Talk:Collin Balester/GA2
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 02:22, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
I accidentally had too much fun at the local Irish pub tonight, so I will probably be reviewing this during teacher in-service time tomorrow. — GhostRiver 02:22, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
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Infobox and lede
[edit]- Add "from 2008 to 2015" for the MLB sentence, either at the start or after the words "Major League Baseball (MLB)"
- Link the first instance of Prospect (sports) and designated for assignment in the lede
Early life
[edit]- Link the first instance of surfboard
- "His father makes "Balestar" surfboards, which are sold in most surf shops. Tom also runs a shop off of Slater Avenue in Huntington Beach." → "His father runs a surfboard shop off of Slater Avenue in Huntington Beach, and also makes "Balestar" surfboards, which are sold widely in surf shops."
- Use the "convert" template for "83mph" to make it 83 mph (134 km/h)
- Pipe "scout" to Scout (sports)
- WL the first instance of shutout
Washington Nationals
[edit]2004–2007
[edit]- Make sure you use an en dash instead of a hyphen for the subhead
- Spell out the WHIP acronym the first time that it's introduced
- Pipe "Washington" to Washington, D.C.
- "expecting to not receive" → "expecting not to receive" (I hear the voice of my mother telling me not to split my infinitives)
- "A week after being named to the Futures Game Roster, Balester was..." → "The following week, he was..."
- "So eager was he to join the Clippers," → "In his eagerness to join the Clippers,"
- No comma needed after "Tampa Bay Devil Rays"
2008
[edit]- Delink "striking out", already done in the early life section
2009
[edit]- Pipe "rotation" to starting rotation
- "for one of the final two spots"
- Lowercase "spring" in the second sentence
- "During Spring training, he went 1–1 with a 6.75 ERA, getting reassigned to the minors on March 28, though he remained a part of the organization's long-term plans." → "After going 1–1 with a 6.75 ERA during spring training, he was reassigned to the minors on March 28, but remained a part of the organization's long-term plans."
- Do we know what caused Zimmermann to go on the DL?
- Comma after "from free agency and"
2010
[edit]- "in order for him to convert to being a relief pitcher" → "to begin the process of converting him to a relief pitcher"
- Same as above, do we know why Atilano was hurt?
- I don't think you need to mention that Weeks played the following day; it's certainly not recommended to start again right after getting nailed in the head, but I'm pretty sure Tatis just did it after Kennedy beanballed him
- On second thought, maybe "Much like Weeks, Reynolds was fine" → "Neither batter suffered a serious injury"
2011
[edit]- I'm not sure the best way to reword this, but "to begin the season" shows up twice in consecutive sentences
- Link the first instance of designated for assignment
- Pipe "waivers" to Waivers (MLB)
Detroit Tigers
[edit]- Delink DFA here, as it should be linked earlier
Texas Rangers organization
[edit]- I'm wondering if there's more of a story here about the Tommy John surgery – did he leave the game with pain, had it been lingering? No worries if you can't find much more information, but worth checking out
- Didn't see anything about him leaving the game with pain (though I'd imagine that he did), but I did put that he struggled in that game, as well as a quote from when he returned in 2015 (in the Reds section). Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:16, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
- "In 6 games (5 starts) → "In six games (five starts)" per MOS:NUMBERS
Pittsburgh Pirates organization
[edit]- "After starting the 2014 season on the disabled list for the Triple-A Indianapolis Indians, he rehabbed with a couple of rookie-level teams, then joined the Double-A Altoona Curve on July 31." → "Although he was assigned to the Triple-A Indianapolis Indians, Balester opened the season on the disabled list and did not start pitching until he underwent a rookie-level rehab assignment. On July 31, he joined the Double-A Altoona Curve."
- Drop the context for Indianapolis in the second para, as you mentioned it in the first
Cincinnati Reds
[edit]- "recording 7 saves" → "and recorded seven saves"
- "a tie game" → "a tied game"
- WL walk-off home run
Samsung Lions
[edit]- "Making three starts for the Lions, he lost each of them, posting an 8.03 ERA." → "He lost all three starts that he did make for the Lions, and recorded an 8.03 ERA in the process."
- "and Balester considered retiring." → "and Balester considered retirement."
Last professional season
[edit]- I think you can shorten the WL to just "American Association", as that's what they tend to go by
Pitching style
[edit]- Same as earlier, wherever a speed is listed, use the convert template to include the km/h as well
- Elaborate on the back leg dropping – how specifically did that impact his release?
- Source doesn't say. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:10, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
Personal life
[edit]- The part about his sister might fit better in the early life, with the other stuff about surfing
- Where it says "grew his mustache again", there haven't been previous references to said mustache, so it flows awkwardly
- I also assume this was a Movember thing, in which case that page should probably be linked
References
[edit]- In [17], change the work from "Pennlive.com" to The Patriot-News
- Detroit Free Press has a "The" in [58] but not in [52]; I believe not having it is the correct one
- "MiLB.com" is inconsistently capitalized (I'm looking at [47] in particular)
General comments
[edit]- We're going to disregard the any issues from previous GA nominations have not been adequately addressed criteria, as the previous review was an auto-fail from literally a decade ago.
- No stability issues (only one regular editor)
- Pictures are both allowed for use and are relevant to the article, as they all relate to the subject
- Earwig score looks good, the higher results are all attributed direct quotes
All the usual minor fixes – putting on hold for now, and ping me as always if you have questions! — GhostRiver 21:23, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
- Great work, passing now! — GhostRiver 15:27, 28 August 2021 (UTC)