Talk:Chitty-Chitty-Bang-Bang/GA1

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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk · contribs) 13:16, 4 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hello Schro, why stop now just because we've exhausted all the Bond books, eh? ;-) Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 13:16, 4 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there! My thoughts exactly - may as well polish off the only "junior Bond" book Fleming wrote! - SchroCat (^ • @) 17:19, 4 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Toolbox checks

Prose/content/structure

Happy with prose following my copyedit -- let me know if I unintentionally altered any meaning.
- No, as always, all your edits were good ones - SchroCat (^ • @) 09:23, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Characters: I'd have thought there should be more on the characters than a bare list. In the Bond novel articles this is a Characters and themes section; while I'd understand if there was nothing much to say on Chitty's theme, has no-one written anything about the characters? If not, then perhaps keep the list you have but briefly describe each one (a sentence or phrase each). Also any characters with WP articles should be linked, no?
- Sadly not much has been written about the characters, but I've included a description about each of them. Let me know if this is what you have in mind, or if you want a little more on each of them. (And only Caractacus has his own article - now wlinked) - SchroCat (^ • @) 09:23, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Background: At the end of the first paragraph you mention Fleming suffering a heart attack during the Thunderball case, then at the beginning of the next paragraph you mention him suffering a heart attack two weeks after the case. If he did indeed suffer two heart attacks, the second should be identified as "a second" attack (or the first could be differentiated from the second as "a mild" attack). Or was it fact one heart attack and there's confusion about when it occurred?
- Done - SchroCat (^ • @) 09:23, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Citations/references/spotcheck

Need a citation for the last clause of the last sentence in Reviews.
- Done - SchroCat (^ • @) 09:23, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Spotchecked the following:
- FNs 02, 03, 25, 27 -- no issues.
- FN13 -- source doesn't mention anything about the location he died, or that it was Casper's birthday.
  - Done - SchroCat (^ • @) 09:23, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- FN23 -- source doesn't actually mention Broccoli having produced 5 Bond films previously, though admittedly it's not really something that would be challenged.
  - FN24? Done - SchroCat (^ • @) 09:23, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Supporting materials

FUR for the book cover is fine.
While I can see the Zborowski car photo has been used a fair bit around WP, I'm not so sure about the licence: how can we be claiming PD status because it's 70 years after the photographer's death if we don't know who the photographer was?
- I'm not sure either! I picked up the image from the Chitty Bang Bang page to use. Do you want me to remove it? - SchroCat (^ • @) 09:23, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Well, I think the image needs a different licence but not certain what, so it'd expedite things to just lose it from here for now and look into the licensing question independently. I'm happy with everything else you've done in response to the review points. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 14:03, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    - OK - All done and hopefully the image can go back in once the licence has been finalised. - SchroCat (^ • @) 14:35, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      - I've asked for a second opinion, who agreed the licensing is a problem at present (if either its original publishing date or its author could be ascertained, there might be no issue). Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:50, 9 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Summary

Nice work as usual, let me know your thoughts/actions on the above. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 07:10, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Cheers for this. I think I've covered everything, but let me know about the image and if you're happy with the characters section now. Thanks so much for giving this the going over—and for your copy edits, which have tightened it up nicely. - SchroCat (^ • @) 09:23, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Tks for all that, happy to pass this -- well done. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:50, 9 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    - That's fantastic—many thanks Ian. Cheers - SchroCat (^ • @) 05:46, 9 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]