Talk:Dangun Feveron/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: DasallmächtigeJ (talk · contribs) 00:45, 31 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Will review this over the next day(s).--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 00:45, 31 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

1. Is it well written?

Lead

I would put the sentence about the ports last, because it occured long after the reviews and would make it more chronological, although I wouldn't fail the article if someone convinced me otherwise.
- Done.

Gameplay

Second paragraph: "These starfighters" comes up twice in short order, a little rewording would be nice.
Second paragraph: in what way is the announcer sassy? (does she talk sassy, make sex noises, or does she appear scantily clad?)
- Done.

Development and release

I would include the information that the Xbox Arcade release did not come to pass. May sound trivial but makes the section more coherent to the reader.

Reception

change "the country" to Japan.
- DasallmächtigeJ:Done. Roberth Martinez (talk) 16:44, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

All in all only a few minor tweaks needed.--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 00:23, 1 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Agree everything sorted out.--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 17:02, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

2. Is it verifiable with no original research?

AgreeAll sources that I can access/understand check out, everything that needs a source has one.--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 13:52, 31 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

Does the game only have a framing narrative or an actual story with something specific happening if you beat the game? If it has some sort of conclusion/end, it should be mentioned.--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 13:52, 31 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

DasallmächtigeJ: The game has a proper ending, but sources don't cover it so I chose to just leave it out. The story itself, like most scrolling shooters, is secondary to the game and doesn't really serve any importance other than to provide some background. Namcokid47 ^(Contribs) 17:50, 31 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Namcokid47 As per manual of style, the plot does not need a secondary source, so that should not be problematic. I realize that story is an exaggeration for this genre but since you made it a point to include everything else that is to know about the narrative, including what happens when you finished shooting stuff up seems logical. Maybe in the well-chosen short format you applied so far...--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 00:09, 1 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Conclusion

On hold Until the few very minor issues are sorted, should pass in a matter of days.DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 12:24, 5 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Passed all required changes were made, if the article has a description of the endscene is no criteria to fail it on, will leave it to the editors to decide that later on. Thanks to all contributors for the good work!--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 12:54, 8 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]