Talk:Clean living movement
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The Millennial era (1970–2009)
[edit]I noticed that in the final paragraph deviates from the rest of the section, both in style and tone. It seems run through with grammatical errors and due to it's lack of citations, to be more opinion than factual.
Following are the sentences I am taking issue with;
By the early twenty-first century eugenics in the form of bioengineering and reproductive technology led to some parents to attempt to attain a "perfect" or designer baby.
In contrast to the earlier movements, “reformers” of the era were often well-financed large grass-roots, not-for-profit, and even governmental organizations founded, or led, by activists.
Some reformers began to blame “the system” rather than encouraging individuals to take personal responsibility for their behaviors. This attitude led to crusades that included litigation against tobacco manufacturers, alcoholic-beverage distributors, and pharmaceutical and other corporations.
Behaviors once thought to be “sins” or “bad habits” had now become “diseases.” As of 2006 interest in some of these reform campaigns has abated to some extent.
I feel this needs to be rewritten to improve overall readability and backed with sources to soften it's opinionated feel, or removed. I am not interested in reworking this, but wanted to offer someone else the chance before deleting it.
I like to help 04:16, 9 February 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Dtm815 (talk • contribs)