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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 11:08, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I will use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

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  • It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
  • It contains copyright infringements -
  • It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
  • It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -
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 Done Changed to a Harrow Observer source BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:00, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Removed these as they aren't useful without the url. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:00, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Prose

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Lede

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  • Lede could do with an expansion
  • The lede should be reordered. This should be in terms of what is most important; rather than a chronological look. I'd mention he reached a height of 16th in the world rankings, won the 1978 World Amateur Championship then 1991 World Seniors Championship and then into him not playing between those years
  • He was a successful junior player, known for his fast attacking snooker, and attracted large crowds for matches with fellow Tredegar player Ray Reardon. - should probably mention that he is from Tredegar and mention this is exhabition matches.
  • I think it is important to mention he died as a professional player. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:05, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

General

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  • British Junior (Under-19) - under-19, unless it was the name of the comp
    • Morrison (1989) has "British Isles Junior Championships" with separate columns for Under-16 and Under-19. Everton (1979) has "British Boys Championship" and "British Junior Championship" whereas Everton (1985) has "British Junior (under 16) Championships and British Junior (under 19 Championships. Newspaper reports have various formulations including "British Youths' Snooker Championship" (for the Under-19s). I think under-19 is the best bet, as there is no consistency across sources. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:17, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • The following year, now a steelworker, Wilson beat Gary Owen 3–2 in the final to take the British Junior title - probably needs a reword to say in the same competiton the following year, he won, defeating Gary Owen 3-2 in the final.
  • In the final he faced Own again - sp
  • Commenting on Wilson's style, the Belfast Telegraph s - any ideas who?
  • Commenting on Wilson's style, the Belfast Telegraph said he "scorned safety play" in winning his semi-final against Donald Scott 2–0 in twelve minutes - I assume this means he decided not to play safety shots? Maybe a reword is needed.
  • In 1953, a Sports Argus match report described Wilson as having "lived up to his reputation as the finest potter in the country, one ball being hardly in the pocket before the next one was following it in." - this quote probably needs more around it, comment on his speed etc.
I've moved this to the last para of professional career as it seems to fit more there - that paragraph is meant to provide some views on his fast attacking style, not only as a professional, so I'm not sure if it needs to be a separate section. I added a different quote, from Everton. More may need to be done with these I suppose. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:34, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • He played Reardon in both the Welsh and English Amateur Championships, and in a succession of money matches. Snooker historian Clive Everton has described Wilson as an "even more remarkable talent" than Reardon, and in 1979 described their contests, when each would attract hundreds of supporting spectators as "modern snooker's nearest equivalent to a bare knuckle prize fight." Everton goes on to suggest that when Reardon moved away, "the edge went from Wilson's game." - direct quotes should be followed by a citation - I realise you have them, but you should put it directly after. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:20, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • The above probably needs added context that Reardon won the world title six times. Otherwise, it's just saying this person was better than someone else. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:20, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • He played Reardon in both the Welsh and English Amateur Championships-what year?
Removed this. Everton (2012) says they "clashed each year" in both, but I think there is some poetic licence there. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:34, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • e 1973–74 Home International series, losing 1–2 against D. Lenehan of Ireland and beating W. McKerron - no full names?
Not able to get full names from a reliable source. Can either keep as is or reword to something like "lost one match and won the other" BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:34, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Joe Grech 5–4 - you've linked all of this.
  • Wilson built a 4–0 lead in front of a 4,000 strong audience that started to deliberately distract him, - you'll need to be a bit careful here, who said this?
added "according to Everton" - Quote: "Wilson, 4-0 up against Grech, began to be systematically distracted with meticulously timed coughs, bangs, clatters and the lighting of cigarettes" and, about the final frame: "virtually the whole crowd on its feet baying to distract him." (Black Farce & Cue Ball Wizards, p.371) BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:18, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • e lost 5–8 in the southern area final of the English Amateur Championship to Jimmy White after leading 4–2, with the 16-year-old White becoming the Championship's youngest ever finalist - this isn't an article about White.
Edited - Is it OK now? BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:18, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Wilson turned professional in 1979 - is this because he won the Amateur championship?
I think these were still the days when anyone could apply and the WPBSA would decide on whether to accept them. He didn't apply immediately. Morrison (1988) says "Cliff regained his Welsh crown in 1979 and shortly afterwards decided to try his hand at the professional game." If I had to speculate, I'd guess that missing out on the B&H Masters money might have influenced him. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:17, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Amended, is it OK now? BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:34, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Comments

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  • Automated note - If you fancy returning the favour, I have outstanding GA and FA nominations that require reviewing at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these, however it's definitely not mandatory. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)
Never come across this player before, but someone who took their best years out, and played when a lot older professionally is very interesting! Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:55, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Lee Vilenski Many thanks for your review, all very constructive. I've made quite a few changes, let me know what else needs to be done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:29, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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