Talk:Christmas Wishes (The Office)/GA1
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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 14:24, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
Will review this soon. Ruby 2010/2013 14:24, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Comments
[edit]- No need to link Ed Helms twice in lead; use "Andy (Helms)..."
- "...to make everyone's Christmas wishes come true, including a drunken Erin" The drunken Erin part doesn't quite work in this sentence (maybe change to "including those of a drunken Erin")?
- Why the mention of "Garden Party" in the lead?
- Lead: ranked... ranked (switch it up); I also don't like the mention of Thursday (sounds too vague), change to "highest ranked NBC series of the night"?
- Who drives away with a smile on his face? Andy or Robert?
- Production: Italicize The Office
- Ratings: Not a fan of the way you list NBC's timeslot competition ('...drama Person of Interest..."). Too many commas I think. Try "beating CBS drama Person of Interest which received a 2.8 rating/7% share in the 18-49 demographic, Fox drama series Bones which received a 2.4 rating/6% share, and ABC reality series America's Funniest Home Videos..." "Although all three shows received more total viewers than "Christmas Wishes"" could be moved to another sentence, or add a semicolon
- Ref 13 has wrong publisher
- Ref 17 needs date (December 9, 2011)
- AOL TV
- Unitalicize Twitter, TV Line, and TV by the Numbers. Do italicize TV Guide
- IMBd is not a reliable source. You can cite those two episodes themselves for Kaling's writing credits
- Any cultural references?
Overall a nice article. On hold for seven days while above comments get looked at. Please respond here when you have finished or have specific queries. Ruby 2010/2013 17:11, 6 January 2012 (UTC)
- Alright, I think I've fixed everything. Only thing I couldn't quite nail down was the cultural references. gGranted, It has been awhile since I've seen the episode, but I can't remember off the top of my head/can't find go reliable sources.--Gen. Quon (talk) 20:34, 6 January 2012 (UTC)
- Looks good. Passing for GA. Nice work, Ruby 2010/2013 21:36, 6 January 2012 (UTC)
- Alright, I think I've fixed everything. Only thing I couldn't quite nail down was the cultural references. gGranted, It has been awhile since I've seen the episode, but I can't remember off the top of my head/can't find go reliable sources.--Gen. Quon (talk) 20:34, 6 January 2012 (UTC)