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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:35, 25 November 2012 (UTC)
I'll review this article sometime today. Wizardman 15:35, 25 November 2012 (UTC)
Here are the issues I found:
- "and As of 2012" as of; I'd just remove the as of ideally though.
- "Mirkin pitched to the series' story editors for several years without success, because" no comma needed.
- "Mirkin had to film each episode in two days." was there a particular reason for that?
- " to some the show's " some of
- In the subsequent work section, three of four paragraphs start with "In [year]". Try mixing it up a bit.
Mostly minor nitpicks. I'll put the article on hold and will pass when fixed. Wizardman 03:58, 28 November 2012 (UTC)
- All done, although he doesn't specify why he had to film Get A Life in two days. It was probably budget cuts, but I can't be sure, but if I find anything I'll add it. Thanks very much! Gran2 09:23, 28 November 2012 (UTC)
- No problem. Looks good now, so I'll pass this. Wizardman 23:26, 28 November 2012 (UTC)