Talk:Culture in music cognition/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sasata (talk · contribs) 23:33, 21 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'll claim this review. I'll make uncontroversial copyedits as I read the article, and bring anything else here for discussion. Comments in a day or two. Sasata (talk) 23:33, 21 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. Ok, here's some comments to get us started. Prose looks good, but there's a few instances where psycho-jargon is used without adequate explanation. Some end-of-paragraph sentences are uncited, leaving me to question whether the conclusion if from a source or from the authors of this article. I'll let you work on these while I dig more deeply into the literature and cross-check some of the sources. Sasata (talk) 20:24, 24 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"Familiarity for culturally regular meter styles" what is a regular meter style?
"The looking times of 4- to 8-month old Western infants indicate …" what is a "looking time"?
"… and did not indicate that one style of music was more tense than the other." not sure what this means
"… the children's self-reported distraction was the same for all excerpts." there is no context or explanation given that helps me understand what this "distraction" is about
"Thus, the language of lyrics interacts with a listener's culture and language abilities to affect preferences." is this a conclusion from the source? If so, it should be cited (if not, it's original research)
"Fast tempo, for example, is typically associated with happiness, regardless of a listener's cultural background." source? (Anecdotally, when I listen to thrash metal, I don't associate that with "happiness")
"Thus, the cue-redundancy model may be overly simplistic in its distinctions between structural feature detection and cultural learning, at least in the case of complexity." source?
"Use of dichotomous scales (e.g., simple happy/sad ratings) may mask this phenomenon, as these tasks require participants to report a single component of a multidimensional affective experience." source?
please explain/link/define "executive function, "semantic retrieval", "cognitive schemata"
enculturation should be linked earlier is the article (there's some other examples of terms that should be linked earlier, on their first occurrence--tempo comes to mind; please check throughout)
links already present in the article are not to be repeated in the "See also" section

No response from nominator, who has been inactive for a couple of weeks, so I am failing this review. Sasata (talk) 19:04, 13 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

(Technical comment): the bullet list above was added in the 24 November edit, not in the 13 December fail. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 21:25, 16 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]