washington Post]]|last=Portnoy|first=Jenna|date=August 2, 2017|accessdate=August 2, 2017}}</ref> Trone had endorsed Delaney for President several days prior.<ref>{{cite web|url=https://twitter.com/davidjtrone/status/890985957981401088|title=.@JohnKDelaney has done a great job bringing people together to solve problems. He would be a fantastic President, and I'm behind him 100%!|first=David|last=Trone|date=28 July 2017|publisher=|accessdate=29 July 2017}}</ref> Trone told ''[[Washington Jewish Week]]'' in early 2018 that lessons learned from his prior run include not entering the race early enough and not raising money, issues that don't apply to his 2018 campaign.<ref>{{cite news |url=http://washingtonjewishweek.com/44208/in-race-for-marylands-6th-businessman-trone-highlights-opioid-crisis/featured-slider-post/ |newspaper=[[Washington Jewish Week]] |date=February 21, 2018 |first=Dan |last=Schere |title=In race for Maryland’s 6th, businessman Trone highlights opioid crisis |access-date=April 9, 2018 }}</ref>

He toured throughout Maryland in late 2017,<ref name="Small">{{cite journal|last1=Metcalf|first1=Andrew|title=Trone Plans Fundraising Effort Focused on Small-Dollar Contributions|journal=[[Bethesda Magazine]]|date=August 7, 2017|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2017/Trone-Plans-Fundraising-Effort-Focused-on-Small-Dollar-Contributions/|accessdate=March 19, 2018}}</ref> and filed his candidacy in January 2018. His filing was accompanied by a press release expressing his support for education, [[environmental protection]]s, health care, [[Social Security (United States)|Society Security]], and [[women's rights]].<ref name="Larry">{{cite news|last1=Larry|first1=Greg|title=Trone makes 6th District congressional bid|url=http://www.times-news.com/news/local_news/trone-makes-th-district-congressional-bid-official/article_5260b2c5-4f62-5d4b-9d80-40b306adb9c6.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|date=January 10, 2018|work=[[Cumberland Times-News]]}}</ref><ref name="Run">{{cite news|last1=Baker|first1=Tamela|title=Trone to run for Delaney's House seat|url=https://www.heraldmailmedia.com/news/local/trone-to-run-for-delaney-s-house-seat/article_09eed974-772c-11e7-83aa-470b77fc05f0.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[The Herald-Mail]]|publisher=[[Schurz Communications]]|date=August 2, 2017}}</ref> Trone has also made combating the [[opioid epidemic]] a central focus of his platform,<ref name="Confront">{{cite news|last1=Fritze|first1=John|title=Maryland candidate Trone calls for $100 billion to confront opioid addiction|url=http://www.baltimoresun.com/news/maryland/politics/bs-md-trone-opioid-20180108-story.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=The Baltimore Sun|date=January 8, 2018}}</ref><ref>{{cite journal|title=Politics Roundup: Dumais' Bill to Protect Rape Victims Seen as Top Priority; Cummings Suspends Gubernatorial Campaign|journal=[[Bethesda Magazine]]|date=January 7, 2018|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2018/Politics-Roundup-Dumais-Bill-to-Protect-Rape-Victims-Seen-as-Top-Priority-Cummings-Suspends-Gubernatorial-Campaign/|accessdate=March 19, 2018|first1=Louis|last1=Peck|first2=Andrew|last2=Metcalf}}</ref> releasing an action plan and hosting a series of town hall meetings to address the crisis.<ref name="Schere">{{cite news|last1=Schere|first1=Dan|title=In race for Maryland's 6th, businessman Trone highlights opioid crisis|url=http://washingtonjewishweek.com/44208/in-race-for-marylands-6th-businessman-trone-highlights-opioid-crisis/featured-slider-post/|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[Washington Jewish Week]]|date=February 21, 2018}}</ref><ref name="Portnoy">{{cite news|last1=Portnoy|first1=Jenna|title=Experiences with opioid addiction and loss fuel Md. congressional hopefuls|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/experiences-with-opioid-addiction-and-loss-fuel-md-congress-hopefuls/2018/01/20/8dad62f8-f0b2-11e7-97bf-bba379b809ab_story.html?utm_term=.63a5605ea44e|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[The Washington Post]]|date=January 20, 2018}}</ref><ref name="Wolford">{{cite news|last1=Wolford|first1=Heather B.|title=Congressional candidate hosts forum on addressing opioid crisis|url=http://www.times-news.com/news/local_news/congressional-candidate-hosts-forum-on-addressing-opioid-crisis/article_e35a3231-d93f-53f5-95a9-5cb9978e8721.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=Cumberland Times-News|date=February 11, 2018}}</ref> In March 2018, Trone, gubernatorial candidate [[Rushern Baker]], and [[John Delaney (Maryland politician)|John Delaney]] organized free bus trips from Maryland to Washington, D.C., in support of the [[March for Our Lives]] demonstration.<ref name="Kurtz">{{cite web|last1=Kurtz|first1=Josh|title=Political Notes: Vignarajah's Ad, Pols Paying for Buses to Anti-Gun March|url=https://www.marylandmatters.org/single-post/2018/03/22/Political-Notes-Vignarajahs-Ad-Pols-Paying-for-Buses-to-Anti-Gun-March|website=Maryland Matters|accessdate=April 18, 2016|date=March 22, 2018}}</ref>

Trone has been endorsed by Baker,<ref name="Fritze">{{cite news|last1=Fritze|first1=John|title=Gubernatorial candidate Rushern Baker backs David Trone in Maryland's competitive House race|url=http://www.baltimoresun.com/news/maryland/politics/bs-md-trone-baker-20180212-story.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[The Baltimore Sun]]|date=February 12, 2018}}</ref> [[Joanne Benson]],<ref name="Baker">{{cite news|last1=Baker|first1=Tamela|title=Political briefs|url=https://www.heraldmailmedia.com/news/annapolis/political_notebook/political-briefs/article_d90953bf-2b9b-5e77-b841-534733833392.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[The Herald-Mail]]|date=February 25, 2018}}</ref> [[Anthony G. Brown]],<ref name="Backs">{{cite news|last1=Fritze|first1=John|title=Anthony Brown backs David Trone in competitive House election|url=http://www.baltimoresun.com/news/maryland/politics/bs-md-brown-trone-20180306-story.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=The Baltimore Sun|date=March 6, 2018}}</ref> and [[Doug Duncan]].<ref name="Notes">{{cite news|last1=Baker|first1=Tamela|title=Political notes|url=https://www.heraldmailmedia.com/news/annapolis/political_notebook/political-notes/article_e07e4c5c-402b-5f97-a0f9-db9a0de29021.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=The Herald-Mail|date=March 4, 2018}}</ref>

I'm seeking a volunteer editor to review this request and implement the markup appropriately. I watchlist this page and am happy to answer any questions or concerns here. Thanks, Inkian Jason (talk) 16:52, 30 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Adavidb: You've assisted with edit requests for this article before, so I'm curious if you'd be interested to weigh in here. I also invite you to share thoughts regarding the sentence starting, "In 2015, Trone was invited…", in the above edit request, if you have any. Thanks! Inkian Jason (talk) 20:16, 3 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@Drmies and John2510: If either of you care to weigh in here, I'd appreciate any feedback, otherwise I'll post to WikiProject Politics and/or WikiProject Maryland early next week. Thanks! Inkian Jason (talk) 17:41, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
I thought the first paragraph was appropriate. The second portion (in green) sounds too much like a campaign ad. I was prepared to make the edit, but when I looked at the article, it seems the current version is adequate and appropriate. Again, I appreciate and respect your approach to this and will make corrections, additions, etc. where appropriate, but don't want to spend a disproportionate amount of time on it. John2510 (talk) 15:00, 12 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for your feedback, John2510. I'll try to trim the proposed content a bit and post a note at WikiProject Politics. Inkian Jason (talk) 15:08, 14 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Trimmed version

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Resolved

Hello! Based on feedback received directly above, I'm submitting a slightly trimmed version of this addition, without mention of his touring or the fact that the bus trips to the March for Our Lives demonstration in Washington, D.C. were provided at no cost. As many Wikipedia articles about elections and politicians note endorsements by notable individuals, especially other politicians, I've left those here for consideration. My goal is to add mention of his filing date, his policy stances, and notable endorsements. Below is rendered content and markup for review:

Rendering of proposed "2018 campaign" section

Since filing his candidacy in January 2018, Trone has expressed support for education, environmental protections, health care, Society Security, and women's rights.[1][2] Trone has also made combating the opioid epidemic a central focus of his platform,[3][4] releasing an action plan and hosting a series of town hall meetings to address the crisis.[5][6][7] In March 2018, Trone, gubernatorial candidate Rushern Baker, and John Delaney organized bus trips from Maryland to Washington, D.C., in support of the March for Our Lives demonstration.[8]

Trone has been endorsed by Baker,[9] Joanne Benson,[10] Anthony G. Brown,[11] and Doug Duncan.[12]

References

References

  1. ^ Larry, Greg (January 10, 2018). "Trone makes 6th District congressional bid". Cumberland Times-News. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  2. ^ Baker, Tamela (August 2, 2017). "Trone to run for Delaney's House seat". The Herald-Mail. Schurz Communications. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  3. ^ Fritze, John (January 8, 2018). "Maryland candidate Trone calls for $100 billion to confront opioid addiction". The Baltimore Sun. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  4. ^ Peck, Louis; Metcalf, Andrew (January 7, 2018). "Politics Roundup: Dumais' Bill to Protect Rape Victims Seen as Top Priority; Cummings Suspends Gubernatorial Campaign". Bethesda Magazine. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  5. ^ Schere, Dan (February 21, 2018). "In race for Maryland's 6th, businessman Trone highlights opioid crisis". Washington Jewish Week. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  6. ^ Portnoy, Jenna (January 20, 2018). "Experiences with opioid addiction and loss fuel Md. congressional hopefuls". The Washington Post. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  7. ^ Wolford, Heather B. (February 11, 2018). "Congressional candidate hosts forum on addressing opioid crisis". Cumberland Times-News. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  8. ^ Kurtz, Josh (March 22, 2018). "Political Notes: Vignarajah's Ad, Pols Paying for Buses to Anti-Gun March". Maryland Matters. Retrieved April 18, 2016.
  9. ^ Fritze, John (February 12, 2018). "Gubernatorial candidate Rushern Baker backs David Trone in Maryland's competitive House race". The Baltimore Sun. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  10. ^ Baker, Tamela (February 25, 2018). "Political briefs". The Herald-Mail. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  11. ^ Fritze, John (March 6, 2018). "Anthony Brown backs David Trone in competitive House election". The Baltimore Sun. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  12. ^ Baker, Tamela (March 4, 2018). "Political notes". The Herald-Mail. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
Markup for addition to "2018 campaign" section

Since filing his candidacy in January 2018, Trone has express support for education, [[environmental protection]]s, health care, [[Social Security (United States)|Society Security]], and [[women's rights]].<ref name="Larry">{{cite news|last1=Larry|first1=Greg|title=Trone makes 6th District congressional bid|url=http://www.times-news.com/news/local_news/trone-makes-th-district-congressional-bid-official/article_5260b2c5-4f62-5d4b-9d80-40b306adb9c6.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|date=January 10, 2018|work=[[Cumberland Times-News]]}}</ref><ref name="Run">{{cite news|last1=Baker|first1=Tamela|title=Trone to run for Delaney's House seat|url=https://www.heraldmailmedia.com/news/local/trone-to-run-for-delaney-s-house-seat/article_09eed974-772c-11e7-83aa-470b77fc05f0.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[The Herald-Mail]]|publisher=[[Schurz Communications]]|date=August 2, 2017}}</ref> Trone has also made combating the [[opioid epidemic]] a central focus of his platform,<ref name="Confront">{{cite news|last1=Fritze|first1=John|title=Maryland candidate Trone calls for $100 billion to confront opioid addiction|url=http://www.baltimoresun.com/news/maryland/politics/bs-md-trone-opioid-20180108-story.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=The Baltimore Sun|date=January 8, 2018}}</ref><ref>{{cite journal|title=Politics Roundup: Dumais' Bill to Protect Rape Victims Seen as Top Priority; Cummings Suspends Gubernatorial Campaign|journal=[[Bethesda Magazine]]|date=January 7, 2018|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2018/Politics-Roundup-Dumais-Bill-to-Protect-Rape-Victims-Seen-as-Top-Priority-Cummings-Suspends-Gubernatorial-Campaign/|accessdate=March 19, 2018|first1=Louis|last1=Peck|first2=Andrew|last2=Metcalf}}</ref> releasing an action plan and hosting a series of town hall meetings to address the crisis.<ref name="Schere">{{cite news|last1=Schere|first1=Dan|title=In race for Maryland's 6th, businessman Trone highlights opioid crisis|url=http://washingtonjewishweek.com/44208/in-race-for-marylands-6th-businessman-trone-highlights-opioid-crisis/featured-slider-post/|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[Washington Jewish Week]]|date=February 21, 2018}}</ref><ref name="Portnoy">{{cite news|last1=Portnoy|first1=Jenna|title=Experiences with opioid addiction and loss fuel Md. congressional hopefuls|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/experiences-with-opioid-addiction-and-loss-fuel-md-congress-hopefuls/2018/01/20/8dad62f8-f0b2-11e7-97bf-bba379b809ab_story.html?utm_term=.63a5605ea44e|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[The Washington Post]]|date=January 20, 2018}}</ref><ref name="Wolford">{{cite news|last1=Wolford|first1=Heather B.|title=Congressional candidate hosts forum on addressing opioid crisis|url=http://www.times-news.com/news/local_news/congressional-candidate-hosts-forum-on-addressing-opioid-crisis/article_e35a3231-d93f-53f5-95a9-5cb9978e8721.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=Cumberland Times-News|date=February 11, 2018}}</ref> In March 2018, Trone, gubernatorial candidate [[Rushern Baker]], and [[John Delaney (Maryland politician)|John Delaney]] organized bus trips from Maryland to Washington, D.C., in support of the [[March for Our Lives]] demonstration.<ref name="Kurtz">{{cite web|last1=Kurtz|first1=Josh|title=Political Notes: Vignarajah's Ad, Pols Paying for Buses to Anti-Gun March|url=https://www.marylandmatters.org/single-post/2018/03/22/Political-Notes-Vignarajahs-Ad-Pols-Paying-for-Buses-to-Anti-Gun-March|website=Maryland Matters|accessdate=April 18, 2016|date=March 22, 2018}}</ref>

Trone has been endorsed by Baker,<ref name="Fritze">{{cite news|last1=Fritze|first1=John|title=Gubernatorial candidate Rushern Baker backs David Trone in Maryland's competitive House race|url=http://www.baltimoresun.com/news/maryland/politics/bs-md-trone-baker-20180212-story.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[The Baltimore Sun]]|date=February 12, 2018}}</ref> [[Joanne Benson]],<ref name="Baker">{{cite news|last1=Baker|first1=Tamela|title=Political briefs|url=https://www.heraldmailmedia.com/news/annapolis/political_notebook/political-briefs/article_d90953bf-2b9b-5e77-b841-534733833392.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[The Herald-Mail]]|date=February 25, 2018}}</ref> [[Anthony G. Brown]],<ref name="Backs">{{cite news|last1=Fritze|first1=John|title=Anthony Brown backs David Trone in competitive House election|url=http://www.baltimoresun.com/news/maryland/politics/bs-md-brown-trone-20180306-story.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=The Baltimore Sun|date=March 6, 2018}}</ref> and [[Doug Duncan]].<ref name="Notes">{{cite news|last1=Baker|first1=Tamela|title=Political notes|url=https://www.heraldmailmedia.com/news/annapolis/political_notebook/political-notes/article_e07e4c5c-402b-5f97-a0f9-db9a0de29021.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=The Herald-Mail|date=March 4, 2018}}</ref>

I've worked to draft neutral wording based on secondary coverage in reliable sources. I will be posting a note at WikiProject Politics, inviting project members to review the proposed addition and update the article appropriately. Thank you for your consideration. Inkian Jason (talk) 22:00, 17 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

MB298, thanks again for your help! Inkian Jason (talk) 15:10, 25 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Request to update "Philanthropy" section

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Hello again. I am back to propose two small updates to the article's "Philanthropy" section. According to The Potomac Almanac, Trone was honored at the National Alliance on Mental Illness' annual Heroes Celebration. I don't want to go into too much detail, but I think adding "and earned praise from the National Alliance on Mental Illness" is a short and appropriate way to add mention of this recognition.

For this addition, the following markup might be helpful for the start of the section's second paragraph (new text in green):

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In mid 2017, the Trones donated $2.5 million to Bethesda, Maryland's Suburban Hospital to support mental and behavioral health services and make improvements to the Old Georgetown Road campus. The couple's donation was inspired by their nephew's death from an opioid overdose in late 2016,[1][2][3] and earned praise from the National Alliance on Mental Illness.[4]

References

References

  1. ^ Zimmermann, Joe (May 1, 2017). "David Trone's Foundation Donates $2.5 Million to Suburban Hospital". Bethesda. Retrieved August 1, 2017.
  2. ^ Turque, Bill (June 15, 2017). "David Trone stays high profile as he considers political future". The Washington Post. Retrieved August 1, 2017.
  3. ^ Metcalf, Andrew (June 1, 2017). "Trone Donates to Legal Fund to Assist Local Families Potentially Impacted by Trump's Proposed Travel Ban". Bethesda. Retrieved July 6, 2017.
  4. ^ McEwan, Peggy (October 4, 2017). "Trone to Be Honored at Annual NAMI Awards". The Potomac Almanac. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
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In mid 2017, the Trones donated $2.5 million to [[Bethesda, Maryland]]'s [[Suburban Hospital]] to support mental and behavioral health services and make improvements to the Old Georgetown Road campus. The couple's donation was inspired by their nephew's death from an opioid overdose in late 2016,<ref>{{cite journal|last1=Zimmermann|first1=Joe|title=David Trone's Foundation Donates $2.5 Million to Suburban Hospital|journal=Bethesda|date=May 1, 2017|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2017/David-Trones-Foundation-Donates-25-Million-to-Suburban-Hospital/|accessdate=August 1, 2017}}</ref><ref name="HighProfile">{{cite news|last1=Turque|first1=Bill|title=David Trone stays high profile as he considers political future|url=https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/md-politics/david-trone-stays-high-profile-as-he-considers-political-future/2017/06/15/a3344cca-5163-11e7-be25-3a519335381c_story.html|accessdate=August 1, 2017|work=The Washington Post|date=June 15, 2017}}</ref><ref name="Metcalf">{{cite journal|last1=Metcalf|first1=Andrew|title=Trone Donates to Legal Fund to Assist Local Families Potentially Impacted by Trump's Proposed Travel Ban|journal=Bethesda|date=June 1, 2017|url=http://www.bethesdamagazine.com/Bethesda-Beat/2017/Trone-Donates-to-Legal-Fund-To-Assist-Local-Families-Potentially-Impacted-by-Trumps-Proposed-Travel-Ban/|accessdate=July 6, 2017}}</ref> and earned praise from the [[National Alliance on Mental Illness]].<ref name="McEwan">{{cite news|last1=McEwan|first1=Peggy|title=Trone to Be Honored at Annual NAMI Awards|url=http://www.potomacalmanac.com/news/2017/oct/04/trone-be-honored-annual-nami-awards/|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=The Potomac Almanac|date=October 4, 2017}}</ref>


Additionally, I'd like a reviewing editor to consider adding mention of the Trone Family Foundation's funding of a pilot program intended to combat the opioid epidemic. I propose adding the following content as a new paragraph at the end of the "Philanthropy" section:

Rendering

In 2018, the Trone Family Foundation funded a pilot program to bring the Prescription Drug Safety Network's course to high schools in Allegany, Carroll, Frederick, Garrett, and Washington counties, as well as Frostburg State, Johns Hopkins, and Towson universities.[1][2]

References

References

  1. ^ Lovelace, CJ (February 4, 2018). "New drug-education course offered as pilot in Washington County". The Herald-Mail. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
  2. ^ Larry, Greg (February 9, 2018). "Pilot program teaches dangers of prescription drugs". Cumberland Times-News. Retrieved March 19, 2018.
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In 2018, the Trone Family Foundation funded a pilot program to bring the Prescription Drug Safety Network's course to high schools in [[Allegany County, Maryland|Allegany]], [[Carroll County, Maryland|Carroll]], [[Frederick County, Maryland|Frederick]], [[Garrett County, Maryland|Garrett]], and [[Washington County, Maryland|Washington]] counties, as well as [[Frostburg State University|Frostburg State]], [[Johns Hopkins University|Johns Hopkins]], and [[Towson University|Towson]] universities.<ref name="Lovelace">{{cite news|last1=Lovelace|first1=CJ|title=New drug-education course offered as pilot in Washington County|url=https://www.heraldmailmedia.com/news/local/new-drug-education-course-offered-as-pilot-in-washington-county/article_7cc468be-0e73-5c7e-a5a2-f3ecd5e38030.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=[[The Herald-Mail]]|date=February 4, 2018}}</ref><ref name="Pilot">{{cite news|last1=Larry|first1=Greg|title=Pilot program teaches dangers of prescription drugs|url=http://www.times-news.com/news/local_news/pilot-program-teaches-dangers-of-prescription-drugs/article_c1e8e882-1745-55b1-8c56-2903ae123d1f.html|accessdate=March 19, 2018|work=Cumberland Times-News|date=February 9, 2018}}</ref>

Thank you for considering these updates to the article, which I'm submitting on behalf of Mr. Trone and Hickman Analytics. @MB298: I'm wondering if you might be willing to take a look at this request, since you helped with the above update. Inkian Jason (talk) 15:42, 25 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@RickinBaltimore: I've posted to several WikiProjects, but I am struggling to get editor feedback on this edit request, as well as one more below. You helped with a previous edit request above, so I'm wondering if you might be willing to take a look at these two simple requests? Thanks for your consideration. Inkian Jason (talk) 16:33, 11 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Request to update "Personal life" section

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Hello, I am back with a final (at least for now) and quick request to update the article's "Personal life" section to add mention of Mr. Trone's religion, as well as the religion of his family and the synagogue they attend, as confirmed by multiple reliable sources.

I propose adding to the following after "As of 2016, the Trones live in Potomac, Maryland":

"Trone is Lutheran; his wife and children are Jewish and attend Temple Beth Ami in Rockville." Here is markup:
Trone is Lutheran; his wife and children are Jewish and attend Temple Beth Ami in [[Rockville, Maryland|Rockville]].<ref name="WJW">{{cite journal|last1=Schere|first1=Dan|title=In race for Maryland's 6th, businessman Trone highlights opioid crisis|journal=Washington Jewish Week|date=February 21, 2018|url=http://washingtonjewishweek.com/44208/in-race-for-marylands-6th-businessman-trone-highlights-opioid-crisis/featured-slider-post/|accessdate=April 18, 2018}}</ref><ref name="Cortellessa">{{cite news|last1=Cortellessa|first1=Eric|title=The Maryland wine mogul who is staking his fortune on reaching Capitol Hill|url=https://www.timesofisrael.com/the-maryland-wine-mogul-who-is-staking-his-fortune-on-reaching-capitol-hill/|accessdate=May 25, 2018|work=[[The Times of Israel]]|date=March 24, 2018}}</ref>

Please let me know if you have questions or concerns, thanks. Inkian Jason (talk) 15:44, 25 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

A quick follow-up request: Mr. Trone has been looking over the article and knowing that editors might prefer to trim down a few details, wanted to suggest a couple of small trims. First, in the "Personal life" section, removing "In 2015, Trone was invited by the American University's Kennedy Political Union and the Kogod School of Business to speak to students and faculty about entrepreneurship and business leadership", and second, in the "Early life and education" section, removing "but Trone kept working for his mother's store". Speaking to students about business does not seem particularly noteworthy, and the latter fragment seems a bit redundant. I've mentioned the first trim above but the editor who said "It doesn't appear to be particularly insightful in any respect" did not feel inclined to make changes, so I wanted to get another opinion.
@MB298: Since you helped with an above edit request not too long ago, I wonder if you might be available to weigh in here and in the "Philanthropy" section request immediately above. Thanks. Inkian Jason (talk) 21:25, 30 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Bnng: Thanks for reviewing this request. I noticed you added then removed the proposed text. This source says, "Trone, who is Lutheran…", and this source says, "Trone grew up Lutheran… but had no qualms raising his children in the Jewish faith". In the latter source, Trone is also quoted as saying, "... so I no longer attend Lutheran services." Mr. Trone has reviewed the proposed text and is fine with adding "Trone is Lutheran" to the article, but, if you prefer, I think "Trone was raised Lutheran; his wife and children are Jewish and attend Temple Beth Ami in Rockville" would also be appropriate. Are you willing to update the article accordingly? Inkian Jason (talk) 18:49, 19 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Amishai GG: I see you just updated this Wikipedia article. I am curious if you'd be willing to take a look at the two suggested additions I've proposed above (Request to update "Philanthropy" section and Request to update "Personal life" section)? Inkian Jason (talk) 17:35, 26 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Drawn here by a request at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Christianity/Noticeboard. Based on what I read above, I feel that the suggested prose is acceptable, but with two modifications. The first modification would be to support Inkian Jason's change: Trone was raised Lutheran. The second change is to avoid the spacing. It doesn't show when reading, only editing, but there are two spaces between "wife and". Is there a source to support which Lutheran synod he was raised in? That can sometimes make a difference. Placement in the personal life section is what I would expect. Walter Görlitz (talk) 20:22, 27 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@Walter Görlitz: Thanks for reviewing this request. I am not sure which synod, but I think sourcing supports a general mention of his Lutheran upbringing (and the addition of Category:American Lutherans). Thanks for catching the additional space, which I've removed above. I agree, adding this to the "personal life" section is appropriate. Above, I suggested adding after "As of 2016, the Trones live in Potomac, Maryland." Are you willing to update the article accordingly? Inkian Jason (talk) 20:53, 27 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
I'll let an editor with closer ties to the subject make the update(s). Walter Görlitz (talk) 20:59, 27 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

While I appreciate your adherence to the COI policy, I think in this case you could probably have made the edit yourself. Yes, WP:COIEDIT says you are "strongly discouraged". But in this case we already have consensus, and we know others are watching the article and can intervene if they think there is a problem. Kendall-K1 (talk) 15:44, 28 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Kendall-K1: Thank you for reviewing this request and updating the article appropriately. I appreciate your encouragement, but I do not edit the main space in order to fully comply with Wikipedia's rules re: COI and paid editing. On the off chance you're willing to review one more edit request, I've proposed two very simple article additions here (in the section above) for community consideration. Thanks again for your help. Inkian Jason (talk) 16:18, 28 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
We don't normally put religion in the infobox or lead unless it's relevant to notability, but I have no problem with putting it in the article. That of his wife and children could be removed. We put lots of things in bios that are not relevant to notability, just not in the lead. Kendall-K1 (talk) 16:53, 28 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
The 'religion' parameter was removed from many infobox templates in 2016, per an RfC discussion. —ADavidB 23:44, 28 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Orphaned references in David Trone

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I check pages listed in Category:Pages with incorrect ref formatting to try to fix reference errors. One of the things I do is look for content for orphaned references in wikilinked articles. I have found content for some of David Trone's orphans, the problem is that I found more than one version. I can't determine which (if any) is correct for this article, so I am asking for a sentient editor to look it over and copy the correct ref content into this article.

Reference named "primaryresults":

I apologize if any of the above are effectively identical; I am just a simple computer program, so I can't determine whether minor differences are significant or not. AnomieBOT⚡ 21:40, 2 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Updates to page

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Hi all, I just made a bunch of edits to the political positions section.

I did the following:

  • Added in a bunch about opioids and mental health, which have been kind of his main things in office.
  • Added in scores of bipartisanship to go with the Biden piece in the tenure section (he's noted as working well with the other party in a lot of stuff I saw)
  • Deleted the MTG section for being WP:UNDUE (it's a weird focus for a bill he was once a co-sponsor of IMO and isn't really a political position)
  • Deleted the affirmative action section, as the Politico article cited ([3]) in my opinion didn't actually say that he supported affirmative action? It's just him asking a bunch of questions to Betsy DeVos. I'm sure there's another source out there but I didn't find it on a cursory search -- will do more research this week to try and find a replacement article.

I've noticed a few other congressional articles which seem a bit POV heavy recently -- started here because I've always been a DMV kinda guy, but will be branching out to other congresspeople if I get the chance. Let me know if you have any questions about my edits here! Nomader (talk) 22:36, 31 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding the racial slur made in committee

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I think we need to come to a consensus on the issue of the racial slur made during a committee hearing. The information has been added by myself and others, only to be reverted. Specifically, he said: “So this Republican jigaboo that it’s the tax rate that’s stopping business investment, it’s just completely faulty by people who have never run a business. They’ve never been there. They don’t have a clue what they’re talking about.” For context, the word “jigaboo” is a racial slur against African-Americans, which is why this is so controversial, elevated by the fact that Trone’s the leading Democratic candidate in the Maryland US Senate race. I know he apologized for saying that, and stated he misspoke, but does that really warrant this info being whitewashed? Let’s state the facts: if a Republican said the same thing Trone said, they would be called a racist and that info would be included in the Wikipedia article of said Republican, despite their apology. This info being added to the article is not meant to disparage Trone or hurt his campaign (just so happens that his opponent is a black woman, so I wouldn’t be surprised if she uses that against him). I want to know your opinion on this, since this is getting added and reverted, etc., so I want to settle this and come to a consensus. Unknown0124 (talk) 23:18, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I was the first to add a paragraph about the racial slur controversy, but now I feel that it's too early to include the controversy on this page, per WP:RECENT. If Alsobrooks or Hogan end up using the controversy in their attacks against Trone, or the controversy proves to have some kind of impact on the primary, I'd say it'd be reasonable to include on this page - but so far, it seems that this controversy is a nothingburger and that his opponents are hesitant to directly and publicly attack him on this. Y2hyaXM (talk) 23:33, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Neptunedog @Muboshgu tagging other relevant persons in this discussion Y2hyaXM (talk) 23:36, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
We're not "whitewashing" anything if we don't include it. Per WP:RECENTISM, we should wait and see if this actually has any WP:LASTING significance or not. There's no harm in waiting to see if it needs to be added. WP:BLPs are written conservatively in this regard. His explanation that he misspoke is plausible. – Muboshgu (talk) 23:41, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Regarding my use of the word “whitewash” with regard to this info, I sometimes feel that there is a double standard when it comes to these kind of incidents. If a Dem like Trone does something like use that word in committee, and then apologize, end of story; whereas if a Republican does the exact same thing, and then also apologize, they come under significant media scrutiny despite the apology (unless it’s Fox News (or name other conservative media outlet here)).
I agree that we should wait to see where the story goes, especially a week from now, regardless of political affiliation. I think we should be careful as to what we put in there, obviously. In this case, the info was national news (not just conservative news outlets), and that’s why I felt as though it should be included. Best watch and see where it goes… Unknown0124 (talk) 01:15, 24 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You make a good point with regard to Alsobrooks and Hogan. Personally, I was surprised when the info was removed since it was national news. Unknown0124 (talk) 01:02, 24 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I believe the info ought to be included, because things like this are often included in wiki articles. One such example is with Senator Tommy Tuberville. He made a comment about race and then three paragraphs were written about it NathanBru (talk) 13:44, 28 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
This is a really good point, but from a quick readover of the section on Tuberville's comments on white nationalists, it seems that his remarks were more intentional than Trone's and received more direct criticism from his colleagues. Alsobrooks' campaign has rolled out a few endorsements in the days following the controversy, which could be seen as a response to the incident, but it seems that she had been sitting on those endorsements long before announcing them as Jasmine Crockett said that she endorsed Alsobrooks long before the Trone controversy and Barbara Lee declined to say whether she endorsed because of the controversy. Multiple media outlets have also reported on the criticism Trone has received from the incident (and the University of Maryland, who recently conducted a poll in the Senate primary, implied that the controversy could have an impact on the primary) but none of the sources give any indication that he's received direct criticism from any of his congressional colleagues, as far as I know. Y2hyaXM (talk) 12:47, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I agree that there is no comparison between what Tuberville said and what Trone said, nor between the reactions to what they said. – Muboshgu (talk) 15:00, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Not a direct comparison. I don't know if there is a direct comparison to what Tuberville said in that interview, or even to what Trone said in that committee hearing. Please let us know if there are. Unknown0124 (talk) 15:13, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
5 Politicians Who Made Racist Remarks, ABC News, 2013 (giving us a nice WP:10YT to apply)
  1. Don Young's "wetback" remark: contained in the body
  2. George Allen (American politician) calling a tracker "macaca": in the body, not in the lead, which only references a "controversial" election, even though that comment was a big part of him losing the election
  3. Joe Biden's insensitive comment about Obama being "articulate": not in the article at all
  4. Harry Reid's insensitive comment about Obama as "light-skinned" with no "Negro dialect": contained in the body but with text like These comments had been recently revealed I may delete it myself
  5. Joseph A. Maturo Jr.'s insensitive remark on tacos: contained in the body, but that's not an article to emulate
A big difference I see between all five of these and Trone is that the five above made their comments intentionally, whereas Trone apparently chose the wrong word. – Muboshgu (talk) 15:32, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The coverage is already beginning to be a smaller point or not mentioned at all in some articles as being part of a "tough week" kind of coverage (The Hill [4], Maryland Matters doesn't mention it at all [5]). I'm inclined to agree with Y2 and Muboshgu here – but definitely not opposed to revisiting it in the future if it ramps up in attacks or criticism as a more central part of the campaign. Nomader (talk) 18:18, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The way I see it, the word j*g*b**, is just as bad as the word n word. It is insulting to insinuate otherwise. By not including this in there, it shows that the use of racist commentary is not seen as a big deal. This slur used by Trone was across the front pages of every single major media outlet, indluding CNN, Fox, and the Washington Post. It recieved widespread media coverage, with Trone covering the headlines of every page. A major moment like this not being included is illogical and does not make sense. NathanBru (talk) 01:59, 30 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
We've been explaining why it might not belong in this section. What of what we've said is "illogical"? – Muboshgu (talk) 01:01, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
What about it has not been illogical? I have already made my point and explained how it was illogical. I am not going to repeat myself. I also explained why it should be added, which was the juxt of what I was saying.
NathanBru (talk) 02:07, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The respective timeframes of the above five examples are: 1) Young: 2013, 11 years ago; 2) Allan: 2006, 18 years; 3) Biden: 2007, 17 years; 4) Reid: 2008, 16 years; 5) Maturo: 2012, 12 years ago. —ADavidB 19:44, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I didn't know about any of those except Biden's remarks about Obama. Is it because he's the highest profile person on that list? I don't know. And yes, those examples are pretty old. Unknown0124 (talk) 00:57, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I was aware of the first four already. Of those four, only Allen's has lasting impact. – Muboshgu (talk) 01:02, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Oh...looked like that was the end of his political career. Unknown0124 (talk) 01:05, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Trone self-funding in lead

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@Y2hyaXM: Hey Y2, I cut the self-funding note from the lead as it felt a bit WP:UNDUE and a bit POV-y to me. Maybe a "Trone is a candidate for the United States Senate in the 2024 election to succeed Ben Cardin, running a campaign that he has largely self-funded." Or something like that? Or maybe a line afterwards that would say "Trone has largely self-funded all of his campaigns"? Fourth-most is kind of an odd stat to highlight IMO and we don't highlight it for other famous self-funders like J.B. Pritzker or Rick Scott and I think we should follow that here too. Open to other suggestions too! Nomader (talk) 15:27, 24 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Nomader I added that sentence to the lead because a similar sentence is being used on the page currently to describe his self-funded campaign in 2016. I would be comfortable with changing it to what you've suggested. Please re-add the removed sentences to the section on his Senate candidacy, as this record was similarly mentioned on Blair Hull's page. I'd do it myself, but editing on mobile is rather difficult. Y2hyaXM (talk) 16:32, 24 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Added to the campaign section, think it's very appropriate there. I did some light tweaking as the loaned money was mentioned earlier in the paragraph – feel free to change the emphasis once you're off mobile if you think it's not enough. We might also change "largely" to "almost entirely" self-funded – but I think this feels more appropriate to me. Nomader (talk) 16:56, 24 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you! I would also be comfortable to changing "largely" to "almost entirely" since only $646,875 of Trone's $42.4 million fundraising came from grassroots donors, in case you decide to make this change later. Y2hyaXM (talk) 21:11, 24 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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