Talk:Colton Parayko/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 20:38, 11 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
It contains copyright infringements -
It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

Links

Prose

Lede

WP:SHORT DESCRIPTION? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
Can we condense this? This lede is four small paragraphs, could easily be two. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
reword to avoid WP:SEAOFBLUE. ice hockey defenceman Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Can we reword "underlooked"? There's two different meanings to this word, and neither fit here. Overlooked would be better. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
Whats with the jump from being drafted to the blues, and then playing with Alaska Nanooks? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Lee Vilenski, unsure what you mean here. After being drafted he joined collegiate hockey immediately (similar to players like Quinn Hughes). HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:56, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
All-WCHA First Team - SEAOFBLUE Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
also, WCHA needs to be stated in full. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
The lede seems to have very little on his NHL career, which is the most important part. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Parayko won the Stanley Cup as a member of the Blues in 2019. - this is a significantly bigger deal than what is being said here. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Internationally, Parayko has competed for Team Canada - the Canadian team. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- I can change it but it is known as Team Canada (see the lede of Canada men's national ice hockey team)

General

Link motorcross. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
Midget AAA - what is this? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
St. Albert Crusaders U18 AA of the Rural & Edmonton Midget 15AA Hockey League - this seems a bit confusing to me. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- The Rural & Edmonton Midget 15AA Hockey League is the league they played in but I have removed it.
Is there a link for points, isn't it goals in hockey? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done Goals are a type of point but not all points are goals. I have WL Point (ice hockey)
try-outs not try out. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
link defenceman Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
Link what a "shift" is. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
The bit about him getting scouted could probably be the second para here. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
After the Oil Barons fell to the - the "X fell to Y" isn't fantastic writing, can we say "defeated", or "beat"? The term fell usually refers to soldiers dying in battle. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
NCAA Men's Division I Western Collegiate Hockey Association - reword for links next to each other. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Air Force Falcons men's ice hockey team - probably on links like this, just need to say the Air Force Falcons. The rest is kinda implied. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
Parayko's outstanding play - is this a quote? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Award,[17] - punct. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
During the first round, Parayko led the Blues over the Blackhawks by becoming the first defenseman in franchise history to score in a Game 7 - is this really all that notable? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- It was their very first Stanley Cup so he was the very first player in 50 years to ever score in Game 7.
Where is "Regular season and playoffs" sourced? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- At the very bottom of the article it says Biographical information and career statistics from NHL.com, or Eliteprospects.com, or Eurohockey.com, or Hockey-Reference.com, or The Internet Hockey Database

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:38, 11 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]