Talk:Clarence Lightner/GA1
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Reviewer: Vanamonde93 (talk · contribs) 18:10, 23 September 2019 (UTC)
I'll review this. Vanamonde (Talk) 18:10, 23 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Vanamonde93: I've responded to your comments. -Indy beetle (talk) 20:57, 26 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Indy beetle: Thanks for your patience; I've finished, just a couple more for you. Vanamonde (Talk) 21:12, 29 September 2019 (UTC)
Checklist
[edit]GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- All issues addressed.
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
- One concern with dead source addressed
- C. It contains no original research:
- Spotchecks clear
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- Spotchecks clear, Earwig's tool clear, though it flags titles he held
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- No issues
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Licensing checks out to the best of my abilities
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- All feedback taken care of, passing. Vanamonde (Talk) 00:34, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail:
Comments
[edit]- Can you find links for "black" and "white" at first use in the body that would be appropriate for the US context?
- I've simply inked to black people and white people if that suffices.
- That's fine; African Americans and White Americans would be another option.
- I've simply inked to black people and white people if that suffices.
- Link "football" and "quarterback"
- Done.
- Do we know where he served in WWII?
- Sources do not specify.
- "He later served as president" "He" is ambiguous
- Changed to Lightner.
- Find a link for "desegregate"
- Linked to School integration in the United States.
- "During his tenure" tenure on what?
- Err to which instance are you referring? I have now clarified all anyhow.
- "Mayor pro tempore" shouldn't "pro tempore" be italicized?
- It is a Latin phrase, but its also an official title, like President pro tempore of the United States Senate, so italicization seems unnecessary.
- Link "South" (in the American context)
- "Southern" is already linked to Southern United States.
- Missed that.
- "Southern" is already linked to Southern United States.
- Link "mass transit system"
- Done.
- The first paragraph of "later activities" is verging on proseline. I'm not going to hold up the GA review over this, but I would suggest varying the sentence structure a little there.
- Minor revision made.
- Acronyms, while useful, can be confusing, and I recommend avoiding them where possibly. NCCU and CIAA are both used just once; you could substitute the full form without any length issues.
- Done.
- Can you find an archive url for the dead link?
- @Vanamonde93: No, it seems permanently lost. -Indy beetle (talk) 23:55, 29 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Indy beetle: strange. Given that it's a quote from a living person, I'm not too happy signing off on a permanently unverifiable link. Can you look for an alternative? Vanamonde (Talk) 00:01, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Vanamonde93: I've found another source to corroborate the existence of the foundation, and have thus added that, but nothing for the quote, so I've removed it. -Indy beetle (talk) 00:24, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
- Looks good, passing. Vanamonde (Talk) 00:34, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Vanamonde93: I've found another source to corroborate the existence of the foundation, and have thus added that, but nothing for the quote, so I've removed it. -Indy beetle (talk) 00:24, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Indy beetle: strange. Given that it's a quote from a living person, I'm not too happy signing off on a permanently unverifiable link. Can you look for an alternative? Vanamonde (Talk) 00:01, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Vanamonde93: No, it seems permanently lost. -Indy beetle (talk) 23:55, 29 September 2019 (UTC)