Talk:Dancing Eyes/GA1

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Reviewer: Red Phoenix (talk · contribs) 21:54, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Uh, wow. What an odd subject. The last time I saw a game like this, I was playing around on Newgrounds some 15 years ago. But I digress... Red Phoenix ^talk 21:54, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

It's for a Good Topic project, I swear! Ha ha. Thanks for reviewing this. Namcokid47 ^(Contribs) 21:58, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• Most levels revolve around the player slowly removing the clothing off of women, alongside cobras, UFOs, and cardboard boxes. So, is the player taking clothing off of cardboard boxes? A little ambiguous.
• There are enemies that must be avoided, and there are also power-ups that grant different abilities. It ran on the Namco System 11 hardware. Given the sentences here, what does "it" refer to? Also, if the game still exists (and it's safe to presume it does unless there's some record of someone destroying every copy), use the present tense.
  • Fixed.
• Does the game explain why the player character is removing the clothes off of women? Seems odd it would have a character with a name and not even a little bit of backstory.
  • No backstory, from what I can tell. If one existed, I would have put it into the article.
• In most cases, the level involves the player destroying the clothing off of women, however it can also revolve around destroying a cobra around a trapped body builder, UFOs, and cardboard boxes. This too has some ambiguity; is the player destroying UFOs or a cobra around a trapped UFO? A suggested rewording might be to say "... however it can also revolve around destroying UFOs, cardboard boxes, and a cobra around a trapped body builder".
• ability to defeat his enemies How so?
• Completing a level allows the player to briefly around whatever object was in the level as it poses for the camera. I don't think you can use "around" as a verb. "Round", you can.
  • Corrected.
• Last sentence of Development needs a citation.
  • Added.
• Cite GamePro itself, not the website hosting it - especially when the website doesn't look like it's necessarily posting the article with permission and could be a copyright violation. I'm working now on trying to get you an archive URL from GamePro itself, but I apparently sent too many requests too quickly so I'm on temporary delay.
  • Of course, if I get that for you and it has an author name, use it.
    • Thank you. I tried to find the original GamePro link, but I used the Scroll.VG one instead when I found nothing.
• Unlike other releases under the brand, it was to be exclusive to Japan, although it was rumored to have English translation options. As in, it was still Japan-only but would have an English adaptation? Because of what it's paired with, it sort of implies they had options to take it West.
  • Clarified.
• The announcement generated confusion and distaste from several publications, who commented on its sexual appeal and bizarre premise. The announcement had sexual appeal and bizarre premise?
• I ran the 4gamer.net ref through Google Translate, and couldn't find the "Namco has gone mad" statement.
  • That's weird, I swear 4Gamer said something like that last time I checked. Anyway, I removed it.

That's what I have. I'll let you know on the GamePro; I'm still hunting for it in the Internet Archive. Red Phoenix ^talk 22:34, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

@Namcokid47: It took a lot of digging, especially since the search function of GamePro doesn't work in the Internet archive, but here's the real deal on that source. Red Phoenix ^talk 22:56, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

@Red Phoenix: - Addressed concerns. Namcokid47 ^(Contribs) 05:00, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

All right, looks good. Thank you for broadening my horizons into the most unusual arcade game I've ever seen. I'm more than happy to pass the article now. Red Phoenix ^talk 20:57, 24 April 2020 (UTC)