Talk:Chose Promise/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:34, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

Should complete this within a day or two ☯ Jaguar ☯ 15:34, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

I'm sorry of the delay, I'm having trouble with my PC at the moment which limits me from editing. I'll finish this by tomorrow ☯ Jaguar ☯ 20:02, 13 February 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

• The lead should preferably mention a little more on the synopsis, in order to summarise the article and comply per WP:LEAD. Other than that the lead is of good length
  • Added extra sentence about the end of the show. ajmint (talk•edits) 13:54, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "He tells a story of when he removed the batteries from his colleague's calculator, then takes out Rémi's notebook" - WP:OVERLINK, it wouldn't hurt to cut down on 'calculator' and 'notebook'
  • Done. ajmint (talk•edits) 13:54, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "Chose Promise was produced by 20h40 Productions and Troyes dans l'Aube Prod and directed by Rollin and Joyet" - are these two different things?
  • Yes, 20h40 Productions and Troyes dans l'Aube Prod are different companies. How can I make this clear? ajmint (talk•edits) 13:54, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
    • It should be fine as it is! No worries. ☯ Jaguar ☯ 19:03, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "Tsamere has done three tours of the show" - since when? 2007?
  • Presumably; I couldn't find much information on his earlier tours, as it tends to be removed/forgotten once the performances are over. In the context of the source, Tsamere is reflecting on why he is ending the show, so it is likely he is talking about its entire performance history. Do you think I should add "since 2007" even though the source doesn't directly say this? ajmint (talk•edits) 13:54, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
    • Maybe "since 2007" sounds like a good idea, I think it's up to you? ☯ Jaguar ☯ 19:03, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "(We've come full circle)" - should this be in quotations?
  • Done. ajmint (talk•edits) 13:54, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• No scores of any kind in the Reception section?
  • Most scores on review websites tend to be from users rather than editorial staff, if there are any at all. However, I found a rating from Télérama of "TT" (two Ts out of three) and I have tried to add this. ajmint (talk•edits) 13:54, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

References

• Ref 16 is dead
  • Added archive. ajmint (talk•edits) 13:54, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

On hold

Sorry for the delay, I'm having troubles with my monitor and I can't see any text which is putting me off from editing/completing reviews! Overall a very well written article, a merit which I think is worthy of GA, hence the short review. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days. Shouldn't take too much work. Thanks ☯ Jaguar ☯ 16:03, 14 February 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing! ajmint (talk•edits) 13:54, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

Close - promoted

Thank you for addressing them, this is another well written article and upon assessing it again I think it now meets the GA criteria. The other issues I mentioned above were only minor, but thanks anyway for coming back to this! ☯ Jaguar ☯ 19:03, 18 February 2015 (UTC)