Talk:Daglish railway station/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Trains2050 (talk · contribs) 14:49, 28 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Greetings. Its my first review so please be patient, thanks

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Not really sure. It does contain some technical language in my opinion, any other opinions? And some parts are unclear On 2nd thoughts and another good read, seems clear and same level of clarity to other similar Good Articles, so pass After talking to a mentor, has recommended a few changes which I state below the template
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	seems ok
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	very well referenced
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	seems good
	2c. it contains no original research.	All backed up by sources
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Seems Ok
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	Article seems to talk in good detail about Danglish station and talks about main topics so seems like a pass!
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Seems to stick with the topic
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Seems very reliable and all neutral.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	No edit wars etc
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	copyright seems good. Most of the photos are nominators own work.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	seems good, photos very well captioned
	7. Overall assessment.	As its my first review, want to discuss it with more experienced editors before doing my final assessment so hang tight.

Hiya, good article in general, after speaking with @Ritchie333:, they made a few comments. the last comment is mine. I am going to put the review on hold until you make any changes.

Are you sure the images are well laid out? There are three images on the left-hand side of the article, all placed next to each other.

I remove one of those images. Now there is a bit more space between them.

There are some repetitive words, for example: "On the platform are two small red brick buildings under a single terracotta tiled roof. Between the buildings is an undercover area for seating. The building displays elements of the Federation Bungalow architectural style." and "The station was constructed during 1923 and the first part of 1924. During construction, the station was often called the Lawler Street station"

I have reworded these.

Relating to the last sentence, who often called the station Lawler Street station, how often did they call it that, and why?

I added the reason why. The source only says "The new 'Lawler Street Station'—as it was frequently referred to prior to completion...", so the people who can't be said, and the how often can't be made more specific.

The service information is out of date. How has COVID affected the passenger figures?

Unfortunately, there is no more recent passenger figures than the ones in the article. Transperth/the PTA do not routinely publish passenger figures for specific stations.

"Christmas Day has a different timetable to other public holidays. At night time, trains are half-hourly or hourly" This is confusing. Does it mean trains are half-hourly or hourly at night time on Christmas Day, or night time in general?

I have swapped these two sentences, so now it should be clearer.

Have there been any accidents or incidents at the station?

No accidents, or at least none that are important enough to write in here. I did a search on https://trove.nla.gov.au/, and all I could find are nearby motor vehicle accidents.

It mentions that the tactile paving is not adequate, does this mean that there is still some tactile paving or none at all?

Thanks, I have clarified this in the article.

Thanks Trains2050 (talk)

@Trains2050: I have addressed all your points. I look forward to hearing from you. Steelkamp (talk) 14:37, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, it is a shame that Transperth does not publish passenger figures, thank you for making these changes, I will pass this. Trains2050 (talk)