Talk:David Starkey/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs · count) 05:20, 26 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

I've been watching this one sit in the GAN queue for a while now. Will review in next day or two. Ruby comment! 05:20, 26 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Cmguy777's comments

One paragraph I found ambiguous was the paragraph on Starkey's homosexuality. What is "London's gay scene"? Was Starkey ever a heterosexual? How is "mother's intensity" defined? What caused Starkey to be "bored at Cambridge"? Cmguy777 (talk) 18:25, 27 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Ruby 2010's Comments

In the lead I think you could mention his many published books
- Done
In infobox add "radio" in occupation
- That would imply he's a radio presenter - he hasn't done anything like that for quite some time. He's more an occasional contributor, but I wouldn't put that in the infobox for the same reason I wouldn't put his newspaper and magazines pieces in the infobox.
Sentences with direct quotes need citations directly at their end (i.e. "He later criticised his mentor, who he says with age became "tetchy" and "arrogant".")
- In this article, any time a quotation isn't cited, the citation may be found at the end of the sentence, or section. I'm not a fan of citing every last quote, its not necessary in relatively simple articles like this. Practically every quote here is from Starkey.
That quote box about the Tudors - attribute it to Starkey and add quotation marks
- Done.
Date when William and Kate: Romance and the Royals came out
- Done
"He has worked as curator on several exhibitions, including a 2003 exhibit on Elizabeth I, following which he had lunch with the queen. " You jump from one queen to another, which may be slightly confusing for some readers. Perhaps change "the queen" to Elizabeth II (or something similar)?
- A fair point, done.
"...during one of many appearances on the BBC's Question Time he attacked Jeffrey Archer over his views on the age of homosexual consent.[30] Mike Russell, then Scottish government minister for culture and external affairs, called on him to apologise for comments made on the programme in 2009, when he declared Scotland, Ireland and Wales "feeble little countries".[31][32]" Was this all in the same episode of Question Time?
- No, I'm not certain when he criticised Archer, so I've rearranged the section to try and clarify the difference in dates.
This link won't seem to load on my browser
- It worked fine when I added it. Perhaps the site is down. I'd try again in a day or two.
Why are the titles of all your references italicized? I'd use Cite web or Cite news for your ref templates, but that's just a personal preference thing
- I use the citation template for everything. It keeps things simple.
Ref 19: dash error
- Done. Parrot of Doom 19:42, 27 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Interesting man and an interesting article. Will place on hold for seven days, though I'm sure the above comments can be resolved before then. Best regards, Ruby comment! 18:46, 27 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

While I think Cmguy777's comments make some helpful points, I feel the article meets the GA criteria as is. Nice work, Ruby comment! 04:07, 28 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review :) Parrot of Doom 06:03, 28 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]