Talk:Cheek to Cheek Tour/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 09:12, 18 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

You should note that the tour began in 2014
The lead is rather short. Try to cover up information from the article's other sections (e.g. background, critical response)

Infobox

ALT text for the cover

Background

the tour ended on November 24, 2014 → we don't need an exact date; just name the month
through multiple avenues like television → through multiple endeavours such as television
so Gaga had been looking at such → so Gaga had been looking for such

Development

and its scheduled a post-Grammy → too many words; just simplify to "and its post-Grammy"
including Hollywood Bowl → including at Hollywood Bowl
on May 30; the Royal Albert Hall in London on June 8; and Radio City Music Hall in New York City → we need normal commas here, not semi-colons
Gaga continued with the dresses from the PBS special → Gaga wore the same dresses from the aforementioned PBS special
explained that he and his team did the wardrobe for the dancers and Gaga. They first took references → also did the wardrobe for the dancers and Gaga along with his team, and elaborated how they first took references
and afterwards zeroed in on eight costumes → and afterwards selected eight costumes
along with its accessories → shouldn't it be "their" accessoires?
custom made shoes → custom-made shoes
and move freely in the long gowns → what should "freely" mean here?
and Gaga with the Brian Newman Quintet → and Gaga by the Brian Newman Quintet

Critical response

I decided to edit this section by myself

Commercial reception

was high demand for the tickets → no need for "the"
secondary market average price for New Year's Eve performance → secondary market average price for the New Year's Eve performance
was the most expensive show at Las Vegas → was the most expensive show in Las Vegas
was average $297.64 over a few hundred → was average $297.64 for over a few hundred
on sale for their concert of June 8 → on sale for their concert on June 8
Tickets for June 26–27 shows → Tickets for the June 26–27 shows
also sold out before them being available for general → also sold out before they were available for the general
He also wrote about the show at Borgata Events → Who is "he" and why is this sentence important?
as the 69th highest grosser → as the 69th-highest grosser

Set list

Why is the note important since that exact same song was also included on the listed set list?

Shows

The "Date" row needs to be "!scope="row" -ed
The "TOTAL" in "Box office score data" should not be shouted

Notes

All notes need a full stop before the reference(s).

Other things

48.2% is a little a bit high for copyviolation
As far as I checked them, the references source the assertions made in this article

Outcome

On hold for 7 days — some things to be fixed before this can be passed for GA status. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:28, 19 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@IndianBio: Note it's been for over a month on hold now. You'll have to start working on it or otherwise I will sadly have to fail this. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:00, 27 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Failing due to inactivity. Cartoon network freak (talk) 04:59, 31 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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