Talk:Crazy Rich Asians (film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: DAP388 (talk · contribs) 04:12, 9 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

This is an article in pretty good shape. Only a few minor issues stand out presently, and once they are addressed, then we’re good to go!

Lead

This section looks a bit thin with the current formatting. Would either recommend merging the second paragraph with the opening paragraph, or expand it with information about audience response to the film in Singapore and China during the press tour, or criticism about the film’s casting choices (or other relevant information), to improve the flow and ultimately create a more concise summary of the article.

Added a mention of the controversies. DanielleTH ^{(Say hi!)} 01:27, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Plot

"while Nick's cousin Astrid", redundant, since the connection between the two is already established in the opening sentence.
"especially with Nick expected to inherit his family's corporation", needs clarification. Corporations have multiple shareholders and hence you cannot inherit an entire corporation. You can inherit stocks or shares of a corporation though. Something like "especially with Nick expected to inherit a share of his family’s corporation" will suffice.
"At the wedding, Rachel stands up to Amanda and Eleanor, asserting herself against them", third half is redundant. No need for that when Rachel standing up to Amanda and Eleanor has already been established prior.
"Using the findings of a private investigation, they reveal that Rachel was conceived through an adulterous affair, after which Rachel's mother, Kerry, abandoned her husband and fled to the United States, and demand Nick to stop seeing Rachel for fear of a scandal." A bit clunky. Should be broken up into separate sentences instead of a run-on, probably after the bit about Kerry fleeing to the US.

Corrected all. For the "inherit" concerns, the film states that he's expected to eventually run it, as in become its CEO. So I've changed the sentence to "Colin expresses his concern about the trouble it will cause Rachel, especially with Nick expected to run his family's corporation in the future". I broke up the final bullet into two separate sentences. DanielleTH ^{(Say hi!)} 01:57, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Costumes

"Costume design was handled by Mary Vogt with Andrea Wong serving as a consultant and senior costume buyer", comma after Vogt.

Done. DanielleTH ^{(Say hi!)} 02:00, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Box Office

"In Singapore, the location of film for the majority of its duration, Crazy Rich Asians grossed over $5 million." Single sentence paragraphs are discouraged. Merge with another paragraph or, if possible, expand with pertinent information about the box office performance in Singapore.

Expanded the paragraph. DanielleTH ^{(Say hi!)} 01:52, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

DanielleTH, That’s all. Let me know when you’ve made the changes and I’ll take another look. Cheers! DAP 💅 23:44, 10 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

All changes made, DAP388. DanielleTH ^{(Say hi!)} 02:00, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Happy to give it the green light. Great work! DAP 💅 02:17, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]