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Reviewer: Vanamonde93 (talk · contribs) 18:10, 23 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]


I'll review this. Vanamonde (Talk) 18:10, 23 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Vanamonde93: I've responded to your comments. -Indy beetle (talk) 20:57, 26 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Indy beetle: Thanks for your patience; I've finished, just a couple more for you. Vanamonde (Talk) 21:12, 29 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it well written?
    A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
    All issues addressed.
    B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
  2. Is it verifiable with no original research?
    A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
    B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
    One concern with dead source addressed
    C. It contains no original research:
    Spotchecks clear
    D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
    Spotchecks clear, Earwig's tool clear, though it flags titles he held
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
    B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
  4. Is it neutral?
    It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
    No issues
  5. Is it stable?
    It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
  6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    Licensing checks out to the best of my abilities
    B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
    All feedback taken care of, passing. Vanamonde (Talk) 00:34, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

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  • Can you find links for "black" and "white" at first use in the body that would be appropriate for the US context?
  • Link "football" and "quarterback"
    • Done.
  • Do we know where he served in WWII?
    • Sources do not specify.
  • "He later served as president" "He" is ambiguous
    • Changed to Lightner.
  • Find a link for "desegregate"
  • "During his tenure" tenure on what?
    • Err to which instance are you referring? I have now clarified all anyhow.
  • "Mayor pro tempore" shouldn't "pro tempore" be italicized?
  • Link "South" (in the American context)
  • Link "mass transit system"
    • Done.
  • The first paragraph of "later activities" is verging on proseline. I'm not going to hold up the GA review over this, but I would suggest varying the sentence structure a little there.
    • Minor revision made.
  • Acronyms, while useful, can be confusing, and I recommend avoiding them where possibly. NCCU and CIAA are both used just once; you could substitute the full form without any length issues.
    • Done.
  • Can you find an archive url for the dead link?