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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 02:54, 1 December 2015 (UTC)
Comments by Dunkleosteus77
[edit]- I haven't read it yet, but the one thing I noticed was that the In research section was just one sentence, so consider expanding that (if you can); expand in areas such as: why do people research on cockroaches opposed to other insects, and what discoveries have been made (that benefit humans)
- @Dunkleosteus77: Added a section on its convenience and use in education. The major discovery areas have already been listed and wikilinked. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:13, 7 December 2015 (UTC)
and, since the As pests and Control are basically talking about the same thing, consider merging them.
There is a mish-mash of American and British English; I'm seeing "generalised", "generalized" (in the same paragraph), "realised", "colors", "recognize", "characterised", "specialisation", and "behavior"
Done a few edits, although I cannot guarantee that I removed all British English spelling. Please double check. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:50, 2 December 2015 (UTC)
- It'll pass
- Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:38, 9 December 2015 (UTC)
General comments
[edit]In the section on biological control the ""House Centipede" namely Scutigera coleoptrata, is known to feed on cockroaches.
In the lead, change "...which however also includes the termites" to "...which also includes termites"
In the Taxonomy and evolution section, change "However recent genetic evidence..." to "However, recent genetic evidence..."
In the Taxonomy and evolution section, change "...when F. A. McKittrick noted similar..." to "...when F. A. McKittrick (1965) noted similar..."
In the Description section, include the weight of Blaberus giganteus
- Removed mention of its weght. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 14:51, 3 December 2015 (UTC)
In the Description section, change :They have relatively small heads and broad, flattened bodies, and..." to "They have a relatively small head and a broad, flattened body, and..."
In the Description section, change "The tegmina or first pair of wings are tough and protective..." to "The tegmina, or first pair of wings, are tough and protective..."
In the Description section, change "...have demonstrated they help..." to "...have demonstrated that they help..."
n the Description section, change "Males have a aedeagus..." to "Males have an aedeagus..."
In the Collective decision-making section, explain what happened in the roach-robot experiment
Expect more comments, I haven't finished reading yet.
- Thanks for taking this on. We look forward to your additional comments. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:41, 2 December 2015 (UTC)
2nd set of comments
[edit]In the Social behavior section, change "...the sum of individual choices but reflects..." to "...the sum of individual choices, but reflects..."
In the Social behavior section, put the last paragraph, second seconds, in quotes using template {{pull quote|1=insert quote and source}}, and also state who said it
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:22, 6 December 2015 (UTC)- I have stated "Lihoreau and his fellow researchers stated:", and if they didn't say it, then I don't know who did. I haven't got access to the research study. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:04, 7 December 2015 (UTC)
In the Sounds section, change "...in the presence of a potential mate some..." to "...in the presence of a potential mate, some..."
Instead of wikilinking American cockroach in the Digestive track section, wikilink it in the Social behavior
In the Digestive track section, change "...(Periplaneta americana) for example feeds..." to "...(Periplaneta americana), for example, feeds..."
In the Digestive track section, change " In many species these..." to " In many species, these..."
In the Digestive track section, change "...the wood-eating cockroach Panesthia cribrata is able..." to "...the wood-eating cockroach, Panesthia cribrata, is able..."
In the Digestive track section, change " It my be that..." to " It may be that..."
In the Reproduction section, change "...keeping the eggs inside their bodies..." to "...keeping the eggs inside their body..."
In the Hardiness section, change "P. japonica" to "Periplaneta japonica", since the genus wasn't stated
In the As pests section, change "sodium bicarbonate (baking soda)" to "sodium bicarbonate (baking soda)"
In the Conservation section, what does NSW stand for?
- Done, linked. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:11, 5 December 2015 (UTC)
In the In culture section, change " 'For tetanus cockroach tea is given...' " to " 'For tetanus, cockroach tea is given...' "
- No, it's as it is in the original, inside quotation marks. I've added a comment to this effect. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:12, 5 December 2015 (UTC)