Talk:Cyclone Wasa–Arthur/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 05:33, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hello Jason Rees, I will be the reviewer for this Good Article Nomination. Well, I can't even remember that last time I reviewed one of your articles.--12george1 (talk) 05:33, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Severe Tropical Cyclone Wasa–Arthur was the first major tropical cyclone," - What is a "major tropical cyclone"? Is that like a major hurricane?
- My impression was significant TC, rather than an intensity classification.Jason Rees (talk) 14:59, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"to affect French Polynesia and Tahiti since 1983." - Can you name that cyclone from 1983?
- Id rather convert it too say the 1982-83 season then speculate and specify the system, since there was something like 8 systems affecting FP that year.Jason Rees (talk) 14:59, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"The system gradually developed further and developed hurricane-force winds on December 6," - That's the second sentence that you used the phrase "developed further". Also, you used "developed" twice in the same sentence. I suggest you re-word the sentence to something like this: "The system gradually strengthened further and acquired hurricane-force winds on December 6,"
- Done.Jason Rees (talk) 16:55, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"After completing the loop Wasa moved southwards before it peaked in intensity" - Insert a comma after the word "loop"
- Done.Jason Rees (talk) 16:55, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"before the system turned and moved towards the east-northeast and entered" - "and moved" isn't necessary
- Done.Jason Rees (talk) 16:55, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"entered into warmer waters near the Tuamotu Islands" - Wikilink "warmer waters" to sea surface temperatures
- Done.Jason Rees (talk) 16:55, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"During December 15, the system maintained its peak intensity, as it moved through the uninhabited Acteon Group of islands, before during the next day it started to gradually weaken. Arthur degenerated into a shallow depression during December 17, before it was last noted during the next day as it dissipated to the north of the Pitcairn islands." - You used it/its five times in these two sentences. Alternative by substituting in words and phrases like the "cyclone", "system", and "storm".
Ive reworked the sentences slightly.Jason Rees (talk) 16:15, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"The system destroyed destroyed or damaged several homes" - Double double word
- Done.Jason Rees (talk) 16:55, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"On Rurutu island, Moerai harbour was destroyed by a cyclonic swell generated by the system, while the local school and police station were destroyed by high waves." - What's the difference between a cyclonic swell and high waves? If there is none, combine this to say "On Rurutu island, Moerai harbour, the local school, and the police station were destroyed by high waves."
- Hurricanehink answered this for me earlier: A swell is a long piece of energy that travels across the ocean. A wave is one individual thing, which is the difference between the bottom and the top of the ocean when the seas vascillate. In other words, a swell is akin to a tropical storm, whereas a wave is like a gust.Jason Rees (talk) 01:55, 4 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Two people were killed while asleep after torrential rainfall from the system caused a mudslide on the island of Moorea" - I hope this doesn't sound too picky, but is it really relevant whether or not the people were sleeping? People have been known to die from mudslides while awake. :P
- It probably isnt worth it so ive removed it.Jason Rees (talk) 16:12, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"intensity with 1-minute sustained windspeeds of 195 km/h (120 mph), which made it equivalent to a category 3 hurricane on the Saffir-Simpson hurricane wind scale" - "windspeeds" should be "wind speeds". Ditto in these places: "there reporting sustained windspeeds of 70 km/h (45 mph).", "minute sustained windspeeds of 95 km/h (60 mph), which made", and "Tropical Cyclone 08P, with peak 1-minute sustained windspeeds of 85 km/h (55 mph)"
- Done.Jason Rees (talk) 16:12, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"On Rurutu island, Moerai harbour was destroyed by a cyclonic swell generated by the system, while the local school and police station were destroyed by high waves." - Ditto from the same sentence in the lede
- See above.Jason Rees (talk) 16:12, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
For reference #4, "Bannister Anthony J;" should have a comma after his last name
- Added.Jason Rees (talk) 16:55, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Good job JR! I am going to pass this article and list it as a GA now. Regards, --12george1 (talk) 20:14, 9 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]