Talk:DNA (BTS song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lirim.Z (talk · contribs) 00:28, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

I am reviewing this version from August 7, 2020; 1:32 am

Lead and infobox

• Just use Big Hit, 'Entertainment' doesn't need to be used
• Please add an alt description in the Infobox
• You could add the language parameter
• Should be mentioned that the cover is for the digital release and regular edition
• The studio is mentioned in "Background and release", but not in the Infobox
• Delete unused parameters
• You don't need to use flatlist in the Infoboxes; it's included in the template; see Template:Infobox song#Notes

 Done everything

Background and release

• "The song was written by "Hitman" Bang, Supreme Boi, Kass, Suga, RM and its producer Pdogg. It was engineered by Pdogg, Jeong Wooyeong and KASS, while mixing was handled by James F. Reynolds at Schmuzik Studios. BTS recorded the song at Big Hit Studios in Seoul, South Korea." Is there a reason this isn't under "Music and lyrics"?

• I generally prefer to keep it in Background section.

• again just Big Hit

•  Done

Music and lyrics

• You could add a picture of RM or Suga

• There are already two images in the next section, plus this section contains an audio sample. So I don't think an image is needed here? Besides having an image of either here would be WP:UNDUE to just one of them.

Critical reception and awards

• "Reviewing for Vulture, Dee Lockett stated that song evolved", you missed a "the"
• The ref column should not be sortable

 Done everything

Commercial performance

• "of the September 2017 issue of the [[Gaon Music Chart|Gaon Monthly Digital Chart]] based on digital sales" Link to Gaon Digital Chart, not Gaon Music Chart
• "the 56th and 22nd best-selling song of 2017 and 2018, respectively in South Korea." The Digital Chart combines Downloads+Streams so saying best-selling is wrong; it should "the 56th and 22nd best-performing" or something similar
• might be worth mentioning that DNA sold nearly 100,000 downloads in the US [1]

 Done everything

Music video

• "third video by a K-pop artist" It is the fourth to do so after "Gangnam Style", "Gentleman" and "Ddu-Du Ddu-Du", unless you meant that they are the third Korean act to do so; The Ref (97) you used does not mention "Gentleman"

 Done Rephrased the sentence accordingly

Live performances and other usage

No issues

Track listings

• "Digital download / streaming - Korean version" Replace the hyphen (-) with an en-dash (–)

 Done

Credits and personnel

• The credits are the same for both version so just add "Korean/Japanese version"

 Done

Charts

• No need for a space after the "1" and the Note
• #133 on Gaon Digital Chart Year-End for 2019 [2]

 Done

Sales and certifications

• No issues

Release history

• rowspan="4" for December 6, no need to seperate this

 Done

See also

• Include List of Oricon number-one singles of 2017

 Done

Notes

No issues

Other

References

• Note: Please see the version I used for this review as the numbers might change
• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertions made in this article
• You need to check the automatic translations of the Korean Refs better
• Ref 6: BTS not BTS (band)
• Ref 7, 10: All these Refs link to Apple Music, not Itunes
• Ref 26: BTS not BTS (band)
• Ref 30: You can remove 방탄소년단 from the translation, it literally says BTS BTS
• Ref 49: Got7 not GOT7 MOS:Caps
• Ref 53: Exo not EXO
• Ref 54: I ran it through the Google Translator and Yeoneun seems to be the word consecutive; "kwill" is the artist K.Will
• Ref 57, 58, 59: The translation are weird, you can just use Inkigayo's official website Week 1 Week 2 Week 3

• I have rephrased the translated titles

• Ref 60, 61, 62: Korean title+translation
• Ref 67: en-dash (–), not hyphen (-); also the original link is dead
• Ref 73: Add the issue date in the title or through |date=
• Ref 77: "Sheet" is copies
• Ref 83: "MIC Drop", not "Mic Drop"
• Ref 86: Format the Ref like Ref 83, consistency
• Ref 87, 88, 89: YouTube did not publish the videos, Big Hit did; use |via=YouTube|publisher=Big Hit
• Ref 95: Title needs a translation

• The original ref. is in Spanish, so while adding the script-title, I am using the language code=es, but its keeps turning up errors. Can you have a look at it?

• Ref 99: see YT comments; Original link seems to be dead (at least for me)

• Replaced this link, added a Korean news ref.

• Ref 113: Apple Music
• Ref 118: BTS not BTS (band)
• For the charts you used the template which for whatever reason do not include a translation parameter; might be worth discussing but not your fault
• Ref 136: Date format

 Done everything else

Copy Vialotion

• Copy Violation: I used this tool; The highest in the article is 32,9%, because you copied lyrics translations; generally only copied lyrics or used direct quotes – I see no issue

Outcome

•  On hold There are some small things to work on here, but all in all a very good article. Five days should be enough to fix the minor issues. I'll grant you 5 days to edit the article, you seem active enough. Best regards Lirim | Talk 00:28, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

• Lirim.Z, thank you so much for reviewing this article. I've mostly fixed all issues that you pointed out, except a few and have left comments accordingly. Please let me know if anything else needs to be fixed or if I've missed out anything. --Ashleyyoursmile! 09:20, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

• Ref 74, 127, 128, 131 still need chart issue dates--Lirim | Talk 18:08, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

• Lirim,  Done --Ashleyyoursmile! 18:30, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

• I am passing this article. Very good written, structured article. Looking forward to more.--Lirim | Talk 19:37, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

Edit:: I forgot, that I should wait for a couple of days if somebody else has some comments. I am sorry.--Lirim | Talk 19:46, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

• Lirim.Z, thanks a lot for this review! I'm happy to hear that you're ready to pass this. A small query: Does this stand a chance as a FA in future? I'd really appreciate your feedback. Of course I shall make the necessary changes to the prose, etc., but I would like to ask for your opinion first. --Ashleyyoursmile! 20:10, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

• It has been nearly three days. That should be enough. Article passed this review.--Lirim | Talk 12:10, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

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