Talk:Chuck Fleetwood-Smith/GA1

GA Review

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Overall, the article's not too bad. Seems like a person deserving of a GA. However, the article needs more work then I thought after a first scan-through. Here's what's needed:

The language of the first paragraph feels like it imposes opinions on the reader, and seems like a POV issue. (example: the word "gifted" on top of the contemporary note isn't necessary)
cricinfo requires a subscription, so make a note of that in the refs somewhere.
It feels like there are some sentences lacking citations that need them, yet many blend in to later ones that do, so upon re-review I'll look through those more closely.
"In addition to the affectation of his hyphenated surname, Fleetwood-Smith usually listed his year of birth as 1910 (thus reducing his age by two years) and propagated a story among journalists that he became a left-arm bowler when he broke his right arm during his youth." Citation needed
The last paragraph is uncited. With it being about his arrest and the aftermath, that's information that definitely needs to be.

Basically, my main issue with the article is similar to what's in the lead. A lot of modifiers like "outstanding" and "meteoric" are being thrown around. If they're stemming from a citation where a newspaper described their performance as such, that's one thing, but if they're just being used to enhance the article, that's troubling to me. I'll put it on hold and give you a week, though no guarantees on what I'll do upon completion (most likely a re-review, whether by me or someone else). Wizardman 04:36, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

After thinking it over, I'm going to fail the article. The rewriting of the prose will likely take some time to make it good, so I find it best if it's just re-nommed after this stuff is fixed. Wizardman 16:52, 24 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]