Talk:Culture of Malaysia/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk) 02:07, 21 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: one found and fixed.[1] Jezhotwells (talk) 02:10, 21 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Linkrot: four found, one repaired and three tagged.[2] Jezhotwells (talk) 02:19, 21 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Substantive review within 24 hours. Jezhotwells (talk) 02:19, 21 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
The prose is not well written. It suffers from poor word choice, clumsy phrasing, lack of distinction between single and plural words, and lack of consistency in word use.

Examples:

Architecture exhibits various influences...
Malaysian music has a variety of origins, and is largely percussion.
Much early Malaysian literature was based on Indian epics, which remained unchanged even as Malays converted to Islam; this has expanded in recent decades.;
Cuisine is often divided along ethnic lines, but some mixtures have occurred, creating unique dishes.
Official holidays differ by state; the most widespread one is Hari Merdeka, which celebrates the independence of Malaya., but in the Holidays section we have The most widespread holiday is the "Hari Kebangsaan" (Independence Day), otherwise known as "Merdeka" (Freedom), Consistency is needed.
By definition of the Malaysian constitution, all Malays are Muslims. , this is contradicted by Although Islam is the official state religion, the Constitution of Malaysia guarantees freedom of religion.
The Malaysian government defined Malaysian culture through the issuance of the "1971 National Culture Policy". issuance?
Some cultural disputes exist between Malaysia and neighbouring countries, notably Indonesia. "notably is considered to be a weasel word.
Traditional Malaysian art was mainly centred around the crafts of carving, weaving, and silversmithing. Traditional art ranges from handwoven baskets from rural areas to the silverwork of the Malay courts. contradiction of tense.
A form of art called mak yong is strong in the Kelantan state, and incorporates dance and drama. However, older Malayan-Thai performing arts such as mak yong have declined in popularity due to their Hindu-Buddhist origin. Contradictory
Wayang kulit (shadow puppet theatre) has been popular in Malaysia for centuries. It takes two puppets carved and painted by hand, usually made with cow and buffalo skin. Very poor prose
Houses are built for tropical conditions, built on stilts with high roofs and large windows, allowing ventilation to cool down the house. Then a few lines later: Houses are built with ventilation in mind; they are often raised on timber stilts to increase air flow.
Hindus in Malaysia celebrate Diwali, the festival of light, then a few lines later: Similarly, the portmanteau Deepa Raya was coined when Hari Raya Puasa and Deepavali coincided. consistency
Due to the lack of funding for smaller projects, a strong independent film movement has developed. Contradictory

These are just examples. The article needs copy-editing by someone with a good command of written English. It should never have been nominated in this poor state.

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
{http://go2travelmalaysia.com/} is a travel portal, not a WP:RS

{http://www.huffingtonpost.com/} is not regarded as a reliable source, but the report of Anwar's speech is probably OK.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
File:Monsopiad's Skulls.jpg doesn't appear to illustrate any specific point in the article.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
This article needs considerable work to make the grade. Get it properly copy-edited, then take to peer review. It has the makings of a good artcile, but it is not there or even near yet. Jezhotwells (talk) 19:48, 21 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]