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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:14, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
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- "Originally built 1817" but not founded until 1858. What was the building used for in the intervening 41 years?
- Done Since the building was originally built by Eliphalet Putman and was near the Putnam Bobbin Factory, it probably was used in connection with that factory. Daniel Cragin purchased this "existing small building" in 1858 from Eliphalet and founded his own business then in this building.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- "the small town" small is in the eye of the beholder.
- Done Took out the word "small".--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:41, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- "produced unique woodenware" sounds a bit sales pitch, lose "unique".
- Done Took out the word "unique".--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- "wooden boxes used for dry measuring boxes." repetitive, would "wooden dry measuring boxes" work?
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:52, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- "Presently" see WP:CURRENTLY.
- Done Reworded to In 2021 it mainly made...--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:06, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- "At the age of 21 in 1856 he was" -> "In 1856, aged 21, he was..."
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:53, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- "The watermill was run on water power" this is kind of self-explanatory, the very definition of a watermill really.
- Done Reworded. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:25, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- I would put the "The building was originally..." bit near the "existing building" part and reorganise.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:34, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- Link quart, peck, bushel.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:34, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- "reasonably priced" POV, is this a quote?
- Done Reworded. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:34, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- "southern" what does that mean in this context?
- Done Reworded the sentence (with ref) and "southern" is no longer used. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:34, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- Where is the area (4 acres (1.6 ha)) ref'ed?
- Done Took out 4 acres. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:49, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- "water-powered mill" not really an architectural style.
- Done Took out. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:00, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- "Colonial (1600–1820)" that's not really mentioned in the article and why the year range? Link?
- Done Took out. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:00, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- "educated in engineering at ... an engineering degree" linked engineering second time, but a bit repetitive anyway to say it twice in one sentence.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:08, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 6 needs date/accessdate
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:54, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 8 year range needs an en-dash.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:54, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- ref 9 date format should be mdy.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:54, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 10 needs date/accessdate.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:54, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 11 likewise, and publisher/website.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:54, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 12 need en-dash in title and date format should be mdy.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:54, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- Seven external links seems excessive, is there any detail in those that could be incorporated into the article?
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:43, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- Middle ext link is marked as dead.
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:54, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
That's it, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 15:34, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for review. I'll start working on it.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:04, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:43, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: So far this month I have made 22 Good Articles. You know the date, so you can see what I am aiming for during this month.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:57, 27 March 2021 (UTC)
- The Rambling Man Appreciate your suggestions for grammar. Your English is very good. He, he,he, he, he.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)
- I'm satisfied with this article, and thanks for your note. Promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:22, 29 March 2021 (UTC)