Talk:Dances with Smurfs/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Flash ^{talk} 00:00, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Yello! I saw this episode when it aired and I was cracking up the whole way through, so I was excited to see it at GAN. Check out Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my structural set up. Let's get started, The Flash ^{talk} 00:00, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Is there any source for its UK airdate?
- I couldn't find one; that was there before i worked on the page. I've removed it. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"[...]a platform for politically charges accusations against[...]" -> can you clean this up?
- Done. Better? — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Can you either expand the second paragraph or combine it with the third one?
- I've expanded that second paragraph a bit, but if you think it's no good, feel free to drop that new sentence and combine the two paragraphs instead. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Cartman starts projecting his announcements into television screens classroom[...]" -> "television screens classroom"?
- Fixed. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Shouldn't Cartman's book be italicized?
- Done. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Please add a period after "Dances with Smurfs"
- Ok. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Can you reword the whole Avatar part? It makes it seem like James Cameron adapted the film, not the book.
- Is this better? — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Can you add an image of Beck?
- You got it. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"[...]writes on a blackboard to demonstrate to make a political point[...]" -> try and clean that up a bit
- Is this better? — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"[...]and that he particularly enjoys Cartman's hair[...]" -> "particularly enjoyed"
- Ok. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Delink to Avatar and James Cameron (already linked in summary)
- Done. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"[...]expresses anger that they stole his idea, expressing the idea that[...]" -> can you reword that so it isn't back-to-back "expresses"
- Done. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Delink Smurfs (same as above)
- Ok. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Can you merge the second and first paragraphs? It seems a little abrupt as is.
- No problem. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Can you split it up into two or more paragraphs?
- I split the ratings info and reviews info into two paragraphs. The ratings one is a bit short, but I think this is the most natural way to do it. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Remove the "the" before Nielsen Ratings
- Ok. — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

File:Cartmanchalk.jpg has a fine FU rationale, but needs to be of lower resolution.
- Better? — Hun ter Ka hn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Excellent work!! I'm going to pass this article. Cheers, The Flash ^{talk} 01:53, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]