Talk:Clive Everton/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 15:19, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Lede

continues as editor - to date or as of. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:08, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
He has authored over twenty books about cue sports - probably worth a "since". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:08, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
We have a link for BBC Television Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:15, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
National (UK) Pairs Championship - perhaps United Kingdom National Pairs Championship Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:15, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
turned professional in 1981, achieving little success in snooker - 47th in the world, and staying professional for 10 years is worth mentioning, as its quite a bit of success. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:15, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link tennis Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:15, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I've addressed all the points above. (I'd consider myself a success if I reached 47th in the world!) BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:07, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General

Clive Harold Everton was born in Worcester on 7 September 1937,[1] and was educated at King's School, Worcester, City of Birmingham College of Commerce, and later at Cardiff University, where he obtained a B.A. in English - huge run on sentence Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Career in billiards and snooker - what about "Cue sports career". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
He won the 1953 under-16) championship - missing something Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Is there any info on him taking up the sport? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link break Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Despite this he would reach a high ranking in the professional billiards game of ninth, and remained in the top 20 ranked players even into his sixties - the lede should mention this Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
When did he stop playing billiards professionally?Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
.[15] a couple - caps Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The same comments about his world ranking and longevity is suitable for the career too. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
According to Everton, he was sacked at the instigation of Jack Karnehm, the Chairman of the Billiards and Snooker Control Council (as the Billiards Association and Control Council had renamed itself) for "giving professionals publicity" by including picture of four professional players on the cover of Billiards and Snooker at a time when the Billiards and Snooker Control Council and the professional players were in dispute over the World Billiards Championship. - long sentence, consider revising Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:31, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:19, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for the review, Lee Vilenski. Hopefully I've addressed everything. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:42, 14 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]