Talk:Dave (Lost)/GA1
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Reviewer: Lord Roem (talk) 03:55, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
- I look forward to reviewing this article :) Regards, Lord Roem (talk) 03:55, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
Maybe wikilink 'fan theory' or put a cite to that? I think it qualifies for a lead cite. Lord Roem (talk) 04:03, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
- "Fan theory" doesn't exist as an article, but you suggest any alternatives?
- Nah, its fine.
- "Fan theory" doesn't exist as an article, but you suggest any alternatives?
Review
[edit]Lead
- What is 'realtime'?
- Other articles use it, but rewritten.
- What way where they filmed? A bit unclear.
- Rewritten, see if it's good enough.
Flashback
- "the room: Libby". Change the sentence to exclude that colon.
- Done.
On the island
- Wikilink comatose
- Done.
- "calls the hatch a 'joke': he says..." this colon also seems out of place - rework the sentence as well to make it more clear.
- Rewritten.
- Wikilink 108 to a past episode?
- Removed.
- "Locke, however, replies angrily that Henry is lying." - why does he say that?
- He doesn't believe and replies to that with "You're lying.". Thinks it needs a rewrite?
- It just seems a bit sudden. If there is no context/understandable reason from this episode, its fine.
- He doesn't believe and replies to that with "You're lying.". Thinks it needs a rewrite?
Production
- Put the info on the final scene with Libby in the mental ward into the plot section.
- Sorry? The plot section is only for in-universe events, why put production stuff into it?
- Oh sorry. I got myself confused. :-/.
- Sorry? The plot section is only for in-universe events, why put production stuff into it?
- "Director Bender...in a way audiences would first believe him to be real..." - add an in-line cite here.
- The first two sentences are covered by the same ref, but added a duplicate just in case.
- Some of this last paragraph is a bit extraneous. For example, change "Weather problems...waves...rain" and remove the specific examples which aren't relevant.
- Removed detail on what is from each day of shooting in the cliff, needs more?
Reception
- Ryan j. Budke - is his middle initial really lower case?
- Why did the LAT say it was misunderstood? Add a sentence or two on that.
Final Thoughts
[edit]- Good article, even if a bit bland, but certainly viable for promotion. Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 18:17, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
- Preliminary Decision: On Hold
Done the requests, awaiting for further input. igordebraga ≠ 03:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- I think all my issues are resolved. I'll move to promote! Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 03:17, 3 March 2011 (UTC)