Talk:Confessions (Usher album)/GA1

GA review 1

"in its first week, the most copies ever sold in a week" - repetition (a week)...can you reword
- Changed one instance of week to debut. --Efe (talk) 07:01, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"dominate the chart." - should that be plural?
- Ahm, sounds awkward. --Efe (talk) 07:01, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"A classic R&B album" - NPOV, does anyone actually call it this?
- Its the opinion of Usher himself and the producers but I removed it. --Efe (talk) 07:01, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"claimed the record his story." - missing word? The record is his story?
- Fixed. --Efe (talk) 07:01, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Usher "didn't look too far" when he started working on Confessions." - I don't get what this is trying to say...
- Copy edited. Please re-check. Im not sure. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"to give the new record with personal touch" - huh?
- This is funny sentence. Changed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"thought of doing it would let the people knew Usher introspectively" - huh again? this is sometimes very unclear
- Yes! I was thinking this before. This word doesn't fit. Fixed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"For instance, "Burn" was built around a situation like that of its lyrics" - that tells nothing to someone who hasn't heard the song
- Fixed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Same through with the supposedly title track "Confessions Part II", they were conversing and its concept was written down" - same again (and second word appears to be a typo, and comma should be semicolon)
- Which one? Fixed semicolon. Added info bout the lyrics/concept. (Actually its supported in the following lines but to not break the story, I put it in here, as suggested.) --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"When "Yeah!" came in, however, Usher and the label were plagued by marketing strategies" - the however makes no sense at the start of the section
- Yah. Removed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Early reaction and lyrical interpretation section needs a good copyedit...
- I'll to try contact someone while doing my thing. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Although songs like "Burn" is a reference to his dying relationship with Chilli" - were there any other Chilli-related songs, or just that one?
- There is. For instance, "Truth Hurts". --Efe (talk) 07:50, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"prevented it to happen" - prevented it from happening would read better I think
- As suggested. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"With strategies to keep the album boosts its sales" - huh?
- Fixed. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"However, it actually began when American R&B and soul singer Alicia Keys, who is featured on the track, that "brought in that the talk of repackaging started"" - rmv "that"
- REmoved. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"The success of the album has put Usher in the mainstream for becoming the biggest artist of the year" - needs past tense
- Changed to "The success of the album put Usher in the mainstream, becoming the biggest artist of 2004." --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
More critical response (what reviewers said) would be good
- I'll look for some. --Efe (talk) 07:31, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Oh my, i missed all the fun! ;-)Realist² (Come Speak To Me) 15:09, 25 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]