Talk:Cyclone Filao/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 17:12, 13 May 2013 (UTC) I will review this article. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 17:12, 13 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Conclusion

I will have to fail this nomination. I feel there is too much copy-editing and grammar correction to be done. I think that with the output of effort into this article, it can eventually meet GA standards, but, for now, this article is unprepared and unqualified to become a GA. I salute your effort and anticipate the second nomination of this article after alterations are made. Thanks for nominating! QatarStarsLeague (talk) 14:09, 14 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

What is wrong with this article in particular? How come you did not do a trough review? IMO the writing is fine. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:51, 14 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

This line jumps out to me upon first glance as not great On February 23, RSMC Reunion's Meteo France (MFR) started to monitor a tropical depression that had developed just north-northwest of Madagascar. While i also note that you say "Data from both agencies suggest that Cyclone Filao quickly weakened over land, dissipating several hours later." which is poor as well especially when we know exactly wehn the JTWC issued their final warning and when it was last noted.Jason Rees (talk) 16:07, 17 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

As for the former, I tweaked it slightly. As for the latter, there is an issue there that you did not mention so, I fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:40, 17 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]