Talk:Dancehall Queen (Robyn song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk) 00:05, 31 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lead

Some praised it for its hook and chorus, while others dismissed it for its overall sound Who? - should always provide the professional reviewers full name, so others can better understand who stated this. Otherwise, it'll be orish and we wouldn't want that.

I don't see why I should mention the names of the critics. That sentence pretty much summarizes what the critics thought of the song. Pancake (talk) 15:04, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"Dancehall Queen" charted low on the Sverigetopplistan chart and was listed there for only one week. Italic Dancehall Queen, why did it chart "low"? (lack of sales, lack of promotions, etc.) and what's the position?

Added position. Why it charted low is not necessary as this was just a promo. Pancake (talk) 15:04, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The accompanying music video, released in November 2010, was directed by Diplo, Red Foxx and Pomp&Clout. It resembles a karaoke tape with sing-along lyrics on the bottom of the screen. Robyn herself does not appear in the clip. Wanna say it similar to something like this: The accompanying music video, released in November 2010, was directed by Diplo, Red Foxx and Pomp&Clout. It resembles a karaoke tape with sing-along lyrics on the bottom of the screen, which Robyn herself, doesn't appear" and why didn't she appeared in the video?

It is unknown why she didn't appear. This video could have been made just for fun. Pancake (talk) 15:04, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

who produced it with disc jockey Diplo. How about saying it like this? : who produced it with, along with disc jockey Diplo.

I think it's good as it is. Pancake (talk) 15:04, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Reception

Italic all professional reviewers. (ex: The Boston Globe ----> The Boston Globe)

Reviews from newspaper should be italicized, not reviews from websites. The Boston Globe and NME are the only newspapers here. Pancake (talk) 15:04, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Final notes: Shouldn't there be a table for all the peak positions the song charted on? I'm going to put this article on On hold so you can fix the issues that needed to be address, thank you, AJona1992 (talk) 00:41, 31 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

No, since it only charted on one notable chart, it's not necessary :) (digital charts are not listed) Pancake (talk) 15:04, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for clearing that up for me :) good luck! There's only minor errors on this article, I'm positive that you can get this to GA status within this week. Happy editing, AJona1992 (talk) 15:12, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Is there anything specific you want me to improve? I've replied to all your concerns above. Pancake (talk) 17:44, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The critic's name has to be mentioned, the general public wouldn't know who said it, I came upon this problem as well when one of my articles was being reviewed, however, they too insist that the name of the critic should be mentioned. Also in the lead, did the song peak at number fifty-six? In the Reception section, it says it debuted at number fifty-six, which is quite confusing. Other than that, the article is good to go. I have italic "Dancehall Queen", like all other GA-songs. AJona1992 (talk) 18:24, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Names for critics are used in the lead when there are very few critics. See Take It Off (song), a GA that uses "Other critics felt..." in the lead. In the Reception section, it is noted in the same sentence that it only spent one week on the chart. Its debut was its peak. And songs are never italicized. Pancake (talk) 19:08, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I took care of that, on some GA songs they do italic the song sometimes. I'm going to ask a peer mentor on the peak, since it still doesn't make any sense, if two sections have it written differently. AJona1992 (talk) 20:12, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Ref#1 doesn't state that the song leaked anywhere. Please join me in a discussion about this article so we can come to consensus about the singles' chart, thank you, AJona1992 (talk) 00:03, 2 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I think the discussion should be kept here since this is the review page. Anyhow, Ref#1 supports the fact that the video was posted to YouTube. Ref#2 supports that it leaked. Pancake (talk) 10:56, 2 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Yes I understand that, however, we begun talking about how to fix the confusing sentence. We need your help to resolve the situation. Thank you, AJona1992 (talk) 17:35, 2 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User Novice7 helped me with that confusing sentence. Have a look. Pancake (talk) 10:33, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, nice work. I'm going to pass this article, congratulations! AJona1992 (talk) 11:44, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! :) Pancake (talk) 11:50, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]