Talk:Dabuz/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Namcokid47 (talk · contribs) 18:37, 2 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I've looked over this and your other articles relating to eSports players, and honestly I think I'm going to just fail these. I've been hesitant to do this for a while as I wanted to see if somebody else would take these, but it looks like that isn't the case. None of these articles I think are good enough to be GAs (some I don't think are even notable enough to have an article to begin with). They don't pass the GA criteria for a multitude of reasons - for Dabuz in particular, here's why I've decided to fail it:

Many of these sources are very dubious and I don't see them as being reliable. Many of these, such as EventHubs, are even listed as unreliable on WP:VG/S, and it also uses fansites like Shoryuken. Only a few of these sources are actually okay, so I'm very skeptical on if this even meets our notability policy to begin with.
More choppy writing, like "Super Smash Bros. Ultimate released at the end of 2018, and while Dabuz remained an elite competitor in the new game, he failed to reach the same heights in Ultimate as he did in Smash for Wii U." and sentences that should be merged with other paragraphs ("In August 2019, well after the release of Smash Ultimate, Dabuz won the Smash for Wii U tournament at Super Smash Con 2019.")
How come the lead is so short? There's quite a lot of info in the article yet the lead just one paragraph and a few additional sentences.
The section on his personal life is so short (it's only a sentence) that it likely shouldn't even be included, or at least added somewhere else in the article.

These articles need a lot of work if they want to be GAs. I would definitely have somebody go and copyedit all of these, and replace all the unreliable sources with ones that are usable. Namcokid 47 ^(Contribs) 18:37, 2 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]