Talk:Connection Lost/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Pamzeis (talk · contribs) 09:34, 7 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk · contribs) 03:38, 17 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I will be taking on this review and I am SO excited as this is actually my favourite episode of the show and my one of my favourite episodes of all time!

This article looks amazing so far: the sourcing is amazing, the information is thorough and there is clear GNG, there is no OR or copyrights violations etc and I could go on and on, and honestly I recommend going for FA after this passes GA.

I have a couple of comments though from my initial reading:

1.) Lead: "Haley is pregnant with Andy's baby, and the two of them ran away to Las Vegas to get married." - I would recommend adding "that" before the "two of them" and removing the comma, or rewording it.

2.) Plot A.) Can some of the paragraphs be merged together? As they are quite short.

B.) "after a fight" - Could it be clarified that the fight took place offscreen/the previous night?

C.) Please link "Facebook".

D.) The last scene (where Claire is viewing websites and there is the "I know you are ignoring this Mom") could use a short mention.

E.) Can you link Dylan and Andy to their respective sections of the character list? Dylan has a redirect link and I just made one for Andy.

3.) "Production": A.) "Claire's laptop includes many inside jokes" - Can this be explained/slightly expanded/have a few examples?

B.) "both features were non-existent" - Could this be reworded for clarity?

C.) (Last paragraph) - "Each act needed to look as though it were one continuous shot with no cuts" - Can this be clarified?

D.) Is there any more information regarding the rehearsals or actors' views on the episode? No worries if not, I just thought it would benefit the article but it is not essential.

4.) Reception

A.) Change "Reviews" to "Critical reception"

B.) " even though some of them stated that it looked like an advertisement for Apple" - Could this be expanded/clarified? Also, I would recommend replacing "even though" with "though" and adding a comma before it.

5.) Images - could a free image be added in "Filming and post-production" or the reception section?

After these are addressed I will do a quick scan for anymore issues and pass it. Please let me know if you have any questions at all :) DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 03:38, 17 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]