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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 09:42, 8 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I will take this one, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 09:42, 8 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

This is looking in very good order, minimal nitpicks.

Lead

  • but the true death toll may be higher. : could be me, but "true" seems to imply that the authorities were lying. Perhaps "actual" may be a better term to use?
    • Done.

Background

  • The first sentence of the 3rd paragraph is quite long with several commas, suggest breaking it up.
    • Split and slightly revised.

Explosions

  • At about 9:30 a.m. on May 27, 1925 the...: comma after 1925 I think?
    • Done.

Response and effects

  • It arrived in Raleigh the following day.: where is Raleigh relative to the mine site, link if possible too?
    • Working on this. The car apparently made it all the way to Coal Glen (news article), and once I find a source discussing its arrival there there will be little need to mention its stop in Raleigh.
    • Resolved, the car came to Coal Glen on May 28.

Legacy

  • Doing the source checks, ref 27 says there were a couple of fatalities after the mine reopened and ref 28 says 14; is this worth mentioning?

Sources

  • The print sources appear to be reputable publishers, and the journal ref is associated with a university
  • Did a spotcheck on refs 1, 24, 27 and 28, and these look fine

Other stuff

  • Image tags OK
  • No dupe links

That's it for me. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:40, 22 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Indy Beetle, just checking in on the progress of this. It is my understanding you are still working on this? Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:48, 4 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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