Talk:Charles J. Turck/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 16:01, 28 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Hello, I'm going to take this article as part of the July backlog drive. I should be done in a couple of days at most. Kimikel (talk · contribs) 23:16, 10 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@PCN02WPS: Did the source spot check, will do the rest later. Some small issues but overall nothing disqualifying. Kimikel (talk) 21:10, 11 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

[24]: actually belongs to a book: [1]. Citation should be adjusted accordingly
- Thanks for pointing this out - fixed citation format. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:11, 12 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
[38]: does not support text. It can only claim his was the longest as of 1997, not as of 2024.
- Added a citation with a list of past presidents to the current day. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:11, 12 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
[34]: verified
[39]: does not say anything about their marriage being in 1914
- Added citation to verify exact date. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:11, 12 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
[16]: verified

Awesome, will get to the rest today or tomorrow Kimikel (talk) 18:30, 12 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@PCN02WPS: This is my full review. Honestly, I didn't catch much that needed to be corrected. Please let me know when you've had a chance to implement my suggestions. Thank you! Kimikel (talk) 01:22, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Kimikel Thanks for taking a look - everything has been changed or responded to! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:30, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@PCN02WPS thank you for the quick response - I'm awaiting clarification on whether or not I have the authority to close this review. Once that gets cleared up this should be able to be approved for GA. Kimikel (talk) 03:27, 14 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@PCN02WPS I just got the go-ahead to close this one out. Looked through the article once again and everything seemed good. Thank you for your quick response and quality work. I'm going to pass this one now. Kimikel (talk) 14:27, 14 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Nothing on a copyvio check.

"gained it" > gained the school
"There, he worked to distance..." > this sentence uses a "triple and", i would break it up however you see fit
"broadly favored" > which was broadly favored
"G.I. Bill as" > G.I. Bill, as
"resigned the presidency" > resigned from the presidency
- All done except the last point. I think "resigned the presidency" is standard wording ("Therefore, I shall resign the Presidency effective at noon tomorrow.") so I'd prefer to keep that. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:25, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Is there anywhere you can link to endnote 6?
"it was not a drastic one" > I feel like this qualifier is kind of unnecessary; a reader can decide if a 20/30% decrease is drastic or not.
"getting back on track with" > realigning with
"effect—complete with 180 signatures—with" > replace tacks with commas
"But this shift" > However, this shift
"consequences:" > consequences, as
"By the end of his term in 1958, the school's enrollment had doubled, ultimately reaching 1,400 students" > it was 1,400 as of the time of his death, not by the end of his term. this sentence implies that it was 1,400 by the end of his term, i would reword this.
- All done except "however"; since that is a word to watch, I'd prefer to keep "but". PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:25, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Can [40] and [42] be archived? Neither are accessible
- Archival won't particularly help there, as both sources are paywalled (or require a user to log-in). FN 40 already had the correct |url-access=subscription parameter but I've added it to FN 42 as well. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:25, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"remarried Nancy" > married Nancy
- Done. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:25, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

[5] brings up a Charles J Turck Scholarship Fund, probably worth mentioning somewhere
- Added mention of that and a similar scholarship at Macalester. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:30, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]