Talk:Chennai Metro/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kees08 (talk · contribs) 06:58, 15 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	General Always use the convert template, you missed it a couple of times. A few places there is a space missing between sentences. The infrastructure section is written like it has not happened yet. Either clarify that it has happened, or make sure it is in the future expansion section. From: The Government of India approved the plan for 9 kilometres (5.6 mi) extension in 2016. To: In 2016, the Government of India approved the plan for an extension of 9 kilometres (5.6 mi). From: The construction began in June 2009 and the first stretch covering the seven stations from Koyambedu to Alandur over a distance of 10 kilometres (6.2 mi), began operation on 29 June 2015. To: Construction of the first stretch began in June 2009, which spanned the seven stations from Koyambedu to Alandur over a distance of 10 kilometres (6.2 mi) and began operation on 29 June 2015. From: On 21 September 2016 the section between Chennai airport and Little Mount commenced operations To: On 21 September 2016, the section between Chennai airport and Little Mount commenced operations. From: As on 14th Oct 2016, Chennai Metro opened operations on the 1.28km stretch from Alandur to St Thomas Mount, thus making the entire elevated stretch of Green line and also the entire elevated stretch of Chennai Metro Phase I is now functional. To: As of 14 Oct 2016, Chennai Metro opened operations on the 1.28km stretch from Alandur to St Thomas Mount. The opening makes the entire elevated stretch of Green line and Chennai Metro Phase I functional. From: Chennai had an established Chennai Suburban Railway network, which dates back to 1931 operating on a metre-gauge line from Beach to Tambaram. To: Chennai had an established Chennai Suburban Railway network that spanned from Beach to Tambaram, which dates back to 1931 and operated on a metre-gauge line. From: In 2007-08, ₹50 crore (US$7.4 million) was sanctioned for preliminary works which included a Detailed Project Report to be prepared by the Delhi Metro Rail Corporation (DMRC). To:In 2007-08, ₹50 crore (US$7.4 million) was sanctioned for preliminary work, which included a detailed project report to be prepared by the Delhi Metro Rail Corporation. From: The project was approved by the state cabinet on 7 November 2007 and was be executed by a Special Purpose Vehicle, the Chennai Metro Rail Limited (CMRL). To: The project was approved by the state cabinet on 7 November 2007 and was to be executed by a special purpose vehicle, the Chennai Metro Rail Limited (CMRL). From: On 21 November 2009, a deal was signed with Japan Banking Corporation for loan. To: On 21 November 2009, a deal was signed with the Japan Banking Corporation for a loan. From:In March 2009, a five-member consortium led by Egis Rail SA, France was awarded US$ 30 million contract for general consultancy contract. To: In March 2009, a five-member consortium led by Egis Rail SA, France was awarded US $30 million contract for general consultancy contract. From: On May 20, CMRL started to evaluate the integration of Metro corridor with the planned grade separator at the junction of Arcot Road and Jawaharlal Nehru Road. To: On May 20, CMRL started to evaluate the integration of metro corridor with the planned grade separator at the junction of Arcot Road and Jawaharlal Nehru Road. From: In January 2011, Larsen and Toubro was awarded the contract for elevated viaducts for ₹314.43 crore (US$47 million).[21] In March 2011, Chennai Metro reached an agreement with Government of Japan for a loan of ₹2,932.6 crore (US$440 million) for the second phase. To: In January 2011, Larsen and Toubro was awarded the contract for elevated viaducts for ₹314.43 crore (US$47 million).[21] In March 2011, Chennai Metro reached an agreement with the Government of Japan for a loan of ₹2,932.6 crore (US$440 million) for the second phase. From: In June, tenders for the elevated stations of the first phase was awarded to Consolidated Construction Consortium Limited. To: In June, tenders for the elevated stations of the first phase were awarded to Consolidated Construction Consortium Limited. From: It was announced that the first phase will be extended by 8.9 kilometres (5.5 mi) and Larsen and Toubro was awarded a contract to construct a depot at Koyambedu. To: It was announced that the first phase would be extended by 8.9 kilometres (5.5 mi) and Larsen and Toubro was awarded a contract to construct a depot at Koyambedu. From: Contracts for Automatic Fare Collection (AFC), tunnel ventilation and air conditioning were awarded to Nippon Signal, Emirates Trading Agency and Voltas for ₹109.88 crore (US$16 million), ₹241.83 crore (US$36 million) and ₹196.2 crore (US$29 million). To: Contracts for automatic fare collection (AFC), tunnel ventilation and air conditioning were awarded to Nippon Signal, Emirates Trading Agency and Voltas for ₹109.88 crore (US$16 million), ₹241.83 crore (US$36 million) and ₹196.2 crore (US$29 million). From: In January 2015, a report was ssubmitted to the Commissioner of Metro Rail Safety for approval. To: In January 2015, a report was submitted to the Commissioner of Metro Rail Safety for approval. Rewrite this sentence for clarity: The Blue Line intends to cover the Anna Salai stretch and Green Line covers the Poonamallee High Road and Inner Ring Road with the Blue Line being extended from Washermanpet to Tiruvottiyur. Update and rewrite this section for clarity: Surveys are set to begin, by September-2015, for a Detailed Project Report (DPR) on, the proposed, three new lines - and they are expected to complete in six to eight months.[59] The initial plan was later modified to cover 88 kilometres (55 mi).[60] In November-2015, the CMRL was looking into possibility of extending the 3 lines by additional 35 kilometres (22 mi) Question: The first car in each train will be first class with tickets costing twice as much as the second class tickets. (Will be, or does cost that much?) From: It also houses the Operational Control Centre (OCC) where the movement of trains and real-time CCTV footages obtained from the stations and on-board cameras is monitored. To: It also houses the operational control centre (OCC) where the movement of trains and real-time CCTV footages obtained from the stations and on-board cameras is monitored. From: The elevated stations will have three levels, namely, street, concourse and platform with the concourse level at an average height of 5.65 metres (18.5 ft) and platforms for boarding at 12.6 metres (41 ft) above the street level. To: The elevated stations will have three levels: street, concourse, and platform. The concourse level will have an average height of 5.65 metres (18.5 ft) and platforms for boarding at 12.6 metres (41 ft) above the street level. From: The metro stations are disabled and elderly friendly equipped with automatic fare collection system, announcement system, electronic display boards, escalators and lifts. To: The metro stations are equipped to be disabled and elderly friendly, with automatic fare collection system, announcement system, electronic display boards, escalators and lifts.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Remove items in See also section that are already linked inline w/ article.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	The citations in the lead should be moved inline with the article, if they are not there. They don't need to be in the lead. No need for citations in the infobox, just make sure they are cited inline with the article. There is a bare url citation; please expand. Fix tagged deadlinks
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Uncited Background section needs more citations. Almost a year later, on 21 September 2016, commercial operations commenced between Chennai International Airport metro station and Little Mount. Cite Line 5 in the table in Future Expansion
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Expand accidents and incidents section, and make it prose style. Maybe doesn't need much expansion, but at least should be written in prose style.
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	For File:Chennai_Metro_Logo.jpg, is it necessary to have both the first and the third copyright notice? They are basically identical. Also, are they correct? It seems to me this image would not fall under those copyright notices. In the Chennai Metro Phase I template, should Chamiers Road be Nandanam? In general are both of those images up to date? They don't seem to match. For File:Chennai_Rail.png, the source link is broken, so I cannot check the licensing.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

I keep meaning to start on this, so I am going to get the review kicked off and will provide comments over the next couple of days. Kees08 (talk) 06:58, 15 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

General: Number of stations in the infobox says 13 operations and 42 phase I. The intro says Phase I is operational; does that mean it should be 55 operational? Same goes for other Phase I things in infobox.

Officially on hold. There are quite a few changes. Upon completion of those changes, I'll run through it again to make sure we caught everything. Let me know if any of the above is unreasonable. Thanks! Kees08 (talk) 20:11, 26 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Kees08, Thanks for taking up the review. Will make the changes in a phased manner. Magentic Manifestations (talk) 06:01, 1 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Magentic Manifestations: The review is complete. Let me know if you have any qualms with the above. Thanks! Kees08 (talk) 04:26, 27 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Magentic Manifestations: I am going to fail this for now, but I encourage you to address the above, resubmit, and ping me. I will pick it up right away so you do not have to wait months again. I would highly recommend having the guild of copy editors go through this article. Let me know if you have any questions or concerns, thanks! It is a very good article overall, we just have to shore up the few things noted above. Kees08 (talk) 17:17, 8 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]