Talk:Christopher Walking/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 21:25, 19 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this tomorrow; it is night time here in the UK. --K. Peake 21:25, 19 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Remove rap from the infobox, as that is not a specific genre like drill, hip hop, trap, etc. – but you can keep it in prose
You forgot to mention in the opening sentence that it is from his second mixtape, Meet the Woo 2 (2020).
"808Melo and WondaGurl handled" → "The first two of the four, known as CashMoneyAP and WondaGurl, handled" since 808Melo is not listed as a producer in the personnel or by the source
Remove rap genre per my comment about the source in the body
A full stop is needed at the end of the first para's last sentence
"It samples the lyrics of" → "The song interpolates the lyrics of" with the target
Remove the release year of the song, as that is not notable for the lead per previous discussion
"was released the same day and" → "was released the same day as the single release, which"
"meeting fans as and historical African American figures." → "meeting fans, and footage of historical Black American figures."

Background and release

Merge with the below section and retitle to Background and composition
"before its release." → "before its January 16, 2020 release." because the date is not mentioned until a good number of sentences later
"Scary L' → "Scary L"
"808Melo and WondaGurl handled" → "The first two of the four, who have the stage names of CashMoneyAP and WondaGurl, handled" for accuracy
Target programmer to Programming (music)
"recording while Jess Jackson mixed the song." → "recording,, while Jess Jackson mixed it."
The source does reference the release, but offers no mention of it being for digital download and streaming so remove those parts
"on Pop Smoke's second studio mixtape Meet the Woo 2." → "from Meet the Woo 2."

Music and lyrics

This should be the second para of the proposed merger
""Christopher Walking" is a" → "Musically, "Christopher Walking" is a"
Remove rap genre because only one source calls the song "drill rap", which is another way of referring to drill as a rap subgenre
Swap the second and third sentences of this para because the third should come before the 50 Cent lyrics, as it is about the meaning of the song
"The song prominently samples the lyrics of" → "It prominently interpolates the lyrics of" with the target, per both sources calling this an interpolation
Target single to Single (music)
"from the 1990" → "in the 1990"
"throughout the streets and mentions" → "throughout the streets, and mentions"
"with someone: "Tie that boy up like a cowboy."" → "with someone, declaring he wants to "tie that boy up like a cowboy"." per MOS:QUOTE

Critical reception

Target music critics to Music journalism
A lot of MOS:QUOTE issues within this section
Wikilink Brooklyn drill
"Tom Breihan that "Christopher Walking" had" → "Tom Breihan opined that "Christopher Walking" has"
"mentioning that it had" → "mentioning that it possesses"
"as his voice." And that it sounds" → "as his voice", which sounds"
"He concludes by saying" → "Breihan concluded by saying"

Music video

"as he passes by them" → "while passing by them" but HB offers a mention of him showing off his attire that has not been included
"shows archive footage" → "shows intertwined archive footage"
Target Black Panther to Black Panther party
Fix MOS:QUOTE issues with the three reception sentences

Credits and personnel

Good

References

Copyvio score looks moderately good at 32.0%
Make sure all of these are archive by using the tool
Remove the author from ref 10
Cite Complex instead for ref 15 and target to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; crazy to think this was up for AFD just a week ago and you were considering quitting Wiki! --K. Peake 09:00, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review Kyle Peake. I have addressed all of your concerns. It's 3 am from where I am in the US and I'm hella tired. And to be honest, I am quitting Wikipedia as soon I as start college in August 2021. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 09:38, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The Ultimate Boss Nice job, you only missed one change besides running the tool that was very minor anyway so I added it in for you. There were also a few errors made that weren't missed changes, so I fixed those for you accordingly. ✓ Pass now and it will be a shame to see you retire from Wikipedia soon, but we still have FB to keep in contact! --K. Peake 11:14, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]