Talk:Crazy (4Minute song)/GA1
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:55, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
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Not long after reviewing your previous GAN, I will take this one on --K. Peake 12:55, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Infobox looks good!
- "with additional writing by" → "with co-writing from"
- "Hyuna, and was released on February 9, 2015, by" → "Hyuna. It was released on February 9, 2015 by"
- "the track sees the group returning to their signature" → "the song sees the group returning to their earlier"
"Song" is appearing twice in the sentence so I'm using "track" for the latter half of the sentence.
- "its production, hip hop sound and the group's" → "its production and hip hop sound, as well as 4Minute's"
- "Billboard in 2019 included the track" → "In 2019, Billboard included the song"
- "the single debuted and peaked at number three" → "it peaked at number three"
- "number two on the US" → "number two on the US Billboard"
- "channel and features" → "channel simultaneously with the single release, and features"
- "performing non-stop choreography" → "performing constant choreography"
- "The group promoted" → "4Minute promoted"
- "their solo concert in Myanmar in April 2015." → "their April 2015 solo concert in Myanmar."
Done everything else
Background and release
[edit]- Img looks good
- "South Korean girl group 4Minute took nearly one year hiatus." → "4Minute took a hiatus for nearly one year."
- "announced their return to" → "announced a return to"
- "their sixth extended play," → "their sixth EP,"
- Remove target on Crazy
- "one, "Cold Rain" was" → "one, "Cold Rain", was"
- "on January 26, 2015, by" → "on January 26, 2015, through"
- "second single from the album," → "second single from the EP," with the target
- "impacted Korean Broadcasting System radio" → "was serviced to Korean Broadcasting System radio stations"
- "expressed the group's true colours." → "expressed 4Minute's true colours."
- Target Gayoon to Heo Ga-yoon
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues with the below statement
Done All
Music and lyrics
[edit]- "set over low-pitched beats featuring" → "with low-pitched beats that features" on the audio sample text and remove wikilink on Middle Eastern
- The two sentences about the song being hip hop should be the ones that start the section instead
- Target key to Key (music)
- Target hooks to Hook (music)
- "It makes use of" → ""Crazy" makes use of"
- Wikilink drum machines like this instead
- Remove wikilink on Middle Eastern
- [15][13] should be put in numerical order
- Remove target on rap
- Target Jiyoon to Jeon Ji-yoon
- Target Sohyun to Kwon So-hyun
- Target Jihyun to Son Ji-hyun
- "Gayoon who performs" → "Gayoon, who performs"
- "the group taunts the listener into its" → "4Minute taunts the listener into the song's"
Done All
Reception
[edit]Critical reception
[edit]- "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
- All of the rankings on lists should be in the same area of critical reception; it is awkward having most at the end and some near the start, they should all be around the latter
- "Dorof further wrote that" → "Jakob Dorof wrote that" since the order should be switched for lists
- Idolator should be italicised
- "opined the group had" → "opined that 4Minute had"
- "aggressive" and felt" → "aggressive," and felt"
- ""outstanding" which he" → ""outstanding," which he"
- "ranked it the best song of 4Minutes' career," → "named the track the best song of their career,"
- "and Idolator listed" → "and Idolator both listed"
Done All
Awards
[edit]- You should create this sub-section for the table and its above text, though fixes are needed; see your own article "Any Song" for a proper example
Done
Chart performance
[edit]- Retitle to Commercial performance
- "It was the sixth" → ""Crazy" was the sixth"
- "in February 2015 of the" → "in February 2015 on the"
- "at number two on US" → "at number two on the US"
Done All
Promotion and music video
[edit]- Retitle to Music video and promotion, since promotion comes after the music video here
- "to the release of the single," → "to the release of "Crazy","
- "serving as a" → "which served as a"
- "accompanying music video for was uploaded to the group's" → "accompanying music video was uploaded to 4Minute's"
- The word official is useless here
- [33][9] put in numerical order
- Wikilink black and white
- "For music critic Dorof, the video" → "For Dorof, the video"
- "the song and the album," → "the song and Crazy,"
- "made several appearances on" → "made appearances on several"
- "and SBS' Inkigayo." → "and SBS' Inkigayo to perform the song."
- "solo concert titled" → "solo concert entitled"
Done All
Track listing
[edit]- Good
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Good
Charts
[edit]- Good
Release history
[edit]- Good
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks too high at 49.2%; trim Vice quoting to fix this
- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
- WP:OVERLINK of The K-pop Herald on ref 6
- Remove KBS International Radio publisher from ref 8
- Cite Idolator as website instead for ref 19
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 24 and 26
- The language parameter is missing for a lot of the Gaon refs, or is it not needed in the cases when the titles of the charts are accessible in English?
- StarN News → Star N News on ref 38
- WP:OVERLINK of Gaon Music Chart on ref 39
Done All
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- On hold but should be easy to fix the issues since this article is quite short! --K. Peake 21:46, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake, thank you so much for another quick and awesome review! I have left one comment above and fixed everything else as you pointed out. Also, I added another fact to the newly created "Awards" section which I'd missed earlier. Let me know what you think of all the changes. --Ashleyyoursmile! 07:48, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- Ashleyyoursmile ✓ Pass now after I did some very brief copy editing. --K. Peake 15:55, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.