Talk:Cynthia Lennon/GA1

GA Reassessment

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Starting GA reassessment as part of the GA Sweeps process. Jezhotwells (talk) 19:45, 24 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
Relationship with Lennon: The Beatles went to Hamburg in 1960,... - is this a second vist/ I ask because the previous entence talks about him retruning from Hamburg.

The Beatles went to Hamburg again in April 1962, but she decided that she had had enough of living with Mimi,... - a bit of a non-sequitor there.

Consistency - sometimes two hyphens are used as punctuation, sometimes one

Style - it is difficult sometimes to decide which she is being talked about. I would suggest following the WP naming conventions Powell for Cynthia in the early years, Mrs Powell for her mother, Lennon for John Lennon.

After the marriage, use full married name or his wife as appropriate. It is difficult and other editors may disagree, occasional use of Cynthia may be fine.

Kenwood: ...nineteen-year-old student Pauline Jones, who was Freddie's fiancée... - who is Freddie? Is this another name for Alf, if so why - keep it consistent.

The Beatles publicly renounced drugs (although never completely) bad gammar .

Their decree nisi was granted on 8 November 1968.[95] She learned of Lennon's death while she was staying with friends in London. Wow! twelve years gone just like that. Need something in there. Re-roganise to put Lennon's death in proper chronological order.

Overall, I feel there is too much trivia and the later section of her life is covered at a gallop. More balance and eveness required. Give the artciel a good copy-edit and see if a better way of resolving the over reliance on given names rather than family names can be resolved.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
Well referenced. I assume Good Faith for all print sources. Ref #30 on tripod [1] is not a reliable source;
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
Rather unbalanced as mentioned above - a little more on her life after John left her and a little les on the rtivia, eg kitchen at Kenwood, etc.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
No source given for File:Cynthia and Julian at Kenwood.JPG. I think the status of this picture is rather dubious. Likewise no source given for File:Cynthia and brother father.JPG or File:Cynthia and John on flight to USA.jpg

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

OK, I am placing this on hold for seven days for these matters to be considered. Notifying major contributors and projects. Jezhotwells (talk) 00:20, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Well nothing has happened so I am de listing this. Jezhotwells (talk) 01:43, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You may have noticed (by looking at my contributions) that I have been away for 14 days. It's called a holiday, y'know. As for your review, I have to point out that your spelling is not the best: "vist, entence, retruning, gammar, Re-roganise, artciel, rtivia, de listing". The kettle calling the pot black, methinks.--andreasegde (talk) 22:36, 5 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]