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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 17:40, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
I'll give this one a review shortly. I remember watching this one when it was first broadcast - I was quite surprised that David Warner's role wasn't more prominent (but that expectation was based on his two memorable Star Trek roles). Miyagawa (talk) 17:40, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
- Just realised I hadn't done this. Reviewing right now. Miyagawa (talk) 17:37, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- No duplicate or dab links. All external links check out.
- Lead: Does the Dr Who project include a brief line in the lead about what the show is as standard? I've noticed them on other series and I have something similar in my Star Trek episode articles. I think something along the lines of "The show follows the adventures of the Doctor, a time travelling alien. In this episode..." (of course tweak it as suited).
- I'm not against the idea, but I sort of feel like "alien time traveller the Doctor and his companion..." covers it. Glimmer721 talk 18:18, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- Yeah, that's fine actually. Miyagawa (talk) 18:23, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- I'm not against the idea, but I sort of feel like "alien time traveller the Doctor and his companion..." covers it. Glimmer721 talk 18:18, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- Plot: In my opinion the plot is a bit long. I think if it was reduced down to something the length of the first four paragraphs it would be better.
- Also, it would be better to include the actors names for those characters in brackets (as you have in the lead) for their first mention. For Skaldak, I'd suggest the same as I did for "Skin of Evil" in the lead for Armus.
- Production: Was there any information about the submarine set? Just curious if they built the set (it was impressive) or used a set previously used for something else (just because I know that Enterprise did that for the episode "North Star" where they used the old Western sets at Paramount instead of building new ones).
- Not from the sources I have (I'll add something if it shows up on the DVD); from the online mini-Confidential it just seemed like it was a set they had built in the studio. Glimmer721 talk 18:18, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- Well it was a very impressive set. Miyagawa (talk) 18:23, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- Nitpick - I'd put a paragraph break in the third paragraph before "Unlike some other returning monsters, the Ice Warriors were not heavily redesigned." - that'll make the two new paragraphs roughly the same size as the first two.
- Done, that looks better. Glimmer721 talk 18:18, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- Broadcast and reception: Were the ratings higher or lower than other episodes during the previous week or shortly afterwards?
- I typically don't include this, but "The Rings of Akhaten" was watched by 7.45 and "Cold War" was watched by 7.37, which isn't that notable of a jump as, say, between this and the next week. Glimmer721 talk 18:18, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- I agree, that isn't enough of a change to worry about. Miyagawa (talk) 18:23, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
That's pretty much it, although I'll have a prose run through once those bits are cleared up. I remember enjoying the episode as I always thought a naval ship would be a good setting - although I was expecting Sea Devils! Miyagawa (talk) 17:53, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- I wonder what redesigned Sea Devils would look like...anyway, I'm going to work on the plot later. I don't think I've looked at it too closely, and it's certainly a simple episode. Glimmer721 talk 18:18, 12 July 2013 (UTC)
- I restructured the paragraphs and added the actor names, though I'm not sure if I cut a lot out. Let me know if you have more suggestions. Glimmer721 talk 21:59, 13 July 2013 (UTC)
- Great, that's better. I think this one now meets the GA criteria. Nice one. Miyagawa (talk) 22:08, 13 July 2013 (UTC)
- I restructured the paragraphs and added the actor names, though I'm not sure if I cut a lot out. Let me know if you have more suggestions. Glimmer721 talk 21:59, 13 July 2013 (UTC)