Talk:Chillout 06/The Ultimate Chillout/GA1
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 14:09, 20 January 2019 (UTC)
- Grabbing for a review if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 14:09, 20 January 2019 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- For this part (artists such as Delerium and Sarah McLachlan), I would add a comma after “artists”.
- For this part (from other groups such as Bent, Ivy, and the Perishers.), I would add a comma after “groups”.
- For this part (claiming that the collection's song rarely fit within the definition of chill-out music), I would add the wikilink to the music genre as you have done in the infobox.
- Background and composition
- For this part (provided the final mastering of each of the collection's fourteen songs), “fourteen” should be represented in numerals rather than words according to Wikipedia policy.
- According to MOS:NUMERAL,
Integers greater than nine expressible in one or two words may be expressed either in numerals or in words
. So "fourteen" and "14" are equally valid in general and "fourteen" is fine here, but see MOS:NUMNOTES for exceptions that might apply in other places. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:49, 27 January 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you for the clarification. Aoba47 (talk) 20:57, 27 January 2019 (UTC)
- According to MOS:NUMERAL,
- For these two parts (English musician Jon Anderson) and (English band Lush), I do not think the descriptive phrases are necessary, particularly since you do not use such phrases with the other artists mentioned in this section.
- I would combine these two sentences (Bent's "Silent Life" is the compilation's sixth track. It combines "warm harmonies, woozy lap steel, and twinkling electronics for a Beatles-on-downers kind of bliss.”) into something like the following (Bent’s “Silent Life, the compilation’s sixth track, combines "warm harmonies, woozy lap steel, and twinkling electronics for a Beatles-on-downers kind of bliss.”) to make it somewhat more concise.
- Critical reception
- I do not think that you need to cite Reference 7 twice as the entire second half of the paragraph is from that source. I would recommend removing the first instance.
- In fact, reference 7 does need to be there twice: you are supposed to cite direct quotes by the end of the sentence in which the quote takes place, and the end-of-paragraph cite needs to be there for the remainder of the paragraph and the quote in that sentence. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:49, 27 January 2019 (UTC)
- @BlueMoonset: Thank you for the clarification. It still seems rather unnecessary to me, but I am not going to argue either. However, it does seem a little odd that you somewhat randomly interrupted/contributed to this review. Aoba47 (talk) 20:57, 27 January 2019 (UTC)
- Not at all sure why you would think it odd: you'd announced that you had stopped reviewing, so I wanted to be sure this was covered, though I thought it highly likely it still was. And, having read the review, I thought I should chime in to save Carbrera unnecessary effort. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:18, 27 January 2019 (UTC)
- I have personally never seen an uninvolved editor jump into a GAN without help being request so that is why I thought it was odd. Aoba47 (talk) 21:35, 27 January 2019 (UTC)
- Track listing
- The references should be in numeric order.
- Final comments
- This is definitely an interesting choice for a GAN project. I can appreciate how you worked on it though, as I also enjoy working on more obscure subject matter. Overall, the article is in very good shape, and I have only made some minor suggestions regarding the prose. Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to pass this. Maybe one day, I should try my hand on compilation article album. Aoba47 (talk) 14:17, 20 January 2019 (UTC)
- @Carbrera: Just wanted to let you know that it has been seven days since the review was open. Aoba47 (talk) 20:58, 27 January 2019 (UTC)
- Aoba47 - Hey, I’ve been quite busy moving this week so would it be alright with you if I had another few days for both this review and the one for “Squeal”? Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 23:46, 28 January 2019 (UTC).
- Good luck with your move, and take as much time as you need. Aoba47 (talk) 23:56, 28 January 2019 (UTC)
- Aoba47 - Hey I just finished this one too. I had to double-check a few things to make sure I was addressing the different comments above. Thank you so much. By the way, I apologize for not replying to your Wiki e-mail yet; I plan to do so very soon. Carbrera (talk) 22:09, 7 February 2019 (UTC).
- Verdict
- ✓ Pass Aoba47 (talk) 22:24, 7 February 2019 (UTC)