Talk:Christine Langan/GA1

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Reviewer: HJ Mitchell | April Fool! 18:41, 1 April 2010 (UTC) OK then. Just a few observations, which I'll list below:[reply]

I added "university" to "...graduating form Cambridge]"
"Langan lives in London with her partner, writer Christian Spurrier, and their two children.[1][2]" concerns me slightly int hat it's in the lead but I couldn't find it in the body. Obviously, it should be in the body (WP:LEAD) and the references should join it
An image would be nice, if one can be found, but it's by no means required and I appreciate the difficulty of finding them.
I'm not sure it's necessary to give hyperlink and a page number (I'm assuming the page number is for the hard copy of the paper?)
Ref 13 needs a page number.
A note about the prose- watch things like "In [year]...", "The following year" and be careful to avoid prosified listing of jobs and achievements. Although the prose here is pretty good, there are occurrences of those here and there.

Other than those, I'm happy this meets the criteria. It's a very interesting article and I think there;s the potential for an FA one day, though the prose and the lack of images would hold it back. If I had more time right now, I;d deal with the prose, but if you want it looking at again when the GAN backlog drive is over, I'll be more than happy to! As an aside, I note the Cold Feet connection with Fay Ripley and wondered if you'd considered going for a good topic? HJ Mitchell | April Fool! 18:41, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]