Talk:Darcy Blake/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:51, 28 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"As a teenager, Blake attended Blackwood Comprehensive school" - School - Done

"although he continued playing for Thistle until the age of twelve." - change the text in bold to until he was 12. - Done
"but, after a number of injuries affecting the team, he was increasingly involved in first team matches, including" - club to avoid close reptition - Done
"including featuring in three of the clubs six matches" - club's - Done
"as they reached the FA Cup final but was left out of the matchday squad for the final." - match - Done
"During the 2008–09 season Blake replaced Kevin McNaughton as right back after McNaughton suffered in an injury. He made seven appearances before being removed from the side." - this needs to have a reliable sources and must not be a paragragh since its only one sentence. Also the text in bold should be suffered an injury - Done, actually meant to remove that and forgot.

"with Ipswich Town on 24 October 2009 following a foul on Jonathan Walters" - needs a full stop at the end of this sentence - Done

"Blake was immediately involved with the first team where he was named on the bench in an FA Cup third round replay with Bristol City," - the wording make it sound like Blake played for Bristol City and not Cardiff City - Done
"He made a career high 24 appearances and helped the side" - He made a career-high 24 appearances and helped the team - Done
"former Wales striker Iwan Roberts to questionin his future at Cardiff City Stadium." - leading former Wales striker Iwan Roberts to question his future at Cardiff City Stadium]. - Done
"Cardiff boss, Malky Mackay, replied to this saying" - manager - Done

"and appeared on an episode of BBC Wales rugby show Scrum V with some of his teammates." - and appearanced on an episode of the BBC Wales rugby show Scrum V with some of his teammates. - Done
"In October 2015, he returned to football after being appointed as a player-coach for Aberbargoed Buds." - wikilink player-coach - Done

"the Wales under-17 and under-19 squads before he was called up to the under-21 squad" - reword to team to avoid close reptition of the same word - Done
"alongside six other uncapped members of Wales under-21 side," - of the Wales under-21 side, - Done

Reference 4 needs to have the author who wrote it - Done
The access date of Reference 9 should be written as 28 August 2008 for consistency - Done
The Plymouth Argyle citations should be consistent in how their publishers are presented - Done

That's all I've got in terms of niggles. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 20:38, 28 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, I've made a quick start on some fixes. Kosack (talk) 12:11, 29 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: I've hopefully addressed all of the issues you raised above, let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 14:03, 29 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Kosack: Yes, that is all the issues addressed. Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 15:56, 29 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]