Talk:Charles Faroux/GA1

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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 16:50, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I will gladly review this. The review should be ready shortly. An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 16:50, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'm afraid there are too many serious errors for such a short article. I've compiled them and some more minor things as well.

Infobox should have more information added.
- Just a note, infoboxes aren't even manditory, so I'd rather just delete it.Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:59, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The citation in the lead shouldn't be necessary because the information can be found in the body.
- Moved Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:10, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]
His birthday is never mentioned in the article.
- Cited Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:10, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Rename the career section to something like "Early life and career".
- Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:10, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]
He visited the United States and spent several months in Alaska. [...] He saw the end of the war as a technician for Hispano-Suiza, where he was responsible for the supply of aircraft engines. The citation for these lines does and everything between them does not verify them.
Earwig has found copyright issues with the carom billiards section, which seems to have been copied verbatim from here.
- Considering this is a translation of our French article, it seems high likely this was copied from our article on Faroux.Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:59, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Faroux died in February 1957 in Neuilly-sur-Seine near Paris. The citation here is for an article before his stated death, so naturally it doesn't support this claim.
- Good catch, it was in the wrong place, I've done a shuffle. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:10, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The last section should probably be a table.
- I disagree with this - they generally aren't in table form for won titles.Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:10, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Unfortunately, I must fail this. My condolences. An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 17:17, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! Thanks for taking a look, I've left some comments for a later future nom. Hope you don't mind Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:10, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

My apologies if I was a little overly strict with the review. I hope your future nomination is successful. An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 18:19, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Not at all, there's clearly a few things to work on. Thanks for the review. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:23, 5 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]