Talk:Charles Irving (surgeon)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:38, 6 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"fl. 1768-1781" per MOS this should almost certainly be "fl. 1768–1781"
Dashes changed throughout.
"British Navy" do you mean Royal Navy?
Fixed.
"£5,000" inflate.
Done, hope the precision works.
"(c. 1738-1800[1])" Should be an en-dash.
Fixed.
" Dumfriesshire,[4]" might be worth stating this is in Scotland here, as it's not a commonly known location.
Added.
"how he became" how Charles Irving became (last "he" was his brother).
Fixed.
"Olaudah Equiano, 1789" not informative caption, perhaps explain why he's relevant here.
I've removed the image.
"to the British Navy in" again, you mean Royal Navy.
Yes.
"in 1770.[8] In January 1771" repetitive.
Reformulated.
"the Admiralty" link.
Done.
"James Lind, Lind " repetitive.
It's "the latter" now, but better suggestions welcome.
First Lord of the Admiralty link.
Done
"Joseph Priestley tasted" context, i.e. "The scientist Joseph..." or similar.
Added
"but ... wanted" non-breaking space between "but" and the ellipsis.
Done.
"the large sum of £5,000" remove "the large sum of" and inflate.
Done, same precision as above.
First Sec -> Permanent Secretary to the Admiralty.
Linking through redirect in case the article is ever split.
"Phipps' 1774" sadly, we now insist on "Phipps's"
Made worse.
"but Lord ..., but to ..." repetitive.
Improved.
"guardacostas" link? Or do we simply mean "coast guards"?
~~I think they were privateers. I haven't found the best possible link yet, will report back or footnote.~~ May have been more or less coast guards, unlike the privateers of 50 years earlier. (some sources if I need them later: [1], [2], [3]). I just put "(coast guards)" after guarda costas for now.
"lost a sum of £3,723" delete "a sum of" and inflate.
Done.
"1779-1781," en-dash.
Done.
"1791 Statistical Account of Scotland " Accounts
No. The first book is just called The Statistical Account of Scotland.
Hoare source, en-dash in year range.
Done.
No geographical categories, even "People from Scotland" or similar?
Added People from Dumfries and Galloway.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:27, 11 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much The Rambling Man, I think I got everything. —Kusma (talk) 20:45, 11 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]