Talk:Cherry Pop/GA2
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:01, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.
Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 03:01, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
Infobox
[edit]- In the image's alt, add a space after "be seen." and change the period into a semicolon
- Capitalize the 'a' in alt so it's in the same style as everything else (just for appearance sake)
- Remove the flatlist from genre as only one genre is listed
Lead
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[edit]- Change the digital download link from "digital distribution" to "music download"
- Change 'from the record.o 'from Unlocked.'
Paragraph 2
[edit]- 'Regisor' is not a word
- Remove the 'a' before choreography
- Remove 'inside a white room'; it's unnecessary
- Is it necessary that we include it topped the iTunes charts in Japan? I mean, Adele's "Hello" topped like 40some iTunes charts and none of it's mentioned in her article
Composition
[edit]- Change section title to 'Background and composition'
- Change 'Further working' to 'Further's work'; this sentence needs to be worded as there are too many clauses
- Change "Stan's interviews prior to the release of 'Cherry Pop'.[5] She also noticed influences..." to "Stan's interviews prior to the release of 'Cherry Pop'; she also noticed influences..." (This means you should also move Ref #5 to the end of the sentence)
- Say "An administrator of IasiFun..."
- Remove the link to 'kiss'
Reception
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[edit]- Rename this section 'Critical reception'
- Please provide a topic sentence, like: "Cherry Pop" received generally mixed reviews from music critics upon release.
- I don't understand what the first sentence (the one about The Singles Jukebox) you have is trying to convey
- Anthony Easton's review belongs more in composition than here
- Remove the date from Hitfire's review; just say "Hitfire praised the song's chorus as being..."
- 'Chours' is not a word
- Is 'trashy' a good thing?
- Yes, it is.
- Add 'like' before you list "her previously launched songs"
- Change 'launched' to 'released'
- Hitfire's review is overly long; could the last sentence be removed? And, are there more reviews available for this song? Perhaps you could look at album reviews for more...
Paragraph 2
[edit]- Rename this section 'Commercial performance'
- Again, is the iTunes information really necessary?
- Organisers → Organizers
- native Airplay 100 → Romanian Radio Airplay Chart
- Add the last sentence to the end of the one before it, using a semicolon
Live performances
[edit]- Change to "On 12 December 2014, Stan performed both "Cherry Pop" and "Vanilla Chocolat" on an episode of Vocea Romaniei"
- Italicize Vocea Romaniei
- How is Ref #2 citing that is was performed during her tours? Isn't it the album's notes?
Music video
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[edit]- Move this section before 'Live performances'
- Remove the photo of a tennis racket
- Upload a photo of the music video under fair use to the article
- I don't know if Stan's quote of the right side of the section is needed; could you reduce it and include it in the paragraph instead?
Paragraph 2
[edit]- gets enlightened → becomes enlightened
- gets a tennis racket → retrieves a tennis racket
- before putting it down and giving it to a fellow dancer on her left → before returning the racket to a nearby dancer
- Again, 'chours' is not a word
- Synchroned is not a word
- What do you mean by 'dressing wigs'?
- multicoloured → multicolored
- The last two sentences need to be reworded; there are far too many clauses in these sentences
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Move this section below 'Track listings'
Track listings
[edit]- You only need one source for the digital download
Release history
[edit]- The release dates are not in chronological order; please fix this
Charts
[edit]- Move this above 'Release history'
References
[edit]- [14] - Italicize Vocea Romaniei
- [17] - Provide a link to YouTube
- [21] - Provide a link to iTunes Store
A few more changes
[edit]- Please add sortables to the charts; view Baby Don't Lie#Charts to see what I mean and as an example
- Make the music video picture a bit larger
- Remove the 'Reception' header' and remove an equal sign from the beginning and end of 'Critical reception' and 'Commercial performance'
- Remove the 's' in "A 23-seconds sample..." under the audio sample
- @Cartoon network freak: After this I'll pass the article; thanks for your cooperation. Carbrera (talk) 00:29, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- @Carbrera All done! Thank you very much for your time! Cheers, Cartoon network freak (talk) 00:38, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- @Cartoon network freak: After this I'll pass the article; thanks for your cooperation. Carbrera (talk) 00:29, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
End of GA Review:
[edit]This article needs a bit of work before passing, so I'm gonna put it on hold. Thank you. Carbrera (talk) 16:40, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
- @Carbrera Everything done and responded to one of your comments. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 00:08, 26 March 2016 (UTC)