Talk:D. Djajakusuma/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grapple X (talk · contribs) 00:34, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
"to a noble, government-employee father and his wife" -> consider rephrasing this; as is "noble" seems to be used as a generic adjective ("he is noble and grand") rather than specifically stating he's a member of the nobility.
Reworded. It had originally been linked
"As a child he enjoyed watching films and stage performances, at times sneaking out of his home after curfew to watch performances" -> repetition of "performances". Try "productions" for the first one instead.
Done, ish.
"despite his parents hopes" -> missing possessive
Done
"which were considered not compliant with the need for modernisation" -> try "incompatible" rather than "not compliant"
Sounds good
"garnered him best director at the first FFI in 1954" -> "garnered him the award for best director at the first FFI in 1954"
Done
"Djajakusuma's later film Bimo Kroda won Best Director at the 1967" -> surely he, and not the film, won the award.
How's this?
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Grand.
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Yep.
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Not a problem.
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Looks good.
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Suitable and well-used; little rough but well worth having.
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Shouldn't take a lot of work here; holding for seven days (doubt it'll be that long though :P). GRAPPLE X 00:34, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Seven minutes, maybe. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:41, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
It's almost like you saw this one coming. GRAPPLE X 00:54, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Or a fortunate overlap of time zones. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:57, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]