Talk:Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Otuọcha (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 19:07, 22 March 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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A lot of work, but it can be done. Be careful that in rewording you don't introduce new errors. (Disappointing, on a personal note, to find that she's a TERF, but that's well beyond the scope of this review.) Ping me when done or if you have questions. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:56, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

• • • possibly when done after here!

Copy changes

Lead

• Adichie is the author of eight books which includes; Purple Hibiscus (2003), Half of a Yellow Sun (2006), Americanah (2013), We Should All Be Feminists (2014), Dear Ijeawele, or A Feminist Manifesto in Fifteen Suggestions (2017), Notes on Grief (2021) and Mama's Sleeping Scarf (2023). change to "eight books, which include Purple". a semicolon is not used to set off lists, and a colon shouldn't be used here, either.

 Done

• MOS:LEAD: Add a little bit of the early life and education section, even one or two sentences, so it reflects more of the totality of the article. Think of the lead like the article in miniature.
•  Done: modified from my latest copy.
• New! is a Nigerian writer and novelist known for her debut novel Purple Hibiscus (2003). She was recognized as one of the BBC's 100 women in 2021. Since then The "Since then" has become split from its dependent part by the BBC piece, resulting in the oddness of 2021 ... since then ... 2006. Fix.
•  Removed: replaced with "and" for continual movement and not depicting the book.

Early life

• he is a native of Abba a locality in Njikoka, Anambra State Comma after "Abba"
•  Done: From the latest modification
• Her mother Grace Ifeoma (1942–2021), was the university's first female registrar. No comma needed.
•  Done: fixed already

Education

• at Drexel University in Philadelphia, Pennsylvania you can just say "Philadelphia"; it's a large enough US city.
•  Done: I was considering leaving it just "Drexel University" but it's broad now.
• "Hodder Fellow" with capital F
•  Done: capitalized
• Adichie has been awarded sixteen honorary doctorate degrees from universities including Yale University, the University of Pennsylvania, the University of Edinburgh, Duke University, Georgetown University, Johns Hopkins University, and the Catholic University of Louvain, where she received her sixteenth in a ceremony on 28 April 2022. Do we need to know the when on Louvain?
•  Fixed: added Belgium from the source since there exist many Catholic University of Louvain. Better now and more broad, factual with the when (date).

Writing career

• This section reads choppily with many short, one- or two-sentence paragraphs. Consider combining some.
•  Done: combined various sources and removed compatible blogs
• Adichie published Decisions, a collection of poems in 1997 and For Love of Biafra, a play in 1998 Add a comma after "1997" to complete the appositive.
•  Done
• Her short story "My Mother, the Crazy African" according to Adichie was a story dating from when she was a college senior living in Connecticut, discusses the problems that arise when a person is facing two cultures that are complete opposites from each other. Reword/grammar fix: Her short story "My Mother, the Crazy African", according to Adichie, was a story dating from when she was a college senior living in Connecticut; it discusses the problems that arise when a person is facing two cultures that are complete opposites from each other.
•  Done
  • No need to link Connecticut here.
  •  Fixed Done
• The Zoetrope/Topic sentence should be incorporated into another paragraph to avoid one or two-sentence paragraphs.
•  Done: already moved
• Her first novel, Purple Hibiscus (2003) received Comma after (2003)
•  Done: fixed also for related ones
• Half of a Yellow Sun received the 2007 Orange Prize for Fiction and the Anisfield-Wolf Book Award. Half of a Yellow Sun was adapted into a film of the same title directed by Biyi Bandele, starring BAFTA award-winner and Academy Award nominee Chiwetel Ejiofor and BAFTA winner Thandiwe Newton, and was released in 2014. In November 2020, Half of a Yellow Sun was voted by the public to be the best book to have won the Women's Prize for Fiction in its 25-year history.
•  Done:latest version already incorporated
  • This needs a reword. Half of a Yellow Sun received the 2007 Orange Prize for Fiction and the Anisfield-Wolf Book Award. It was adapted into a film of the same title directed by Biyi Bandele, starring Chiwetel Ejiofor and Thandiwe Newton, which was released in 2014. In November 2020, Half of a Yellow Sun was voted by the public to be the best book to have won the Women's Prize for Fiction in its 25-year history. This reduces redundancy in listing the title.
•  Done: earlier to this version have been changed to this version. Fixed well!
• Try avoiding WP:PROSELINE where it reads like a prose-formatted timeline.

• New! In 2020, Adichie published Zikora, a stand-alone short story about sexism and single motherhood and her stories have appeared in Topic Magazine. This is not the place for the Topic item, as the two halves of the sentence do not relate to each other at all.
•  Done: completely removed. May consider fixing when appropriate.

Lectures

• The content about TED Talk popularity should ideally be cited to an article, not a list. If this is necessary, maybe saying 20 most-viewed as of 2024 might work.
•  Done: already changed. I was also thinking about that. Since, it's basically YouTube viewing, I guess saying 20 most-viewed as of 2024 has been used.
• [58] is dead.
  •  Fixed: archived new source
• No need for a colon after "entitled".
  •  Done: removed colon
• Wikilink the book as "a book"; no need to restate its title.
  •  Done
• Should "TedXEuston" be "TEDxEuston"?
  •  Done: changed to "TEDxEuston".
• she stated that she did not want another person to define her responsibility and she rather defined her responsibility for herself but did not mind using her platform to speak up for someone else try rewording? this is dense.
• There is no need for the "Flawless" sampling to be a subheader of its own; remove it and consolidate that information into one paragraph.
  •  Done: reworded and paraphrased.
• Not every lecture needs to be a level-3 header: the last two probably should be combined.
  •  Done: merged. Will edit wholly.

Views

• stating that a crime is a crime for a reason because a crime has victims, and that since consensual homosexual conduct between adults does not constitute a crime, the law is unjust. maybe stating that actual crimes have victims and consensual homosexual conduct between adults does not rise to that standard of crime, making the law unjust.

 Done: used and paraphrased!

• Adichie was also close friends with Kenyan openly gay writer Binyavanga Wainaina, and when he died on 1 May 2019, after suffering a stroke in Nairobi, Adichie said in her tribute that she was struggling to stop crying. drop comma after 2019 to improve reading
  • •  Done
• In 2020, Adichie weighed into "all the noise" sparked by J. K. Rowling's article titled "J.K. Rowling Writes about Her Reasons for Speaking out on Sex and Gender Issues", and called the essay "perfectly reasonable" Replace "and called" with "calling" (CinS)
  • •  Done
• In late 2022, she faced further criticism for her views, after in an interview with The Guardian, saying: Less verbose: In late 2022, she faced further criticism for her views after telling The Guardian,
  • You may want to disambiguate by saying "the British newspaper The Guardian" because the Nigerian publication of the same name is mentioned later.
    •  Done

Awards

• In 2016, she was conferred with an honorary degree, Doctor of Humane Letters honoris causa, by Johns Hopkins University. In 2017, she was conferred an honorary degree, Doctor of Humane letters, honoris causa, by Haverford College and The University of Edinburgh. In 2018, she received an honorary degree, Doctor of Humane Letters, from Amherst College. She received an honorary degree, doctor honoris causa, from the Université de Fribourg, Switzerland, in 2019. This is a laundry list. Consider just listing the key universities that have conferred degrees.
  • •  Done: adjusted and removed full stops which will make a sentence case. @User:Sammi Brie, I'm thinking of removing the "honorary degree" mention in the career part, since it was well cited here. What do you think?

Sourcing and spot checks

• Priority item: References 160–165 are bare URLs. That is unacceptable at GA. Use citation templates like the other 159 references.
  •  Working: readily working on that.
    • Looks like this is not an issue — there are also now 27 fewer refs.
• What makes Grade Saver a reliable source?
  •  Done: changed Grade Saver. Though, I do see it being cited in literature related articles.
• What makes Answers Africa a reliable source?
  • Answers Africa is clear in its editorial policy. It's just that I also want to see a more reliable source. So, I have changed it. Done
• Can "Linda Ikeji's Blog" be replaced with a reliable source that is not a blog? (We may also use the social posts directly as ABOUTSELF if they still exist)
•  Done: replaced already with Vanguard News, a more reliable source than a blog.
• What makes BellaNaija a reliable source?
•  Done: Bella Naija sometimes gets news about pop and culture, but rechecking that article seems promotional, so, I have replaced that here

Spot checks

• 1: Includes Ivara's name in an image caption as her husband; mentions division of time between Nigeria and the US. Y
• 3: Unsure of reliability. For a date of birth, I want to see a better source than Grade Saver. Y
  •  Done: changed to an article from The Nation. It's about a birthday, and it's mostly reliable for citing dates of birth.
• 12: Mark as a dead link: the URL now goes to an unrelated page. Unsure of reliability. The phrasing "receiving several academic prizes" is identical, but honestly, with no detail in the source, there's really no other way to phrase this. I would like to see you try and find a better source for this info. Y
  •  Fixed: changed to another source.
• 16: Odd that it's a mirror at Harvard, but the content checks out. Y
• 20: Checks out. Change from "MacArthur Fellow" to "MacArthur Fellowship" since you say she received a fellowship, not saying she was named a fellow. Y
• 43: Book review. Consider adding more critical reception content when reviews are available to this article; it'll help so much. Y
• 59: Ms. article about the 2019 talk checks out. Y
• 76: GhostArchive backup of the Facebook post. An accurate quote of her own statement. Y
• 81: This plus 80 check out for the quote. Y
• 90: 2002 shortlisting from the prize's website. Y
• 100: Biography as part of the Africa 39. Y
• 112: Unsure of reliability. Content checks out. Y
  •  Done: replaced source to Vanguard News
• 121: Shortlisting of Americanah for International Dublin award in 2015. Y
• 125: PEN Pinter Prize win. Y

Copyvio/CLOP

• Mostly banal phrases and work titles: "study communications and political science", "the university’s first female registrar", and attributed quotes (some from her own social media).
  •  Working: you know since this is usually a literature, some of it's quotations needs to appear from the original work.
    • That part makes sense. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:44, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

  @Sammi Brie. Thanks for the reviewing. You are an awesome Wikipedian; for the wellness of editing and reviewing. I will say you do check out the page now for finalizing. I probably hope it met GA and I have done the critical review and suggestions. At this extent, may inquire any other problem. All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 14:13, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

Media

This article has four pieces of media: two images and two sound clips.

• One voice clip was released under the BBC voice project. A VRT ticket is on file.
• The other is a longer clip from Bookbits which appears to be properly licensed.
• The headshot is a still from a 2015 CC-licensed YouTube video.
• The Ms. magazine cover has a VRT ticket.

Encouragement: Add alt text to images for accessibility.

• • •  Done

• @Otuọcha: Now the lead is too long and needs to be slimmed down just a little bit. Four paragraphs is about right, but it's too long in each paragraph. You are making much larger changes than I would anticipate at GA, so I have even more issues. Please stop making major changes to article content at this point. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:27, 24 March 2024 (UTC)
  • Was thinking of something related to FA. Corrected!
  • "Transgenderism" is not WP:NPOV, and "advocating the rights and non segregation of transgenderism." does not make sense. I understand English is not your first language, so I assume this has been added in good faith, but as an "ism", it's almost always used pejoratively.
  •  Removed: forgot "transgenderism" is derogatory. Thinking a lot! English is my first language perhaps of a typical Nigerian and one who had studied in a nation that speaks English–America. Sometimes, confusion do come. Thanks better!
  • What does "pinned opinions" mean?
  •  Removed: not necessary, an over addition
  • The "Breakthrough and writing" subsection has too many subheaders. All of them should be removed.
  •  Removed
  • The image added in the Personal life section should be switched to right-alignment, as it currently bumps a level-2 header to the right.
•  Done: it's more difficult for a mobile user; though I do log in on "desktops" at times.
  • Footnote 3 should go back in the body of the article, especially as it contains the reference for this content.
  • @Sammi Brie: I didn't get you here

• • • I feel like I've dragged this thing to GA, simply because further edits introduced more copy errors. Thank you for bearing with me. It's finally ready. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 20:07, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.