Talk:Choc-Ola

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This page reads like advertising. The homepage for this drink is nothing more than an image saying you can buy it at one cafe in Indiana. It must have been extremely local. I'm on the East Coast and I've never heard of it. The book listed as a reference for Pete Rose's chocolate drink mentions that he made one but not that it was through Choc-ola. MultK (talk) 13:42, 21 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

MultK / Following are my responses to your comments:.
Regarding the comment that "This page reads like advertising.": I don't know whether you are referring to the "homepage" of the drink, or the Wikipedia page for the drink. Please be more specific. If it is the "homepage"...it's SUPPOSED to be advertising. If it is the Wikipedia page, please cite the paragraphs you feel are "advertising". I wrote it as a HISTORY of the drink, past to present. Precisely how would you recommend I include the "present" without mentioning the current manufacturer and a little about them?

Regarding the comment that "It must have been extremely local.": The drink was NOT extremely local. Since it was later bottled out of New Jersey, it was available in many states along the East Coast. In any case, if you read through the message board entries, you can easily see that there are folks from MANY states that had Choc-Ola distribution.

Regarding the reference for Choc-Ola and Pete Rose partnership: I added a reference to the Indianapolis Star article that talks about Pete Rose and Choc-Ola partnering up on the "Pete" beverage. I also included an image of that same article. Hopefully you will find that a satisfactory reference. Dante51763 (talk) 04:06, 26 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

No need to get touchy. My comments aren't for you alone after all, they're for anybody who gives the page a look over and wants to touch it up. When I said "this page" of course I was talking about the Wikipedia entry. This is it's talk page. I see someone has gone through and cleaned up a bit and done some wikifying. As to the local comment; again, that was not a dig. I've never heard of it, not even in New Jersey. I'm just curious.

Yes, the article is very helpful. It provides the link between the drink and Pete Rose which the book did not.

One last note: the link to the uspto is dead. You can't link to individual search sessions, they time out.MultK (talk) 03:37, 18 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

MultK: Thanks for your input. I spent a lot of time researching this topic and a lot of time writing and rewriting this article. So I apologize if I came off as a little on edge. Also, thanks for pointing out the dead link to the USPTO link. I reformatted that link as follows: http://tarr.uspto.gov/servlet/tarr?regser=serial&entry=77768627>

I think that should take care of the timed out search session issue and it takes the user straight to the proper USPTO record. Dante51763 —Preceding undated comment added 00:22, 11 September 2010 (UTC).[reply]

No problem, I'm a bit too abrupt at times. It's a well-written article and it's very well researched.MultK (talk) 21:32, 25 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]