Talk:Cold Case Love/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Et3rnal (talk · contribs) 16:16, 16 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

1 dead link needs to be addressed.

The link is not dead, I don't know what is with the toolserver. You can check up on it. — Tomíca^(T2ME) 17:42, 16 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"who labeled the song as a highlight and stand-out song on Rated R and additionally praised Rihanna's vocals" → "who labeled the song as a highlight on Rated R, additionally praising Rihanna's vocals." – 'highlight' and 'stand-out' together is a little redundant, sentence should also have a break.

"Following the assault of Rihanna's boyfriend Chris Brown on her" → "Following Chris Brown's assault on Rihanna"

Done — Tomíca^(T2ME) 17:42, 16 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Composition and lyrical interpretation

"no matter what song Rihanna released as the lead single from the record, it would immediately be looked at as a song about Brown." → "it would immediately be looked at as referring to Brown". – To avoid repetition of song.

"should expect an edgier and angrier Rihanna on the album" – Probably should quote 'edgier' and 'angrier', as it's a bit WP:POV on their own.

"was written by Justin Timberlake, Robin Tadross and James Fauntleroy II and produced by the three of them by their production name The Y's." → "was written by Justin Timberlake, Robin Tadross and James Fauntleroy II and produced by the latter three under their production name The Y's."

"Timberlake told MTV News that the Rated R is a whole new sound" – Remove 'the'.

"Rihanna admitted that "Cold Case Love" was inspired by her hard relationship" – 'difficult' would be a better choice of wording, less colloquial.

"served as Tovar's assistant recording engineers, while, Antonio" – omit the second comma.

"to fully emote, to show the feeling behind the stance." – Probably should quote this, and it's again a bit POVish.

"Rihanna seems to discover the flip side" – should also quote this, same reason as the previous point.

"Jody Rosen of Rolling Stone wrote Rihanna sings 'slow-boiling' the line 'What you did to me was a crime'." – This doesn't make sense.

"A reviewer of Plugged In wrote that the lyrics that allude to are "And I let you reach me one more time/But that’s enough." → that allude to this are.

"Jon Pareless of The New York Times wrote that Rihanna compares the love – I don't understand what 'the love' is referring to. The sentence in general needs some clarification.

"and features the couplet" – replace and with 'which'.

Done — Tomíca^(T2ME) 17:42, 16 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
References

15. GQ and Plugged In should have their publisher in brackets.

22. Hearst Magazines UK should be linked.

23. IAC (company) should be About.com's publisher.

27. 'Rap-Up, LLC' are Rap-Up's publisher.

Done — Tomíca^(T2ME) 17:42, 16 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Article looks good overall, putting on hold. Et 3 rnal 17:06, 16 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Everything addressed. Passing. Et 3 rnal 20:26, 16 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you buddy! — Tomíca^(T2ME) 20:40, 16 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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