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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:18, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]


I'll have this done by tomorrow JAGUAR  19:18, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

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  • The grid references in the lead should be removed in compliance per WP:LEAD. They should be re-located to the infobox?
  • "near the western end of the Mendip Hills, Somerset, notified in 1952" - this should be removed from this sentence and re-located into the history part of the lead (where it says "Most of the site is owned by National Trust.."). Also, notified by who?
  • Should Common land be capitalised? It isn't in its article
  • "At the western end of the hills, closest to the M5 motorway is Crook Peak" - missing comma
  • "is used by the West Mendip Soaring Association to fly model aircraft in south-westerly / southerly or north-easterly winds" - what does this mean??
  • "Some believe the name 'Crook'" - I know assertions like these can't be used in GA articles, this should be re-worded. Who believed it? Historians? If so it could be re-worded to [Historians/placeholder] believe the name 'Crook'?
  • " comes from Old British 'Cruc'" - is this meant to be "Old English"?
  • "two Neanderthal teeth dated to about 55,000 years BP" - just curious, is BP the same as Before Christ?
  • The Barton Camp section is lacking on information, what type of camp is it? Military? Disused? If possible, it would be great if you could flesh this out

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On hold

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There are some prose and organisational issues that prevent this from meeting the GA criteria at the moment, but I'm confident that once they're all addressed then this would stand a good chance of passing. I hate to let well-researched articles go, unlike some reviewers! JAGUAR  19:32, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks again, Rod! This article now meets the GA criteria. Well done JAGUAR  15:24, 15 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]